Blindside Nightmare

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  No Houses

Something that happened to a friend

Minding your own business, just trying to get along

When a flash of lightning, a blink of the eye,

And everything's different, life changed forever

You never saw it coming, this blindside nightmare

Brings you to your knees, never ending,

Trapped in this downer with little hope for tomorrow

You never in a million years would have predicted this,

A bad dream that goes on and on and on

Black surrounds you; what is color?  You've forgotten

 


Submitted: October 09, 2014

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kuriyama

your emotion are coming through this !!

Thu, October 9th, 2014 2:11pm

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Thank you much!

Thu, October 9th, 2014 7:17am

J. Edgar Cooper

A really good poem you've written here Mike. What I like about your poem, is the fact that you highlight so well how things can change in life in the mere blink of the eye. Like how you talk about this event that happened to your friend, it can't be very nice at all for anyone to go through something bad in their life and I like how you wrote "And everything's different, life changed forever." This again clearly shows how circumstances can change so quickly and how life can take unexpected turns that we would have never imagined. What stood out for me was the part that read "A bad dream that goes on and on and on." I can only begin to imagine that whatever your friend went through, that it was exactly like how you described it... A nightmare that just seems to go on and on forever without signs of stopping. I like how you end the poem with "Black surrounds you; what colour is it? You've forgotten." To me, it suggests that what was once normal for your friend has now been turned upside down, into something that is no longer familiar and into something almost unknown. I sense maybe even confusion at what has happened, at why it has happened and what brought it on and so on. I apologise if I'm rambling on, I just like to try and pick good parts out of people's poems to analyse. :) Great job anyway Mike with this! Please keep up the good work. Take great care and all the very best to you. :)

Thu, October 9th, 2014 6:24pm

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Thank you; and I guess I was also writing about myself, as I was knocked around a bit in a car accident; and everything I'd known up to that point went bye-bye. So I have first-hand knowledge of how fast thing can change!

Thu, October 9th, 2014 11:32am

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