Trapped in the Valley, Part 1

Reads: 304  | Likes: 0  | Shelves: 0  | Comments: 4

  • Facebook
  • Twitter
  • Reddit
  • Pinterest
  • Invite

Status: Finished  |  Genre: Commercial Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

Here I am, waiting for you.

I am trapped within a valley,

Barricaded in by two mountains-

One to my left, the other to my right.

It would seem there is nowhere to go

But up.

In actuality, there is nowhere to go.

The valley erodes each day,

And as I stand helplessly,

I fall further into its bottomless pit-

A mind split between

Mt. St. Move and Mt. St. Remembrance.

It appears I neither want to move forward in this life

Or remember and learn the past of mistakes made.

I loved and I loved hard; I hoped and I hoped long.

There was nothing more I wanted

Than you and I to be an us.

And, as I sit feebly in this valley,

Being stuck in mindset on you,

I ignore all that composes the world around me.

The birds flying overheard,

Chirping, “Save yourself, kid,

You’ve still got time;”

The little bunny rabbits

Rubbing their sweet little tails in my face,

In futile attempts to get even a smile-

Albeit a roar of laughter-

Out of me.

Everyone and everything that comes to my rescue,

I disregard.

I live for you and only you.

Everywhere I see you,

I feel you, I smell you;

I think I hear you all the time-

Every noise,

A little pitter-patter on the ground

To the parades of buzzing bemusement,

I believe it is you who has finally come for me.

I don’t move from this valley,

Enacting the role

Of nothing more than a damsel in distress,

Because I believe you’ll come for me.

I won’t ever move;

Even if my heart is telling me

You won’t come.

You will…

Submitted: April 20, 2012

© Copyright 2022 parkelis. All rights reserved.

  • Facebook
  • Twitter
  • Reddit
  • Pinterest
  • Invite

Add Your Comments:


Stormbird Throneshaker

I hope that they do!
Amazingly awesome poem and of course, I like it.

Thu, May 24th, 2012 1:31am


Wow. Thanks! ;-)

Wed, May 23rd, 2012 7:10pm


Sometimes a little fix from a person you love, just isn't enough. That person is your drug, and your remedy. Excellent piece!

Tue, June 5th, 2012 4:02am

Sammy Wang Yang

Reading this piece, I felt like I just fallen into a bottom-less pit. It was unexpected; the emotions, the feelings of being trapped by the two mountains. The metaphor was great. It caught me off guard right in the middle of it.

Wed, June 27th, 2012 3:38pm

My Ria

I used to listen to "the man who can't be moved" and wish it was you singing to me...
And you were.

Thu, August 16th, 2012 7:28am

Facebook Comments

More Commercial Fiction Poems

Other Content by parkelis

Poem / Romance

Poem / Humor

Poem / Poetry