Short Story by: mommy3
Genre: Science Fiction
death, future, brains, accident
Submitted: January 13, 2010
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Please comment. I would like to know if this is any good. Thanks :)
This was intereting! :) I like it!
Thanks. I am glad you liked it. I was torn either to write this or a horror one. I thought this one would be better. :)
Mistress of Word Play
This was a really great write my friend. You have such a wonderful imagination. I doubt there are any topics you could not write about and do a brilliant job on. I liked the story about her changing genders and then changing back. Great descriptions and an awesome story. Fingers crossed for you. Good luck in the challenge. Susan :)
Oh thank you so much. really? You think I can write about anything. *blushes* You such a wonderful and nice person Susan. I enjoy reading your writings as well. I loved your piece. I won't be surprised if yours wins. Thanks for such a nice compliment too. :)
An unusual style, you told the story as if you were telling a friend what had happened to you just the other day, rather than a narrative. Acceptable though, apart from the word 'meanwhile'. I just cannot get on with the start of a paragraph using that word, I expect 'back at the farm' to follow immediately after. It is good that you enter these comps, every time you write you only improve, look back at your work in one year and see what you would have done different. Great idea though, made me laugh when she saw herself in the mirror in a man's body, good thinking, you should certainly win an award for being different.
Hehe thanks It was actually the host's idea for the topic and I had to come up with a story. My topic was someone gets into a nasty accident and when the person recovers from surgery you find your brain's been transplanted to a body of the opposite sex. This is very different from what I write so a little hard to put down. I thought of this scenario or horror. I wanted it to be different. I am glad you enjoyed this piece. :)
This short story reminded me a little of my story "PSYCHIC TELEPATHY" i based my story on a favourite series from the 1980's namely QUANTUM LEAP yours however is so refreshingly different,it is marvellous the way you can write something as if it is a journalism or dialogue from one person to another,there is no end your talents and i can just see myself looking in the mirror tomorrow seeing myself in a different gender,"now i will have to do something about that hairy chest i hollow out."
Hehe I know when I was writing this piece I laughed. My husband also laughed when he read it. He told me I was one strange lady. I laughed it wasn't all my fault this was the topic I chose from the lady's challenge. He just shook his head at me. I enjoyed writing this piece it was fun and different. Glad you enjoyed my story. Jessica :D
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