Glass Heart, Restful Night

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is a bad poem, I think, for one big reason. Have you ever tried to explain a dream to someone? It never really conveys the feeling. Something magical or terrifying happens sometimes in our sleeping subconscious, something that slowly fades once we get up. I feel asleep last night and had a magical dream, and now I'm trying to share it. But this isn't really it. How can I express human emotion with mere words?

A song

in a dream

must come

from somewhere.

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Floating about,

in the nebulous

cloud of unknowing,

unwritten.

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The story told

in sleep, the

soothing voice

of the ballad.

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No memories of

the tale,

no thoughts of

imagining it.

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The singer,

lovely in her

womanhood,

soothing.

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Quiet, flowing

like a southern

summer creek,

in the daytime.

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The impossible

glides in a lullaby

from lips,

plain and unadorned.

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A head, dark hair

leans on her shoulder

as the song fills

a quiet, happy heart.

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Never has a

ballad truly

reached the ears

of the dreamer before.

-------------------

And now,

in sleep,

like a flower,

music blooms.


Submitted: April 07, 2012

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Kalika997

this poem is really good! i read your description and i know the feeling, its like trying to explain the meaning of life, impossible, so you make it as close as you can and hope it makes sense.

Sat, April 7th, 2012 7:26pm

Author
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Well, thanks! It was quite an experience, and thanks for reading!

Sat, April 7th, 2012 6:35pm

Deathstix

This is great! I love the types of words you chose for this piece! great job^^

Tue, April 10th, 2012 11:09pm

Author
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Oh, thank you so much! I tried hard.

Tue, April 10th, 2012 6:13pm

BITSxOFxKINKY

im not sure why you think this is a bad poem i know in your mind it may not have matched the vision as you see it but i think it works very well and there are a multitude of beautiful sentances within it

Wed, April 18th, 2012 6:50pm

Author
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Well, thanks! Still, it's not quiet the right feeling.

Wed, April 18th, 2012 4:48pm

sharmaine1991

Very nice poem. Flows wonderfully. There is something thats calming about it x

Sat, May 19th, 2012 1:55am

Author
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Well, thanks!

Sat, May 19th, 2012 12:18pm

Vikrant

How beautifully written. The words, flaw, presentation everything is very nice. A good poem.

Sat, May 19th, 2012 5:49pm

Author
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Er...thanks, Vikrant.

Sat, May 19th, 2012 12:19pm

Steve Fettinger

Good poem, very good.

Fri, June 8th, 2012 12:02am

Author
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Well, thanks! People seem to like this one!

Sat, June 16th, 2012 2:58pm

ashley21

I like it. ive had the same problem with explaining dreams, the other person never really gets how 'big' it was to me or how much it meant.
anyway, you're very talented.
Check out my new novel, A Mermaids Journey plz. :) I really think you'll enjoy this one. :))

Wed, June 27th, 2012 10:51pm

Author
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Will do.

Mon, December 10th, 2012 10:34am

KinG WeBStaR

Awesome job
You are a excellent writer .
If you want check out my work when you get a chance.
By the way I seen you on someone comment and I said Damn she is fine :)


Love Da KinG

Thu, August 30th, 2012 10:49pm

Author
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Well, thanks! I'll do that.

Mon, December 10th, 2012 10:35am

authorfcharles

This poem is beautifully written and it would be a pleasure to promote it under the poet feature tab in my company website. If you are interested please send me a quick email with the topic "Free Promotions at TPL" at: thepoeticlounge@gmail.com. To me CEO of TPL Publications -Fiordaliza Charles.

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