The Trumpets

I like that a lot. One can debate the sentiment, but you have a pleasing mastery of words.

I liked it. good job

i loved it until the last stanza :D

:D Nice :D

Great

Mike,

I am sure other military types will know just what you mean, in all of its particulars. You have done a good job of tapping into that almost indefinable sense that one gains from military experiences. It is, I think, unique to that sphere. And I believe your poem operates at a level that can touch those without such experience too. That is hard to accomplish. Thanks for your work!

From a veteran--well done. And the final line says it all. Short, sweet, and very much to the point. Great job!!!

As someone with family in the military, I was very touched by this poem. Thank you for sharing your words :)

Great job!:)

great way to honor servicemen

Good writing. As said before it did get a little shaky near the end. Overall I enjoyed reading it and it had some beautiful metaphors.


If you have a second would you mind critiquing my new short story? I always return the favor.

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Really great style man.

I'm trying to develop my own style when it comes to writing so I wouldn't mind getting some feedback from someone like you on my first submission to this site. Thanks.

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Beutiful I luv it!!!

Very moving and despite it not being graphically descriptive it still paints all those horrific battles and blood shed in my mind.

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I wanted to find the writers on the last page of Booksie. I wanted to find the last person on the last page. I found you and the above piece. Awesome! I am a veteran, but I am not a combat veteran. I believe you must be one of the original posts. It is a powerful piece and reminds me of military poetry of days gone. Thank you my friend of the pen for awesome early Booksie piece.

Bravo. Excellent. Very meaningful. I've heard the trumpets in more than one way.