Hope (Fallen Angel's Challenge)

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This is for Fallen Angel's challenge :) I had to write a poem based on a picture. The picture is below. Enjoy! :)

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Hope
You opened the drawer of sadness
The drawer I’ve kept shut for so long
You took away all my happiness
You made everything feel wrong
I was almost lost to the darkness
When a glimmer of light appeared
I retrieved myself from helplessness
Walked towards it while everyone cheered
I stepped into it, spread my wings
Flew higher than ever before
I lifted my head to the sunshine, felt like a king
Here everything was open – every window, every door
For at the bottom of that drawer
The drawer filled with mope
Was a small container
A small container filled with hope

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I got third place for this!
Thanks for all your support! ^^


Submitted: May 30, 2009

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Helena Parris

I loved it! It's a beautiful poem.

Sat, May 30th, 2009 3:15pm

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Thank youu! I'm so glad you like it. :) It's my first attempt at a poem and my first time taking part in a challenge :)

Sat, May 30th, 2009 8:29am

fairypiglet97

ohmgoshohmgoshohmgosh.
dis is soooo damn ncie dahling.
i lurveeee the poem loads laods loads...
dis is sooooooo damnn nice!!!!
wah piang. how u manage to write like dat?
i seriously cant figure out...
anyways.
tks so much for ur bear hugs!!
really cheeered me up dear :D
i hope u win win win.
den find many many many sponsers to help u publish ur bks and poems.
and den become top hits.
nxt yr i'll be at the world bk fair looking out for your bks. :D

Sat, May 30th, 2009 3:24pm

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LoL! Thank youu sooo much!! :) *Gives you tons more bear hugs* Love you so much! *More bear hugs* :D

Sat, May 30th, 2009 8:30am

TwilightLuver

This is really good, I like how you used the drawer as the thing that hid your feelings. And I was wondering, can you visit my page and read my poems? I like getting people's thoughts on my poems.

Sat, May 30th, 2009 3:46pm

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Thank youu! :) Okay I'll go and read them now :)

Sat, May 30th, 2009 8:48am

Jordin Renee Phoenix

This is really great. I love the symbolism you had with the drawer. That was what tied it all together and gave the poem the feeling it needed. I love this poem.

Sat, May 30th, 2009 3:49pm

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Thank youu! :)

Sat, May 30th, 2009 9:01am

Fallen Angels

(Dannielle commenting) This is great, this is probably one of my faves :D Good luck !!

Sat, May 30th, 2009 6:25pm

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Thank youu! :)

Sat, May 30th, 2009 6:39pm

JenDamsel

Really beautiful! Great work.
good luck with the challenge, i hope you win because is a really beautiful poem.
XD ~Jenn

Sat, May 30th, 2009 6:41pm

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Thank youu! Thanks soo much! :)

Sat, May 30th, 2009 6:34pm

Amy2609

Wow, and you're only 12?
Damn, wish I could write poetry this good when I was your age!

Sun, May 31st, 2009 1:43am

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THank youu! You have no idea how much this means to me :)

Sun, May 31st, 2009 7:06am

xsamus

Oh wow.
This is beautiful.
:)

Sun, May 31st, 2009 6:29am

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Thank youu! :)

Sun, May 31st, 2009 7:06am

Bee123

WOW! That was great! You should totally win! I loved how you used the drawer as the symbol of sadness and the container as hope! Loved It! You should really write more poems!

Sun, May 31st, 2009 10:45am

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Thank youu! :) Maybe I will write some poems from time to time. :) I've entered "And I Thought Love Didn't Exist..." into a challenge so it probably won't be that soon though :)

Sun, May 31st, 2009 7:29am

tammanna

wow...are you sure this is your first attempt...i loved it from the bottom of my heart...it was marvellous, awesome and everything good :D...actually i am so overjoyed that i cant express it in words...
i am definitely going to give a "i like it vote" and you will undoubtedly win the contest...
you are a great poet...
good luck!!

Sun, May 31st, 2009 1:01pm

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Yep, it's my first attempt. Thank youuu sooo much! :)

Sun, May 31st, 2009 7:26am

Fallen Angels

(becka)
this is amazing!!!!!
do you really not write much poetry...
if not you should write some more.x.x.

Sun, May 31st, 2009 4:56pm

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Thank youu! I usually write novels. :D Maybe I will. Thanks again! :)

Sun, May 31st, 2009 9:33pm

Vampirate

This is great, I love it! It doesn't seem at all like a first attempt. You should definitey do more poetry. :)

Sun, May 31st, 2009 7:03pm

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Thank youu! It is my first attempt at writing a real poem. Before, I've messed about but never really wrote anything. :) Thanks again! :D

Sun, May 31st, 2009 9:34pm

angellynn

Very Good! I'm glad she found hope. I'm in the challenge also.. Good Luck!

Angellynn :D

Mon, June 1st, 2009 2:36am

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Thank youu! :) Good luck to you too! :)

Sun, May 31st, 2009 9:35pm

piggy

I like it. It was a nice poem showing how hope came. I hope you like my stories are you able to read them?

Mon, June 1st, 2009 6:08pm

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Thanks. :) Yes I can read them and I love them! :)

Mon, June 1st, 2009 9:39pm

twilight23

OMG!! I loved it! It was soo good. It makes me wanna cry. Great job!

Fri, June 5th, 2009 9:58pm

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Thank youu! :D

Sat, June 6th, 2009 1:33am

Gadzookziie Spice 99

this is great - thanks for re-commenting

Sat, June 6th, 2009 6:24pm

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Thanks! ;D

Sun, June 7th, 2009 12:39am

CrazyKatieChan

Nice poem!!! =D

Fri, June 19th, 2009 12:24pm

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Thanks! ^^

Fri, June 19th, 2009 6:07am

Gadzookziie Spice 99

This is really great! I'm sorry about the winners not being up yet, I'm tracking down all the people who joined to try and figure out the winners and all! They should be up tomoroow or today! Thanks! Please keep a look out!

Sat, July 4th, 2009 11:55am

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Thanks! ^^ Okay. Thanks for hosting the challenge! It was really fun! ^^

Sat, July 4th, 2009 5:17am

yuu shindemura

Yukie: whoa! this maybe the greatest poem you've made to this date, yet! Mika-chan!

Syrrh: it's very honest and a play of words and thoughts that binds congruent and whole!

Sapphire: i like it.

Eriza: very much a thought of a heartbroken girl, and gained her strength back! very nice, Mika-chan! keep flying even if this is your experience or just fiction, i'll definitely cheer for you!;)

Macie: the picture of Misuzu Kamio adds very much to the whole poem, too!;)

Sun, July 5th, 2009 12:57pm

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Thanks, thanks, thanks and thanks! XD I just love reading your comments! It always makes my day! :)

Sun, July 5th, 2009 9:11am

Brian W

To see the picture and then write a poem. You have done a great job. Keep writing you are good

Mon, July 6th, 2009 11:15am

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Thanks! :)

Mon, July 6th, 2009 6:04am

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