Eyes of the sea

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Falling in love with the blue eyes.

Im sailing safely on the sea.

Seeing you for the first time.

Going to the edge of the ship.

Wanting to know you.

Staring at the beautiful sea.

Looking at you blue eyes.

Falling over the edge, into the sea.

Falling deeply in love.

Drowning, unable to swim.

Blinded by deep love.

Sinking to the bottom.

Unable to do anything without you.

Drowned,  laying on the seafloor.

Dumped, dying inside.

Submitted: September 05, 2009

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Charles Pennyfeather

I love it! It's very unique.

Sun, September 27th, 2009 10:04pm


Thanks ^^ is it? :p hmmm i didnt know :) thx for telling me ^^

Sun, September 27th, 2009 8:57pm

Felipe Lima

Beautiful... I liked the way it seems like I'm drowing in each word I read. I had the sensation of getting deeper and deeper in this blue eyes that you described as the sea. Awesome work!!!

Best Regards
Felipe :]

Sat, October 3rd, 2009 5:37pm


Thank you very much :) I'm not used to writing poems :p so i guess i did good with this one ^^

Sun, October 4th, 2009 12:54am


This is wonderful, and i love it. I love how you created two sepearate occurances, falling in love, yet falling into the sea at the same time. Great job, well done. :)

Sat, October 17th, 2009 8:39pm


Ty ^^ I tried to explain how it would feel, in pictures :)

Sun, October 18th, 2009 1:26am

Indigo couture

When i first read Love of the soul, i thought it was beautiful! Reading this, i just have no words!
your really talented and i hope i can continue reading your work...!:)

Fri, October 22nd, 2010 8:11am


Thank you for reading ^.^ and thank you for the praise =)

Fri, October 22nd, 2010 1:25am


wow. Beautiful. I felt like I was actually there seeing it all. amazing :D

Sun, May 15th, 2011 12:45pm


Thank you very much ^-^ I am glad you think so!

Sun, September 18th, 2011 6:06am


Hi Niau! I haven't been around in a long while - whow! Hope your still remember me? I still enjoy your work though! Keep it up!

Wed, August 8th, 2012 1:43pm


It's been a long time, for both of us I think =) My memory isn't that good xD names isn't really my strong point and never has been :b but I remember vaguely =) I'm glad you still enjoy it, even though it has been a very long time since I've written anything new.

Sat, August 11th, 2012 11:09am


Niau, it sounds deeply personal, and I can assume it's about finding love, and losing love abruptly. The mood is dark, almost hopeless toward the end. But written with sincere feeling and honesty.

Tue, January 26th, 2016 1:37pm

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