Total Devotion

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Who in this night of broken dreams,
expectant females and beating rain
on opaque windows; understands
the lament of regretful clouds?

Who in this night of broken dreams,

expectant females and beating rain

on opaque windows; understands

the lament of regretful clouds?

Who in the stealth of steps

going up the ladder of inner

silence, in the midsentence

of an unspoken promise,

in the salty tear drank

by forgiving lips; disobeys

the commands of a warning

heart?

Who in the pleading psalm

of the weak of faith,

the absconded moon in the

misty firmament, the aching

knees of a love beggar; dares

to defy the might of whipping thunder?

Only a fool set on sailing the white

waters of sacrifice, a warrior wounded

in his breastbone, a demented man who

embraces a sliver of agonizing hope; can

take on such a pilgrimage…

I am that foolish frame tumbling

on a steep path, with outstretched arms,

forever playing the odds;

only to steal a passionate kiss

from your longing mouth

of wingless angel…

Because it is you whom I love…

Copyright ©MystiqueWizzard® 2012-13

Copyright ©Alberto J. Alvarez G.® 2012-13


Submitted: January 28, 2013

© Copyright 2021 MystiqueWizzard. All rights reserved.

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ben hardstaff

Your grammar is excellent, very very descriptive. I like the succint nature of your poetry Al.

Mon, January 28th, 2013 8:17am

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Thank you so much, Ben...I wholeheartedly appreciate your kind words...Thank you kindly...

Al

Mon, January 28th, 2013 10:14am

KCNiemi

I like it very much! Super descriptive and an overall good poem :) Thanks for the invite!

Mon, January 28th, 2013 9:51pm

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Thank you so very much... I appreciate your visit and comments
kindly...

Many blessings to you,

Al

Mon, January 28th, 2013 1:55pm

mystichaven

I have no earthly words for this... Other than to say, you touched my very core.

Tue, January 29th, 2013 2:43am

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Thank you so much, dearest Jen...
Glad you enjoyed :)

Wed, January 30th, 2013 8:19am

Matthew D. Hay (Tangible Word)

This was incredible :O you're vocabulary is impressive, almost to the point of intimdatingly so :D You're poem was written so that each word flowed seemlessly into one another, I'm astounded that you write this well :D

Tue, January 29th, 2013 7:50pm

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Thank you kindly, dear friend...I´m honored and humbled by your words...I appreciate it, kindly

Wed, January 30th, 2013 8:23am

Matthew Roland

As always, fantastic job. I love how delicately you place your adjectives. You're able to describe much with little, which is a treasure. It reassures my notion in asking that favor of you. By which, if you need any more info, let me know. I'm sure the request was vague and out of no where hehe.
Happy writing!

Wed, January 30th, 2013 4:08am

Author
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Thanks so much, Matt...
Been working on it...I´ve been ill these past two days. That´s why I´ve been offline...I´ll look into it, promise!

Al

Wed, January 30th, 2013 8:24am

venlockheart

Very nice words you got there mr. writer... very nice :)

Wed, January 30th, 2013 9:40am

Author
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Thank you so much, my dear friend...I am glad you enjoyed this write...Thank you kindly :)

Wed, January 30th, 2013 8:25am

glitter snow426

oh wow, certainly lifted me away!!!!GLOWING GREAT WORK, love the style, wording sooooooo unique, awesome. You are on your way to writing success!

Fri, February 1st, 2013 2:09pm

Author
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Thank you, my dear friend...I am humbled by your kind words...
Blessings!!!

Al

Sat, February 2nd, 2013 9:22am

AnnMC

i didn't want this one to end - this ended at just the moment I wanted more, in a good way -- always leave them wanting more.

Wed, February 20th, 2013 2:36am

Author
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Thank you so much, dearest AnnMC...I´m so glad you liked this one...
Many blessings,

Al

Tue, February 19th, 2013 8:49pm

MystiqueWizzard

Maybe one day it will just go on endlessly, Annie...maybe just one day...

Wed, February 20th, 2013 5:02am

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