The Bible says we're all God's children.
Freud says Daddy's a model for God.
Well Daddy ran away today,
I'm the unwanted child of God.

Dear Father, 

The Bible says we're all God's children.
Freud says Daddy's a model for God.
Well Daddy ran away today,
I'm the unwanted child of God.

They say you've got a big, new place
with golden, pearly gates,
I bet it's nice for you up there
without the kids you hate.

You ran away
with kids to raise,
you won't pay mom
but still want praise,

you turn up every Sunday morning,
expecting us to play,
but I'd rather spend your money
than spend time with you today.

Go back to your other son,
the one you left to die,
we learnt from his mistakes and
we won’t give into your lies.

But before you go, there is one thing
I feel I must confess,
we're taking over all you've built,
we're cleaning up your mess.

So don't come crawling back to us
when Eden's overgrown,
no one loves you anymore,
I hope you die alone.


Submitted: August 13, 2007

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the Lame One

WOW, man this is (the poem).I got crazily carried away. i rather like the last line "i hope you die alone" man, you are a writer and we in booksie are sure luky to get to share off this.
ps
hope your daddy reads this, and all daddies who are on the verge of running away.you are good

Mon, August 13th, 2007 8:29pm

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Thank so very, very much for your kind words.
Means the world to me, it really does.
x

Mon, August 13th, 2007 3:19pm

Robert Storm

Really, WOW. Interesting Fraudian insert. You hit a vein in me with that tactic. Because, I feel God and Heaven is a psycological replacement for the parental relationship we nolonger have when our parents pass away or when we get older and are out on our own. But I often wonder if any of that Heaven/Hell stuff is real or just fiction. I can't deside.

Mon, August 13th, 2007 9:34pm

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Thanks.
And ah yes, I do love a bit of philosophy and psychology, can't get my head around whether things are relative or universal, real or an illusion etc.
The mind boggles =s
Anywho, thanks for reading.
x

Mon, August 13th, 2007 3:38pm

dadoodle

Huh. Interesting poem. I wouldn't agree with Freud that 'Daddy is a model for God', I think it would be more that God is a model for Daddy. But whatever. It's fun trying to twist your mind around things and philosophizing. ;)

Fri, August 31st, 2007 11:22pm

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Absolutely, after all, as Plato said, philosophising is the only way to reach the realm of the forms.
Thanks for reading =D
x

Fri, August 31st, 2007 5:12pm

EdwardJBradleySr

November:

Good one. For many children to give to their Dad. If that Dad has consistently let them down. When he could have done the right thing/s.

Good use of rhyme and rhthm. Excellent presentation.

Gave it a "5".

Happier trails,

Ed Bradley.

Sat, September 8th, 2007 11:27pm

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Thank you very much for the '5' and the comment.
Means alot, especially comming from someone who seems so well respected on the site.
x

Sun, September 9th, 2007 9:17am

xxemoxbfsxx

that is brilliant. i love it. your a very good poet. write more soon.
peace out.

Mon, December 31st, 2007 9:24pm

Author
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Thank you very very much =D
x

Tue, January 1st, 2008 9:55am

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