Short Story by: mommy3
scared, challenge, cemetery, doppelganger
Submitted: October 05, 2009
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Jessica M Loken
ok wow! Just a tad bit creepy, LOL. Nice writing though!
Thanks I know this was really creepy and since then my husband no longer goes to any haunted places. I know I will never be caught dead going in any of those places. Thanks for commenting. :D
omg thats soooo scary. its surreal. my friends always like dragging me to the cementary when we're bored and theres no parties that weekend. eep. im so freaked out now!
I know I guess my husband brought a evil doppelganger home with him on his way to the visit to the cemetery. This is what his brother told us boy was I glad that his brother was able to get rid of it. I never want to experience that again.
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I shouldn't have read this. I live close to an old cemetery and get the willies just thinking about ghosts.
A scary write. Very nice.
Thanks. I know this was like one of the most scariest things that has ever happened to me. I still at times get the chills when I talk or write about this happening.
Oh wow... You scared me.
Something similar happened to me once and I freaked out like crazy. I ended up sprinkling holy water to my house, even though I'm not religious at all. And I did see a ghost once which also freak the crap out of me. wow. Your story brought back some memories.
I know I have never ever experienced any thing like this at all it really scared the crap out of me. To make things worst on that night I watched the movie the exorcist. I thought I was going to get hurt not a happy moment especially when you are pregnant. Thanks for the comment.
Wow! You actually scared the pants off me. That was unusually creepy. Thanks for the scare.
Yeah let me tell you when this happened I was so scared so was my husband. He has not gone to any cemeteries any more after this incident. You are quite welcome for getting scared. He he :D
Wow, that was really creepy! I don't think I'll be going anywhere near a cemetery again :D A great story for Death Holy's challenge. You're very brave to write about it - I'd probably end up telling myself it never happened so that I didn't have to think about it again. Great work! :)
Thanks. Yeah whenever I talk about it creeps me out. Just when I first started writing it brought back memories. :D
very well writte! and if you're interested, i put up a poem for this challenge. i'd love your opinion! :D
Okay I will look at your poem. thanks for reading my story. :D
This is great :)
Good job! :D
Thank you. :D
That really was out of the Stephen King book of horror i don't think i have ever read anything as creepy as that before,boy it gave me goosepimps on my goosepimps.
I cannot imagine the idea of something being attracted to another human for fear is the way it fed.
The graveyard scenario was interesting but i am of the opinion that perhaps your house might be built on ground where there might have been a burial site or maybe the house has history.
It does seem odd,once my mother and i both shared a similar dream and we both felt like something was rubbing up and down all over our bodies,it must have happened because we both said the same thing at the same time on the same day.Thanks for sharing this masterpiece of writing it was excellent.
thanks yes when me and my husband experienced this it scared the crap out of us. Especially when i was pregnant with our first son. It would get stronger if we were afraid. I was petrified and wanted thing gone. I am so glad his brother knew how to get rid of it. All I know is that I don't want my husband anywhere near anything supposedly haunted. Jessica :)
I love the story Jessica. I think you need to edit this and polish it up a bit and create tense consistency and some fluidity. Other than that it is a pretty good concept and definitely creepy.
Thanks I am glad you enjoyed this story Jessica :D
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