A Failure

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This was my first poem. Hope everyone likes it!

When I was just a little girl,

you'd keep me safe from the world,

and all its secrets.

Back then we were best friends,

but then, he came along, and took my place.

You try to hide it, but it shows;

he's you favorite now.

And I'm no more than something in the way.

'Cause I'm a failure in your eyes.

You have ignored all of my cries.

I have done my very best,

but I guess...

my best just isn't good enough,

to make you proud of me.

You promised you'd be there when I needed you,

but you broke that promise long ago.

I'm going through the hardest part of my life right now,

but you wouldn't help me.

You say you care about me,

but you've never been there for me.

You don't know how I feel,

and don't want to get to know me.

'Cause I'm a failure in your eyes.

You have ignored all of my cries.

I have done my very best, but I guess,

my best just isn't good enough,

to make you proud of me.

You don't know that I'm in love.

You don't know all that I've lost. 

You don't know anything about me anymore.

You never did see,

that I've always looked up to you, and tried to make you proud.

But someone has taken my place.

And though I've tried, I've always disappointed you.

'Cause I'm a failure in your eyes.

You have ignored all of my cries.

I have done my very best, but I guess,

my best just isn't good enough,

to make you proud of me.

We used to be best friends,

and I used to mean the world to you.

But not anymore, it's different now.

And when I cry, I cry knowing that you don't care.

I'm trying so hard, to wake from the dream;

wake to find you holding me tight,

telling me everything will be alright.

Life was so much better when I was young,

because I knew you loved me then.

But now....

I'm a failure in your eyes.

You have ignored all of my cries.

I have done my very best, but I guess,

my best just isn't good enough,

to make you proud of me.

I give up, you win.

I surender.

I'm dying...my heart is dying, but you don't care.

Because I am a failure in your eyes.


Submitted: April 01, 2008

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kitty08

This is great:) I can really relate to it.Seriously, It touched my soul, heart, and mind. Very, very, good!

Tue, April 1st, 2008 9:27am

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Thanks so much. :D

Tue, April 1st, 2008 10:13am

Crazyguy

It was good, a lot of feeling. I still don't like the dark sad stuff, but I am still amazed every time I read one of your poems you write Carly. I give it I like it due to how much passion this seems to have, and the great writing that is all so common in your literature. I hope that happier poems follow.:)

Wed, April 2nd, 2008 8:29am

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Thanks for the comment. :)

Wed, April 2nd, 2008 1:50am

cheeky sally

wow!! this is fantasic!! like pure power of dispair totally overflowing! if this isnt talent on your part, then i dont know what is, lol

Fri, April 4th, 2008 12:49am

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Gee, thanks! :)

Fri, April 4th, 2008 1:50am

LifexSucksxLovexSucks

This is really good, there's a lot of passion and feeling in it. i can totally relate. good work, and keep writing! :)

Sat, April 5th, 2008 11:19pm

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Thanks for the comment. :D

Sat, April 5th, 2008 7:56pm

Dark Skylight

Sooo sad.I cryed.Was that really how you feeled,or you just wrote that poem.Anyway its really really great.I love it.Altough its sad,but i like sad poems...:)

Tue, June 10th, 2008 1:53pm

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Wow, really? I had no idea it was THAT good. It was my very first poem, and yes, all of my poems are based on how I'm feeling or things that have happened to me. Glad you liked it. ^^

Tue, June 10th, 2008 10:45am

nuttyz

loved it loved it loved it!!!!!!i hope you move on...most of your poems relate to me too...but i guess its what life is all about ;)

Wed, July 2nd, 2008 6:44am

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Thanks so much. This was my first poem, which I wrote over a year ago. I'm really glad you liked it. Thanks for reading.

Wed, July 2nd, 2008 12:02am

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