Ad Astra
Poem by: Miss Trevize
A thousand thousand
diamonds spread on
black velvet across forever
and ever.
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Cold winter nights,
gazing skyward, with big
lost eyes, just to stare
and to think.
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All senses trained up
toward the heavens and
toward the future,
watching.
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Peaceful, like numberless
waves on the beach
or the soft song of a
violin at sundown.
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Somewhere, clouds swirl
and rocks fall, the
world for worlds pushing
ever outwards.
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Below, held by a
holy quadnity to
the ground and wishing
for the moon.
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Gems and fancifuls
craved and desired
pale in comparison
to the luster that has watched.
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You have an elegant touch when it comes to this poem! Very well crafted and so beautiful to read. Very nice job!
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Yay! I try!
You're very creative! and I'm glad you stopped by my page. it's very beautiful to read! Well done!
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Thank you so much!
soft, gentle and beautifully descriptive poetry conjours up lovely visual images.
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Thank you for the read, ma'am! From a talented poet, that means a lot.
Your poem strikes at me on many levels. I had a love of astronomy as a teen and spend hours in the country lying on a blanket on the darkest of nights looking up and thinking. I love feeling both infinately important and insignificant at the same time.
Your poem touches on all those feelings!
Thank you so much!
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Haha! Glad to hear it! Thanks for the read!
Your poem conveys so much elegance, creativity and emotions. It's so descriptive, and it shows that you really put a lot of thought when writing it. :D
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Thank you so much! I do really try.
Pretty. Quiet and pretty. Big out there! And silent.
Best regards, Wilbur/Connie
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Sure is...sure is...
Thanks Wilbur/Connie, for the read!
:) it is very a surprisingly vivid poem; brings to mind a loneliness shared among Man and stars:)
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Thanks for the read!
'or the soft song of a violin at sundown.' that's a good line! good poem.
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Oh, thank you! I just tried to think of a few nice things to hear, and in what ambiance.
hey you're good at this. very peaceful and beautiful. very nice, ma'am!
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Thank you so much!
This is soooo good haha :) you're an amazing writer. KMU when you post something else hehe :) Also, i have just posted a poem 'Just something for him'. I hope you can read it as it is my first poem i have written and need a lot of people to give me their opinion. Thanks and again, this is really good :) xo
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Thanks for the read!
And sure! I'll read your poem!
That was very well done.
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Well, thanks! I tried my best!
I love this poem, it reminds me of my long nights staring out of my bedroom window...
Good job!
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Haha...yay! Thanks for the read, Vanchez!
I love the meanings behind your analogies. They are very graceful and your word variety is just amazing! I love how you separated each section! Your poem is very calming and inspiring to me. Your descriptions are amazing, i love the 'black velvet with diamonds' one!Most of us do ponder the future and just stare off getting lost in the never ending night skies. your poem represents these feelings amazingly! you are an amazing and unique writer! great job!
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Wow! I don't even know what to say! Thank you so much!
I love the big lost eyes, wishing for the moon, and the whole last stanza. This is a really enchanting, picture-perfect peace with a splendid title. You should be proud :)
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Oh, thank you so much!
oh wow this is really good :) KMU please and also i just posted chapter 2 of 'If Every Day Was A Fairy Tale'. It would be muchly appreciated if you would have the time to read it and give me your honest opinion, but overall this is really good aha :) xo
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Alright I'll take a look! Thanks for the read!
Have you written a Fairy Tail yet?
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No?
Love this, gives a wonderful image and well written, nice work :) xxxx
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Well, I appreciate it.
This is really good! Some lovely comparisions there! Keep up the good work!! :)
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Will do. Thank you so much!
It's really imagery. Well done.
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Thank you!
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