Poem by: mommy3
fantasy, picture, challenge
Submitted: January 22, 2010
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Wow now that was really great and it went with the picture perfectly. I liked how you talked about that inner part of you that you were trying to keep under control. Nice emotions in there. Good luck in the challenge Jessica. Excellent write. Susan :)
Thank you. I am so glad you enjoyed this poem. I came up with it at the top of my head. I love picture challenges. Thanks for the comment really appreciate it. Jessica :)
This is really good Jessica. Picture challenges seem to come easily for you. It fit perfectly with your given picture. I on the other hand, am not that happy about mine. I tried my best though. I think its the fantasy ones I have problems with. Check it out. Lol! Give me your honest opinion. I can take it! Thanks hon! Its called Breaking Dawn.
Hehe That's so funny I just checked out your poem. I loved it. (honest) Thank you so much. I just love picture challenges for some odd reason I can easily write and come up with something. Thanks for commenting too. Jessica :)
Wow this was excellent Jessica... I loved how you talk about confront the inner demon with in and your right no matter how hard we try, we can and do fail at times. Excellent piece of poetry, much better than mine in my opinion lol... Good luck in the challenge.
Oh Thank you so much. I am glad you enjoyed reading it. Thanks for reading and commenting. Jessica :)
It's up already?! You are so fast. I love it. It matches the picture and the emotion within each line really speaks out to the reader. Great work!
Hehe Thanks Yeah I usually come up with the picture challenges fast. This was just came up at the top of my head. Thanks for commenting and reading. Jessica :)
I agree with everyone, it really captures the picture. As usual I will tell you good luck!
But am I the only one who thinks she looks a little Like Angelina Jolie?
No I thought that too. I am not really sure if she is or not. I loved the picture and the challenge was fun to do. thanks for reading and commenting Jessica :)
I loved this poem because of the refreshing honesty and emotion displayed by the reader,i can almost imagine that there is something within all of us that prevents us from achieving our objectives,holding us all back i call this repressed emotional distress disorder.
Your play on words are wonderful it is so elloquently written with the spooky picture a perfect connection and marinates like a creamy south bavarian gravy sauce cooked with a nice piece of steak.
Thank you so much. I am glad you loved this piece. I just came up with when I looked at the picture. For some odd reason things come up with the top of my head when I do picture challenges. Thanks for commenting and reading. I have about five more challenges to do. Jessica :)
Nice poem. But technically, let the demon out and it wreaks havoc or keep the demon in and go insane. At least that's what I've heard about people who develop psychological problems like schizophrenia.
Sorry for rambling but as I said before with a little more, nice poem giving a clear picture in my head with a little darkness to it :).
Thank you. Jessica :)
PS: The picture kind of looks like Angelina Jolie
Yeah I know. I thought it was weird, but the person hosting the challenge gave me this picture. Jessica :)
You are more than welcome dear and thanks alot for reviewing my new project SOLENTVILLE it has been accepted by a major publisher but i wanted to allow new readers to have a taste of this book before it goes to print.
There will be so many changes and it might be unrecognisable later on this year when it is in a book form.
Oh wow. Congratulations you deserve it. You are a very talented writer. I am so happy for you. Jessica :)
Great poem. Love it. It's amazing what can spark a poem, short story or any other piece of writing. Only the creative know.
Thank you. I am glad you enjoyed this poem. Jessica :)
one of your best, loved it, well done Jessica, your poetry has such darkness and luscious danger twisting through the lines. I actually believe dark poetry is the thing for you, especially when you use a slice of sexual menace too, makes my hair stand on end sometimes as you draw the reader into the poem. More like this please Jessica, you are at your best when writing such things.
Oh thank you so much. I never thought I would be good with dark poetry. Weird since I am not like this at all. I am pretty much a happy going person. Hmmm... now I wonder how I am really good at writing dark poetry. Oh well. Thanks for such a nice compliment. I will look forward to reading your amazing story of Wizard's Wrath. Can't wait to read what happens next. Jessica :)
Wow *Applauds* I agree with Paul – this is one of your best! In my opinion, it's a perfect representation of the picture and I'm sure you'll do brilliantly in the challenge! Great work =)
OMG. Thank you so much.(blushes) I am so happy that you enjoyed this poem. I loved the picture. I hope so too. Thanks Jessica :D
This was very well done, and so much improvement is visible in your poetry.
But I wonder if your lines are too long, maybe if you break them a bit, it might help increase the fluidity of your poem.
But wonderful and very skillful.
Thank you and thanks for the advice. I really appreciate it. thanks for reading and commenting. Jessica :)
Hey, this is a great poem! And with such a difficult picture, too. Well, O-K, I think it's a hard one. Heck, I found nearly all the pictures hard ^-^'' But you did an amazing job!! It really captures this internal struggle and totally reflects what's in the pic. Nice work :3 and good luck in the challenge!
Thank you. I too thought the picture was hard. I had to really think of this one. I was wracking my brain and getting frustrated so I started to take a break. That's when this poem hit me. I am glad you enjoyed reading this poem. thank you for reading and commenting. Jessica :D
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This is such an amazing poem
you are an amazing poet :)
like forbidden said i liked how you talked about confronting the inner deamon :)
Thank you. Oh really. I just saw this picture and came up with the poem. We all struggle with inner demons from time to time. Thank you for reading and commenting. Jessica :D
Hey, just wanted to congratulate you on taking runner for 2nd place in AvidReader's picture challenge. I checked out this poem and I got to say I like it. Thanks for writing it.
I also submitted a short story for the challenge and would appreciate it if you could check it out and drop a comment if you haven't done so already. The title is Where Dreams May Take Us.
Grats again and happy writing/reading. :)
Thank you I will read yours real soon. Thanks for reading and commenting Jessica :D
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