Short Story by: MyLovely
Submitted: April 18, 2010
© Copyright 2016 MyLovely. All rights reserved.
Oh my god! This brought tears to my eyes! Thelast chapter is just so haunting that it gave me goosebumps! Well done is all I can say- you story is amazing!
Haha, HappyElf, you are one of a kind!
Your words are truly extravegent!
Thank you! :)
i cannot undstand why some parents run away from their responsibilities.i like dis story.
Thank you Mike! :)
The Divine Miss M
Wow. This made me cry. I don't understand how some parents can be like this. My friend hates his mum, he doesn't know who his dad is and his mum used to get drunk and beat him till he started hitting back. I totally don't get it. The writing was a,mazing, are you serisously only thirteen? :O Im fifteen and i dont think i could ever wrte this good. Your amazing. I hope I like your other stories. I can't really say i like this one cause its sad but i like the way its written, your really are an awesome writter. Keep it up! Well im going to start reading your other stoy now. Toodles :)
Awe Thank You Madii!
Haha, Im positive that you could write amazing! :)
Please do tell me if you enjoy the rest.
Your comment truly makes my day, Thank you!
Wow, what an intense piece, very frightening but so real to imagine!!! I still can't believe the violence, the cruel world of torture and sorrow in a home that is supposed to be a home!!! It sounds like the devil lived in your father, very sad, very heartwrenching! This is one memorable, vivid piece with so much courage, the boldnes to be heard for everyone!! No darkness should be put aside but let it out so there's freedom and somewhat contentment, releasing the nightmare! Excellent piece, so painfully told!!!
Thank You Vincey!
Your comment is so heartwarming and day shimmering.
Thank you, once again! :)
well said Vincely Delany.well said.
You pushed me to the ground with a slap I’ll never forget. My cheek was burning red and my eyes were watering. It hurt, mainly because I couldn’t believe you would slap your own little princess. Then I saw you go over to mommy. You put your face to hers. Than within seconds you grabbed her hand and pulled her up from the chair.------------ugh, harsh reality. nice work
Thank You Cloudsgrey!
little emo angel
oh wow; my dad is a complete asshole and he neglects us, but its nothing compared to that trauma
Im sure your dad loves you Abby! :)
Hes your father, It may seem like he's not there for you but he always will be!
That was a sad but wonderful story, you really tweaked the emotions, you got inside the character and poured out. you reached inside my mind, my heart, my soul, you squeezed out sorrow, pain, love, remorse, hope, well done, teriffic job!
Awe thank you!
I truly did try my best! :)
Sad, wonderful, grabbed the heartstrings and pulled. Amazing stuff my friend.
Thank You! :)
This made my eyes tear up. Beautiful work. Truly heartbreaking story. You've written this story very well. I can imagine everything happening right in front of me. It really touched me, and I kinda wish I was there. I wish I was there to stop that cruel man from hurting his wife and daughter. Amazing work. I really felt every word that you wrote. It seemed all so real.
On a lighter note, I noticed how you used the lyrics of Breakeven on this. I really like that song, and I catch myself singing those lines to myself on occasion, haha.
"I'm still alive but I'm barely breathing.." Beautiful.
Aweh, your comment made my day! Thank-you!
I totally loved this story.
emotive and disturbing piece well done. I just could not stop reading as as a father I felt some how tainted but I dont know why. great story
i love this. You're an incredible writer. The harsh reality of this is slightly overwhelming, but amazing. Well done.
It was hard to get used to the style of writing, sounding like a child but once passed that I was captivated. To see through the eyes of a child again and feel the pain, again.
Very well done!
Thank-you so much(:
Experiencing other login problems? We can help.