Saviour of Grace

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Literary Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is just another poem. I wrote it for someone close to me who is going through some tough times and feels that this is the only way. I have found it hard to reach them so this is how I can express it.

Do you like it?

The scars you wear like bracelets.

How does it feel to you?

The blade that runs across your wrist.

Does it make you feel warm,

or is it as cold as the steel from which it is formed?

Does the blood that flow comfort you,

or does it only make you cry?

Do you feel like you are stronger,

or do you feel more pathetic and weak?

Does it make you feel more alive,

or does it make you only want to die?

I wish you could give me these answers,

to questions of actions so vehement in nature.

For I do not want them for my own considerations,

but rather bring me closer to you.

If I could, I would grow wings.

Not to fly away from all of this.

But to be your angel figure.

Take your hand, smile, and we both know it will all be alright...


Submitted: March 26, 2008

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poewhit

Poem gives alot of hope

Wed, March 26th, 2008 12:26pm

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thank you

Wed, March 26th, 2008 10:25am

natalieashley

The whole cutting yourself idea has always been disturbing to me but I like that you wrote it for someone you care about.
And I absolutely LOVE this part:

"If I could, I would grow wings.
Not to fly away from all of this.
But to be your angel figure.
Take your hand, smile, and we both know it will all be alright..."

Thu, March 27th, 2008 7:29am

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That is my favorite part as well. To have the whole poem be negative from the start and in the last verse, I wanted it to sound hopeful, as in maybe there can be something done here to help.

Thu, March 27th, 2008 1:00am

XBrokenHeartedX

So beautiful! This is one of my favorite poems. It really makes you think about the questions. Have being an emo myself I understand directly the view, and it really makes me think about what I did. It's a beautiful poem, holding so much emotion and power. I especially love the last stanza, especially "If I could, I would grow wings. Not to fly away from all this." Because that's what most people would do. Lovely:)

Fri, March 28th, 2008 5:14am

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Thank you. That means a lot. I myself could have been considered emo per say and I had how it made me feel when I did what I did. Now I am trying to understand what makes this person that I care about do what they do so I can help them and be there for them.

Thu, March 27th, 2008 10:19pm

seesawmae

wow, this is so beautiful!! You really wrote this well!! Me, going some hard times have cut myself, and i guess i can try and explain my point of view about it, so it can help you reach to this person you care about. I'm not emo, but i guess it doesn't matter anyways, i'm not judgmental or anything. So i'll try to explain this as best i can, and i hope you can understand.
cutting, yes i liked it, it made me feel so much better, to take my emotional pain and make it physical, to see the pain instead of just feel it inside. It was like a relief from my problems. I didn't feel either cold or warm. It makes me feel more alive, it's not anything to do with suicide, it's just a coping method. The blood reinforces the life, and it's good, i like the blood, the more the better. I feel stronger.
anyways i donno if this is anything you wanted to hear, if not just ignore it!
for me this is my reality, i used to cut, but now i don't have any emotion anymore, so i don't do it, it actually hurt the last time, so i've stopped, but that was only a week ago, so i could once again start again. anyways, great poem, it was very lovely.

Fri, April 4th, 2008 11:37pm

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You may totally take this comment the wrong way, but believe me, that is not my intention. Do you talk to the people whom you care about and who care about you about this? Or do you find it easier to open up to people that you have never met before? I'm not trying to pry into your personal life, that is for you. But I do appreciate you telling me this though. It helps me understand what the person I care about is doing to themselves and how I might be able to help them.

Fri, April 4th, 2008 7:34pm

seesawmae

Ok, to answer your questions:
I talk to a couple people I care about, ones I can really trust and I know that they would be there for me no matter what, but I did find it a million times easier to talk to people I didn’t know, and probably would never meet.
If you do try to talk to this person, don’t tell them to stop, they won’t it’s not that easy, try to be understanding of what they say, if you turn their words into something bad, they won’t want to talk to you anymore. Well I guess that’s all I have to say, and just so you know, everyone is always looking for a friend who will always come over when they are having a hard time (like if they call you in tears, saying their alone, you go and visit them) I’m not suggesting anything, I don’t know your situation. Anyways hope everything works out for you and the person you care about.

Sat, April 5th, 2008 5:45pm

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Given the opportunity I know what it is I have to do, it's just being able to be given or to create such an opportunity. I know I can't just tell them to stop, that hardly works in any situation in my experience. It's them who has to want to stop and I'm sure it is like an addiction. But as the effect of a small cut no longer helps the 'pain' and they start to get bigger cuts, or more frequent, it becomes more dangerous. That is what worries me more then anything. I've never had that kind of relationship with the person, where we are able to discuss anything together, but I am trying. I've got to try..

Sat, April 5th, 2008 12:43pm

KinkyBootz

One of the best emotional poems i've heard... Take a look at mine, They are about hatred and anger :)

~KinkyBootz~

Thu, April 10th, 2008 1:27pm

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Thanks. I'm glad you were able to see what I put into it. That's rewarding for me.
-Mike

Thu, April 10th, 2008 10:32am

snowbelle

a very nice poem showing you care. its not always easy to tell someone how much you care but this poem does it very well.
take care
snow

Wed, April 23rd, 2008 7:19pm

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Thank you. It is the hardest thing to do sometimes, especially when you have never had that type of relationship with the person before.

Wed, April 23rd, 2008 1:06pm

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