Short Story by: mommy3
horror, death, cannibalism, woods, camping
Submitted: January 07, 2010
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Please comment. This is my first time ever writing a horror story.
Sam and Dean? Supernatural will never be the same for me again... lol
This was err...i won't say delightful...entertaining is a better word.. :)
Thanks. I am glad you enjoyed. :D
Wow, definitely a horror story! Very creepy, though interesting to read. I agree with TheWildOne – Supernatural will never be the same again :D Nice work!
Thanks I am glad you liked it. I came up with this after watching Supernatural. Thanks for commenting. :D
OH!! I loved it, I loved it! This was deliciously horrible, and I will tell you when the winners are posted on Valentines Day.
Thank you. I am so glad you loved it. Yeah *jumping up and down* sorry had to much sugar hehe Glad you enjoyed. thanks for hosting this challenge. :D
yes, certainly a horror story, think I would have liked more blood and violence and sexual menace: teasing;o) I was actually looking for them to think up some cunning plan of escape, Zach should have used the knife to slash at the throat, more effective in my experience. well written, did not like the word 'meanwhile' when you switched to the woodland nutters, a simple intro would suffice, I know graphic comics would portray this story well, good luck with the comp. Nice profile picture: good tan;o)
Thanks Yes this was my first horror story. So I tried my best thanks for enjoying it. Appreciate the comment too. :D
Hey you wrote this well. I don't particularly enjoy horrors because late at nught it causes my imagination to run wild... But you defiantly did a good job, kind of sickening the fact that they eat other people but well written all the same... Plus the way you left it, there could be a possibility to ad onto it. Good luck in the challenge
Thanks Yeah I might add on to it. Not really sure. I see what I can do. I have other challenges to do. Thanks for commenting. :D
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Wow really creepy and it had me biting my nails. The story was really well written. I thought it wonderful. I hope you win the challenge. Giving you an I like it and keeping my fingers crossed. Susan :)
Oh wow thank you so much. I thought your story was well written and scary too. Good luck in challenge also. thanks for commenting. I am glad you enjoyed the story. :D
frickin scared the hell out of me! just as they were engaged as well! really good! plz warn me if it is gonna b scary i will still read it but i would make sure i wont b4 i go 2 bed like i just done! reading a horror is scary wen about 2 go 2 sleep but anyways really gd, hope u do well in the challenge
Thanks I am glad you thought this was scary Glad you enjoyed. Oh I will warn you next time to let you know if it will be scary. hehe Hope you can have a good-nights sleep. thanks for commenting. :D
It doesn't read as if it is your first. It is really creepy and awesome as well. You have a very spooky imagination. Loved it.
Oh wow. Thank you so much. I am glad you loved it. thanks for commenting. :D
Whoa, this was so intense. I had to skip over some parts sorry lol. I'm just not into gory horror, but this was very well written. Good job, and I agree with everyone, very creepy.
yeah I know I kind of cringed when I wrote some of the horror down I mean I can read and watch it but it really is not my kind of genre. I did this for the challenge the person holding the challenge wanted it as gory as possible this is what I came up with :D
Wow! flippin creepy! Hope you win, lots o' luck!
Haha Thanks :D
wow, that was creepy, i got goosebumps all over me haha
this is really good :)
Thank you. :D
Omigosh! You are going to give me nightmares! Really good story btw!
Hehe Thanks :D
omg girl!!this story was freaky i hate scarry stories but i read it for you ehh!! JEJE lol well i really got chills i swear lol well i guess it was preatty scary *sniff *sniff NIGHTMARES *sniff *sniff lol love it!!:D
hehe sorry it was for a challenge. I am not really into horror as well just wanted to see if I could write this. thanks for commenting. :)
Love it! It was an fantastic story and has send some shivers trough my bones (and that's a good thing lol) Btw, sorry for not being around lately, school has been eating all my free time >.
That's okay. I am glad you loved it. hehe it was suppose to make you shiver and be scared thanks for commenting. :D
I am a huge horror fan and I can say that this was a great piece of horror writing. I've read that you're not that much into horror but I can say you have a wicked imagination to it, and you may want to cultivate that talent. Maybe you should try to write less bloddy horror and see how it goes; to me it's really a challenge to scare someone without being grotesque!
I think this was a great story and wish you the best of luck in the challenge!
Oh wow thank you. At first I really didn't think I was going to be able to write for this challenge. I guess my imagination go the better of me. Hehe Didn't expect this story to come out at all. glad you thought this was good. :D
Wow! This was fantastic, great horror peice that had my heart jumping at every word and sentence. Great job, thanks for entering!
Yeah Thanks I am glad this made you scared. I look forward to what the results will be. :)
Wow !!!! that was so sick i felt numb with the agony being described word for word and realised how much this story could have happened in real life,there are sick people who would carry out something similar i'm sure.
Your imagination is spellbinding even though i have to say this was not what i had expected whilst reading this the second story from your portfolio.
I am a huge fan of SUPERNATURAL and your twist on this story and their characters is probably far removed from the ones which appear in that cult tv series.
If you read THE MASON'S TORTURE & THE HONEY TRAP you will find something similar on a level with this,also check out my stories DEVIL IN THE MIST a real skin ripper.
Thanks yeah my imagination got the best of me. I was watching supernatural and this is what I came up with. Didn't think I could write a horror story. I guess I was wrong. Thanks for commenting. Yes I definitely read your other stories interested to know what will happen in them. Jessica :D
Oh those stories are finished with now there won't be any more chapters forthcoming from those short stories,i will however be starting new projects very soon starting with "SPIRITS OF THE LOST WORLD" a 4 chapter tale of the AFTERLIFE letting the reader go on a journey of self discovery and finding out whether their dreams really do come true.
okay thanks for letting me know. Jessica :)
Oh gosh ive been sick 2day. Guess i should hav waited 2 read this lol. I liked this. It was really sad tho. I was starting to like them. And they never got a chance to get married ;( i definitely will be opened eyed whenever im in the woods now. Great job! :)
Hehe Thanks. I am glad you liked this. This was my first time ever writing a horror piece. So I am glad you enjoyed. Jessica :)
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