Poem by: mommy3
picture, challenge, basement
Submitted: December 15, 2009
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My Goodness Mommy3 shocking and as dark as it gets. Great read. Won't ruin it for others. You scared the daylights out of me with this one. Good luck with the contest you got my vote. Susan :)
Thanks i am glad you enjoyed reading this. :D
Oh gosh, this gave me cold chills. It's sick and beautiful at the same time. Really dark and desolate. Nice job. Way to make someone's spine shiver.
Thanks. I saw this picture and just immediately thought of this. Thanks for commenting. :D
Gruesome, dark, and morbid. Not really my type of poem but it's definitely a strong write. Really brought some painful images to mind.
Dark and twisted. You get my vote and good luck :)
Thank you. :D
Great last line as I was not expecting that! usually I can second guess what is happening, you got me good. In relation to matching words with the picture, first rate, you certainly interpreted the distress and anguish and the final slice of sickening horror. bad enough to be in that situation, but the brother angle, you hit hard girl, should be win by KO.
OMG Thank you so much for your nice compliment. I am glad you enjoyed reading the poem. :D
Oh my God! That last line was so unexpected! Great poem!!!
Thank you. I am glad I surprised you. he he :D
Oh how awful! Nice though.
Wow...I have never ever felt this way EVER after reading anything! I feel so so shocked. You scared the living daylight out of me and ended it perfectly with the word, brother.
This poem has to win the contest! :D
Thank you so much. I am glad you got a good scare. he he :D
The last line actually had me gasping aloud. I was not expecting that! A dark poem but a good one nevertheless. Good luck in the contest :)
Thank you. :D
Whoa didn't see that last line coming, man just gives me the chills thinking about her trapped down there and the one responsible is her brother. You have my vote.
yeah I am so glad this poem gave you the chills. This is what I wanted the readers to feel like. I was trying to come up with a poem for this picture and them bam it just hit me. Thanks for commenting and have a happy holiday. :D
A sad, vivid and very real piece of brilliant writing.
If only we could stop people from feeling this way in real life.
I know it is sad that this happens real life. I feel so bad for the victims that have ever gone through this. Thanks for commenting.
This was very dark and sinister a little like my story THE HONEY TRAP although your descriptions wer far more intense and colourful in a depraved way.
The victim can get no release from her torturous predicament what's more it's her brother that's doing it how bad can that be? well done on a grim write
Thanks. Once I saw this picture I immediately came up with this poem. :)
This was very sick and very eerie.
You have done it wonderfully.
Thanks. yes I agree it was but this is what I came up with for this picture. I think the picture itself is scary too. Jessica
A nice dark tale with an unexpected twist for a finale. You hooked the reader into thinking it was another monster from the outside. Clever!
Thank you. The picture was really scary too me so this is what I came up with. Thanks for reading and commenting. Jessica :)
100/100! I love all of your poems and short stories! Please write more!
Oh you are such a sweetheart. Thank you so much. Jessica :)
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