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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Just thought I would try my hand at poetry! It makes me so happy to read, I thought I might as well write some!

A thousand thousand

diamonds spread on

black velvet across forever

and ever.

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Cold winter nights,

gazing skyward, with big

lost eyes, just to stare

and to think.

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All senses trained up

toward the heavens and

toward the future,

watching.

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Peaceful, like numberless

waves on the beach

or the soft song of a

violin at sundown.

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Somewhere, clouds swirl

and rocks fall, the

world for worlds pushing

ever outwards.

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Below, held by a

holy quadnity to

the ground and wishing

for the moon.

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Gems and fancifuls

craved and desired

pale in comparison

to the luster that has watched.


Submitted: March 08, 2012

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Victor Darnell Hadnot

You have an elegant touch when it comes to this poem! Very well crafted and so beautiful to read. Very nice job!

Fri, March 9th, 2012 1:43am

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Yay! I try!

Thu, March 8th, 2012 5:46pm

BITSxOFxKINKY

soft, gentle and beautifully descriptive poetry conjours up lovely visual images.

Fri, March 9th, 2012 5:03pm

Author
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Thank you for the read, ma'am! From a talented poet, that means a lot.

Fri, March 9th, 2012 9:07am

Kyoko96

Your poem conveys so much elegance, creativity and emotions. It's so descriptive, and it shows that you really put a lot of thought when writing it. :D

Sat, March 10th, 2012 2:08am

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Thank you so much! I do really try.

Fri, March 9th, 2012 6:15pm

Wilbur

Pretty. Quiet and pretty. Big out there! And silent.
Best regards, Wilbur/Connie

Sun, March 11th, 2012 3:16am

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Sure is...sure is...

Thanks Wilbur/Connie, for the read!

Sat, March 10th, 2012 6:18pm

didaskaloi

:) it is very a surprisingly vivid poem; brings to mind a loneliness shared among Man and stars:)

Sun, March 11th, 2012 5:19am

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Thanks for the read!

Sun, March 11th, 2012 7:55am

bobby byzell

'or the soft song of a violin at sundown.' that's a good line! good poem.

Mon, March 12th, 2012 2:30pm

Author
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Oh, thank you! I just tried to think of a few nice things to hear, and in what ambiance.

Mon, March 12th, 2012 3:57pm

brucek

hey you're good at this. very peaceful and beautiful. very nice, ma'am!

Wed, March 14th, 2012 1:59pm

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Thank you so much!

Wed, March 14th, 2012 8:33am

cutie309

This is soooo good haha :) you're an amazing writer. KMU when you post something else hehe :) Also, i have just posted a poem 'Just something for him'. I hope you can read it as it is my first poem i have written and need a lot of people to give me their opinion. Thanks and again, this is really good :) xo

Thu, March 15th, 2012 10:37am

Author
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Thanks for the read!

And sure! I'll read your poem!

Thu, March 15th, 2012 5:33am

Steve Fettinger

That was very well done.

Fri, March 16th, 2012 1:22am

Author
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Well, thanks! I tried my best!

Thu, March 15th, 2012 6:26pm

Vanchez

I love this poem, it reminds me of my long nights staring out of my bedroom window...
Good job!

Sat, March 17th, 2012 3:25pm

Author
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Haha...yay! Thanks for the read, Vanchez!

Sat, March 17th, 2012 8:40am

onlyinred

I love the meanings behind your analogies. They are very graceful and your word variety is just amazing! I love how you separated each section! Your poem is very calming and inspiring to me. Your descriptions are amazing, i love the 'black velvet with diamonds' one!Most of us do ponder the future and just stare off getting lost in the never ending night skies. your poem represents these feelings amazingly! you are an amazing and unique writer! great job!

Sun, March 18th, 2012 4:44pm

Author
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Wow! I don't even know what to say! Thank you so much!

Sun, March 18th, 2012 9:54am

cutie309

oh wow this is really good :) KMU please and also i just posted chapter 2 of 'If Every Day Was A Fairy Tale'. It would be muchly appreciated if you would have the time to read it and give me your honest opinion, but overall this is really good aha :) xo

Tue, April 17th, 2012 11:32pm

Author
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Alright I'll take a look! Thanks for the read!

Wed, April 18th, 2012 8:51am

Steve Fettinger

Have you written a Fairy Tail yet?

Fri, September 7th, 2012 12:46pm

Author
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No?

Mon, December 10th, 2012 10:35am

ElizaZenith

Love this, gives a wonderful image and well written, nice work :) xxxx

Wed, September 19th, 2012 12:24pm

Author
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Well, I appreciate it.

Mon, December 10th, 2012 10:35am

Kalika997

This is really good! Some lovely comparisions there! Keep up the good work!! :)

Tue, September 25th, 2012 8:45am

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Will do. Thank you so much!

Mon, December 10th, 2012 10:36am

Georgi Daverov

It's really imagery. Well done.

Sat, January 26th, 2013 8:22am

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Thank you!

Thu, April 18th, 2013 3:25pm

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