Failed attempt at life

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

A poem about a girl's suicide attempt and the after math of trying to scrummage her life back together.. Hope you enjoy

Failed attempt at life

The pills shake aggresively in my palm
blood drips to the floor but I remain calm
I've lost myself in this moment of despair
my broken thoughts are something you cannot repair
I can no longer stand this living hell
you put me on the pedistal and I fell
Expectations and misery are not a good combination
I want to leave this world, in hope for a new destination
For tonight I stare at my warn, pale body
I feel so cold and look awfully shody
hullicinations kick in and I've gone half insane
I thought I'd feel something, but nothing, no pain
the pills and bleach begin to resurface
I hear my mum and start to get nervous
A distant voice echoes in my ears
I'm about to lose these 17 years
but suddenly I awake to a room full of people
my head still spinning, I feel to feeble
Unaware of how much time has passed
I need to get of here, quick and fast
I can't handle the questions, the pain, the truth
who will I tell of the years of abuse
Lies put me here and they're sure to get me out
a few shed tears isn't that what it's all about
If I show remorse I'll leave without a care
walk through the death house, realising lifes still not fair
but in my realisation I have a stranded thought
in this depression I have been caught
where will I go now, who will I be
can things change, can I save me
I still pierce my skin but the demons are weak
in my attempt I hurt them and tears they now leak
I have to stay strong, make my way through this feeling
but every now and again my mind starts unreeling
And I toy with the thought of death on nights like this
so I reach for my phone I know I made a promise
To hear her voice is such a relif
it brings me back, a sense of belief
A stranger's voice has become my haven
she may not see, it's my life she's savin'
Because on nights like this it's nice to be reminded
that life is worth living, from huanity I'm not devided

Submitted: April 25, 2012

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Really good writing, well done!

Wed, April 25th, 2012 2:36pm

Reptar Kournealius

This is absolutely beautiful and terribly powerful. You have done a wonderful job conveying emotion. Let the sorrows of life continue to bring life to words for you and never let them take you out. Thank you for this heartfelt and impacting imagery.

Wed, April 25th, 2012 9:45pm

Bill Rayburn

This is evocative, revealing, and lovely in the way you lay your vulnerable soul out for all to see.

On to the next, girl.

Thu, April 26th, 2012 5:16am


I don't know what events have shaped your life but you can't write with this kind of pain unless you have carried it before. My hope is that you have someone to help share your load. Maybe writing is enough vent for you. I offer you my concern without pity, hope without judgement and an ear for your outpourings.

Fri, April 27th, 2012 5:52pm

Chris Gerard

Great stuff, and reads well out loud as a rap. Have you tried it? It should help you with your rewrites, iron out one or two tiny little scanning blips. Only other thing I'd say is try a different font, one that's more attractive to the eye. Otherwise, very powerful and well-written.

Tue, June 12th, 2012 8:33am

Brian W

A great poem overflowing with emotion.Your flow and rhyme is perfect....It is good to have one that is there for you....Well written

Tue, August 7th, 2012 11:19pm

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