A Time In Life Without Name

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

A man lacks proper foresight and reaps the consequences.

I am a man,
But I had no plan.
So I ran 'cross the land
'Till I fell in the sand.

But when I arose,
I could not move my toes.
So here in the sand
I shall stand.


Submitted: July 21, 2009

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Engel

This poem is very interesting, I especially love the title and summary, it gives this poem so much meaning!

I rate this 5/5

Tue, July 21st, 2009 2:08am

Dusk Dawn

ooo wow. I really enjoyed that. The flow was perfect the way it rhymed. Straight and to the point. I just had one little issue. You said that you fell in the sand but then the last line says "So there in the sand, I shall stand" yet...it's puzzling. That was the one little thing that bugged me. Good luck at fixing that.

Tue, July 21st, 2009 2:18am

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I stand because I arose.

Mon, July 20th, 2009 7:22pm

Stormy Raines

wow pretty good on this one. most poems i read that are that short i dont like but you made it work. good job keep it up

Wed, July 22nd, 2009 6:11pm