2 Love

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Eternal love between a man and his wife.

2 Love

What if you knew when life's over,

A boy and a girl can go on?

Would you become so damn faithful?

Would you see lust could be wrong?

2 love, 2 have and 2 hold.

They would rejoin in a garden,

A paradise under the sun,

A world without burden or sorrow,

Adam plus Eve equals one.

2 love, 2 have and 2 hold.

This here is only a theory,

A theory and maybe I'm wrong,

Beauty lies in the beholder,

The kind that will aways live on.


Submitted: February 02, 2009

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DarlingGoddess

Wow... this is beautiful.. I hope someday my writing gets as good as yours... I have a lot of practicing to do yet ;)

Good job.. :)

Tue, February 3rd, 2009 10:01pm

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I THINK YOU WRITE LOVELY! A LOT OF POWER AND MEANING! I ENJOY YOUR STYLE AND LOOK FORWARD TO READING MORE!

Tue, February 3rd, 2009 2:09pm

angellynn

Awesome! Me like this one.. It flowed very well, and the rhyme was right on.. Great job! I also have a eternal piece between husband and wife.. Its called When Two Souls Collide.. Check it out if you have the time. Thanks!

Angellynn

Sun, February 8th, 2009 6:01pm

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Thank you! I just peaked in to Booksie for a minute and was delighted to see your coment! and I will take a look at "When Two Souls Collide" for sure. I plan on reading all of your work because I know it will be great.

Sun, February 8th, 2009 10:24am

Pail

Excelent and beautiful. I really enjoy your writing, can't wait to see your other short stories. I bet they'll be great. I'm loving these poems as well, keep it up. Thanks for the read. :)

Mon, February 9th, 2009 3:10pm

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Hey Pail! Did you know your pen name is the same name as my first book? That's rad!!! Thanks for the kind words. You can read my stories at www.nightwritesworld.com

Mon, February 9th, 2009 8:11am

Anastasia Starlena

This is truly a beautiful piece. Written with alot truth in it. Brilliant.

Take Care,
Anastasia

Wed, February 11th, 2009 5:34pm

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Oooh thank you so much!!! I feel so giddy inside. It's always nice to recieve such beautiful compliments!

Wed, February 11th, 2009 12:05pm

yuu shindemura

this is about illusions of people having to know when their life would be over, and yeah of course you're right about this! (at least you'd know when you'd dig your own grave..hehe lol)

nice!


btw, i've finished your screechers and hell, yeah it's very grand! the screechers are some abomination which by your definition belongs to the devil, you brought this up just right! and this story was very intense when i was reading this at the same time listnening to cradle of filth, haha very well done!

Yuu

Wed, February 11th, 2009 8:51pm

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WOW! I am SO glad you liked it of course! I will read your work VERY SOON! Thanks for visiting me! If you liked the screechers, log onto my website for more short stories. Not now! When ever you have extra time.

Wed, February 11th, 2009 6:46pm

Dead nothingness

Really beautiful. :)

Sun, February 15th, 2009 12:23pm

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Thank you! I am glad liked it!!!

Sun, February 15th, 2009 11:47am

Midnight Rose

Beayty lies in the eye of the beholder- so ture! Loved this poem. Very good write! You are definitely on my 10 favorite booksie writers list!! :) You Rock, Night Write:)

Fri, February 20th, 2009 1:50pm

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Top 10, THAT'S AWSOME!!! Thank you for the praise! And you are on my top ten too. You were the first writer I read when I came to Booksie and I still remember how your words took me away! I love your style! It's very polished. Thank you for the sweet coment.

Fri, February 20th, 2009 6:05am

Gentlespirit

Aw DK this is a beautiful piece of writing, written with such elegance and containing real truths.

We shall all reach a garden where our sweet love will walk along side our spirit and endure for eternity.

On the back of my wedding ring I have this inscription :

Forever and two days.......

Thu, March 5th, 2009 11:43am

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Thank you!!! Forever and two days? That's very pretty! How long have you been married? I hope you found true love!!!

