An Amusement park

Reads: 1376  | Likes: 0  | Shelves: 0  | Comments: 3

  • Facebook
  • Twitter
  • Reddit
  • Pinterest
  • Invite

Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Well i have this poem assignment for school and heres just a bit can you tell me if its any good and if it isnt can you help me and tell me why it isn't :)ty

As I walk through the doors of the amusement park. I can hear the high pitch scream, some of joy, pleasure and energy, others of fear, terror and panic. I see people laughing with delight and glee a few are even crying from too much laughter. I can smell the sweet aroma of sugary, rich, mouth watering doughnuts. I can feel the sticky and syrupy carmel melting off in the suns warmth falling from my carmel apple and sinking into my hand. I can taste the fluffy, delectable, delicious cotton candy slowly melting in my mouth as I drive back home from the fascinating amusement park. :)


Submitted: June 04, 2010

© Copyright 2022 peanutbutter4815162342. All rights reserved.

  • Facebook
  • Twitter
  • Reddit
  • Pinterest
  • Invite

Add Your Comments:

Comments

whiteroses

I LOVE AMUSEMENT PARKS!
This inspired me to go to one :D
Great poem sweets! xoxo

Fri, June 24th, 2011 4:47pm

Author
Reply

LOL nice and thanks (:

Mon, July 25th, 2011 6:03pm

AWESOME ASHMITA

astounding,awesome,appreciable work.kmu one like frm me

Mon, June 27th, 2011 8:43am

Author
Reply

aha nice alliteration and thanks and i will ! ;]

Mon, July 25th, 2011 6:04pm

led monkeys

I Love it it is so well written

Sun, July 17th, 2011 1:57pm

Author
Reply

thanks

Mon, July 25th, 2011 6:04pm

Facebook Comments

Other Content by peanutbutter4815162342