they say,

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

something i wrote thinkin of a rele good friend

they say you're nothig

they say you're usless

you think

why should i live?

they say you're fat

you think 

it's time

you ask

why should i live?

no one notices

as your eyes dull

and your eyes slowley

become lifless

your body becomes cold

they say

we're sorry

 


Submitted: April 09, 2011

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BulletofCorruption

First off this needs to be proof read before many people will take this seriously. Your summary's spelling is horrible, which is going to scare readers away.

There are a few cliché lines, but the concept it fine. Try putting more emotion into. Poetry is suppose to come from the heart and good poetry will reach other people's hearts.

Just some advice >;)

Sat, April 9th, 2011 8:53am

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yeah, i know, my keybora is givin out, i thought i checked it all but okay thaks!!

Sat, April 9th, 2011 5:02am

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