A thousand thousand
diamonds spread on
black velvet across forever
and ever.
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Cold winter nights,
gazing skyward, with big
lost eyes, just to stare
and to think.
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All senses trained up
toward the heavens and
toward the future,
watching.
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Peaceful, like numberless
waves on the beach
or the soft song of a
violin at sundown.
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Somewhere, clouds swirl
and rocks fall, the
world for worlds pushing
ever outwards.
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Below, held by a
holy quadnity to
the ground and wishing
for the moon.
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Gems and fancifuls
craved and desired
pale in comparison
to the luster that has watched.
Submitted: March 08, 2012
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Comments
soft, gentle and beautifully descriptive poetry conjours up lovely visual images.
Fri, March 9th, 2012 5:03pmYour poem conveys so much elegance, creativity and emotions. It's so descriptive, and it shows that you really put a lot of thought when writing it. :D
Sat, March 10th, 2012 2:08amPretty. Quiet and pretty. Big out there! And silent.
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:) it is very a surprisingly vivid poem; brings to mind a loneliness shared among Man and stars:)
Sun, March 11th, 2012 5:19am'or the soft song of a violin at sundown.' that's a good line! good poem.
Mon, March 12th, 2012 2:30pmhey you're good at this. very peaceful and beautiful. very nice, ma'am!
Wed, March 14th, 2012 1:59pmThis is soooo good haha :) you're an amazing writer. KMU when you post something else hehe :) Also, i have just posted a poem 'Just something for him'. I hope you can read it as it is my first poem i have written and need a lot of people to give me their opinion. Thanks and again, this is really good :) xo
Thu, March 15th, 2012 10:37amThat was very well done.
Fri, March 16th, 2012 1:22amI love this poem, it reminds me of my long nights staring out of my bedroom window...
Good job!
I love the meanings behind your analogies. They are very graceful and your word variety is just amazing! I love how you separated each section! Your poem is very calming and inspiring to me. Your descriptions are amazing, i love the 'black velvet with diamonds' one!Most of us do ponder the future and just stare off getting lost in the never ending night skies. your poem represents these feelings amazingly! you are an amazing and unique writer! great job!
Sun, March 18th, 2012 4:44pmoh wow this is really good :) KMU please and also i just posted chapter 2 of 'If Every Day Was A Fairy Tale'. It would be muchly appreciated if you would have the time to read it and give me your honest opinion, but overall this is really good aha :) xo
Tue, April 17th, 2012 11:32pmHave you written a Fairy Tail yet?
Fri, September 7th, 2012 12:46pmLove this, gives a wonderful image and well written, nice work :) xxxx
Wed, September 19th, 2012 12:24pmThis is really good! Some lovely comparisions there! Keep up the good work!! :)
Tue, September 25th, 2012 8:45amIt's really imagery. Well done.
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You have an elegant touch when it comes to this poem! Very well crafted and so beautiful to read. Very nice job!
Fri, March 9th, 2012 1:43amAuthor
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Yay! I try!
Thu, March 8th, 2012 5:46pm