The Trumpets

I like that a lot. One can debate the sentiment, but you have a pleasing mastery of words.

I liked it. good job

i loved it until the last stanza :D

:D Nice :D

Great

Mike,

I am sure other military types will know just what you mean, in all of its particulars. You have done a good job of tapping into that almost indefinable sense that one gains from military experiences. It is, I think, unique to that sphere. And I believe your poem operates at a level that can touch those without such experience too. That is hard to accomplish. Thanks for your work!

From a veteran--well done. And the final line says it all. Short, sweet, and very much to the point. Great job!!!

As someone with family in the military, I was very touched by this poem. Thank you for sharing your words :)

Great job!:)

great way to honor servicemen

Good writing. As said before it did get a little shaky near the end. Overall I enjoyed reading it and it had some beautiful metaphors.


If you have a second would you mind critiquing my new short story? I always return the favor.

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Really great style man.

I'm trying to develop my own style when it comes to writing so I wouldn't mind getting some feedback from someone like you on my first submission to this site. Thanks.

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Beutiful I luv it!!!

Very moving and despite it not being graphically descriptive it still paints all those horrific battles and blood shed in my mind.

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I wanted to find the writers on the last page of Booksie. I wanted to find the last person on the last page. I found you and the above piece. Awesome! I am a veteran, but I am not a combat veteran. I believe you must be one of the original posts. It is a powerful piece and reminds me of military poetry of days gone. Thank you my friend of the pen for awesome early Booksie piece.