Left Behind

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Young Adult  |  House: Booksie Classic

A sad person being left behind by everybody.

Behind the clouds

There's the sun

Behind the figure

There's the shadow

Behind the song

Is a romantic melody

Behind my sweetest smiles

Are gallons of tears

Behind my happiness

Is an endless pain

Behind my laughter

Is eternal sorrow

Behind everything I have

I own nothing

Behind me

There's no one standing

Behind my most painful fall

No one's there to catch me

I have no choice but to run

Escape from reality

Leaving everything behind

Leaving you...behind

Submitted: October 14, 2010

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Most emotionally heartfelt and sad. Interesting reflection of one's personal past. Of all your postings liked this one the best. Great writing.

Gave it an "I Like It" vote. As with your other postings. At times, without commenting. All well deserved.

Presentation Issues:

1. Skip a(n extra) line between intended paragraphs (for fiction) and intended verses (for poetry).

2. Start a new paragraph each time a character may speak, in quotes "", in his/her turn.

Thank you for becoming a fan. Appreciative and grateful. You are most kind, thoughtful and considerate.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Thu, November 4th, 2010 5:19pm


thank you so much sir! i would edit my writings if i have time. i reallly appreciate this! thanks for the pieces of advice you've given to me... thank you so much!:]

Mon, November 8th, 2010 3:30pm


Wow. Great poem you got there. :)

Thu, November 25th, 2010 7:58am


thank you so much! :]

Thu, November 25th, 2010 1:34pm

Baby Blue

awe. that was sad. but that was good. :]

Sun, December 5th, 2010 1:58pm



your comment is very much appreciated!

Tue, December 7th, 2010 12:51pm


Simply breath-taking.
Greatly put, with thought-provoking meaning, nicely formatted, and the reader can almost feel what the writer's feeling... I almost forgot, and on top of that, the most emotional poem I've read in quite a while. How brilliant is this? I can't tell you how to 'improve' the poem, or to even critique it, since I think it's perfect. The title you chose, is just adding up to the sorrow. If I have to sum it up, this is just amazingly beautiful, despite of the fact that this overflows with pain.
Absolutely deserves a 'like'.

Sat, July 16th, 2011 1:04am


thank you so much toni!this is one wonderful comment. and one of the most constructive criticism i ever received...thank you so much!

Fri, July 15th, 2011 11:38pm

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