Thu, March 5th, 2009 5:56am

SRDarling

This is a sweet poem! I mean, sweet as in lovely and delicate. Perfect. =] "Adam plus Eve equals one..." is one of the greatest lines I've ever read. Ever. Once again, wowzz. =D

Sat, March 21st, 2009 2:05am

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WOW! Thank you Sweetie! That's very kind of you! I'm glad you enjoyed this poem. I wrote it as a song for a friend. Most of the poems I have on Booksie were meant to be songs but we never got that far...but if you liked that part of the poem it just shows how romantic you are! How very deep. Adam plus Eve equals one, is like a hint of soul mates and most people think that whole concept is rather corny. I am glad you liked it! Thank you again and I'm glad you're back.

Sat, March 21st, 2009 4:42am

Flash

Adam and Eve were the perfect soul mates. Always dreamed of that kind of love. Me thinks it exists no longer these days. But the beauty of your poem reminds us that it did and it should be something all couples should try to strive for.
This should be a song. It would be a beatuful and haunting song! You have a side to you that is quite romantic. Your writes are like Dr. Jekyll and Mr. Hyde. I love it!

Mon, April 6th, 2009 10:35pm

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He,he,he! I LOVE THAT!!! Dr.Jeckle and Mr.Hide!!! You got me pegged. You hit the nail right on the head! WOW, THATS PRETTY GOOD!!! NO ONE ELSE ON BOOKSIE HAS TOLD ME THAT! YES, I'M LOST!!! I was saved until I lost her...20 years later I'm still nuts. But I'm getting better. I think! lol. I feel dead inside. I guess I write for the pain like a living corpse with a pen. Thank you Flash! I am happy you're enjoying my writes! Now I will have to read more of yours although I already planned to after visiting your page earier. I will be reading you tomorrow morning for sure! I ate to much MC D's and I need to lay down. Thanks again!

Mon, April 6th, 2009 6:38pm

Cherry Berry

I loved this piece. My favorite part...

Adam plus Eve equals one.

2 love, 2 have and 2 hold.

Well penned.

xox
Cherri

Mon, April 13th, 2009 4:02pm

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Yes, I love that part the most too! Thanks again. I very appicate it! I mean that.

Mon, April 13th, 2009 9:05am

Vamplit

Great love poem and it might be the cynic in me, but are you saying have as much fun as you can before you get landed with a soul mate for eternity? No surely not. Love poetry isn't really my thing as you can see, but I did like this one from a technical point of view it was lovely.

Tue, April 21st, 2009 11:24am

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Thank you! For 24 years I've been hanging onto this belief that everyone has one person that will go on with them forever. An afterlife marriage blessed by God. It sounds like in the first chapter of the bible that man felt alone. God and the animals made him happy but something was still missing. So God put man into a deep sleep, took out a rib and made woman out of man's rib so man would have his other half to keep him company. But as my faith in God dwendles and my soul hurts from a broken heart, I'm starting to realize that I was wrong. Sorry if I brought you down...but know you really know me!

Tue, April 21st, 2009 5:17am

JenDamsel

Dear Night Write! you can write sweet too! really lovely. i like the theory that you have really sweet, and i hope is true
Take Care Sweet and dark Night Write ;P
~Jenn

Sun, May 24th, 2009 5:28am

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You gave me a blushing smile MssJenn. Thank you.

Sun, May 24th, 2009 5:11am

Manyfacets

I missed this, so pleased that I found it!
So you do have a gentle, warm, loving, soft
little underbelly after all. An exceptional,
fantastic poem...Hugs M.

Mon, June 22nd, 2009 3:41am

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Hello my friend! How have you been? I've been away from Booksie and I've missed being here and I've missed you! I hope all is well and that we always stay in touch. My life has been super busy but it should wind down soon. I hope you are finding yourself writing again. Even with writers block you pop out beautiful art...Take care...Night Write

Fri, June 26th, 2009 5:57am

Snow412

I enjoyed this...it's a bit different from the other poems you have posted.

I concur with Manyfacets.

;) Great write...write more of these! :DDDDDDDDDDDDDD

Sat, June 27th, 2009 7:11am

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WOW...Thank you very much! That is very nice of you!

Wed, July 1st, 2009 5:39am

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