Love in Life

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

This poem is about a girl who is in love with the man who she thinks is the right one. she speaks her love to him and in return all she asks if for his love towards her.

When I close my eyes

I see your face

In your arms is where

I find my special place

When you hold me close

Everything feels so right

Then I never wanna let you out of my sight

My heart will forever belingto you

I will never find someone new

I love you and thats allI have to say

I love you now, forever, day after day

My head is spinningI don't know what to do

All I want is for you to love me too.


Submitted: January 29, 2009

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Jamie Rambo

This was a really nice piece and I felt the love flowing through.

Thanks for the great read. ^^

JR

Wed, February 4th, 2009 6:00am

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Thanks for reading....MPB

Thu, January 28th, 2010 11:33am

CanadianIdiot

That was a very nice and loving poem. I think we've all be in a spot like that before.

Thu, February 5th, 2009 11:14pm

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Oh yes I'm sure a lot of us have. Thanks for reading....MPB

Thu, January 28th, 2010 11:33am

kimsy

That was a very interesting poem. It was never awkward to read, it just flowed really well. I really enjoyed it. :)

Fri, February 6th, 2009 5:15am

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Thanks very much....MPB

Thu, January 28th, 2010 11:32am

clwhitfield

good work. flowed and pace well. the rhyming wasn't cheesy and worked. watch out for your typos though :)

Tue, February 10th, 2009 4:04pm

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Thanks. Ill check out some of you work too. Thanks for the comment!......MPB

Tue, February 10th, 2009 8:09am

Dread and Fugitive Mind

Its nice, though you have some typos...
I like it :)

Tue, February 17th, 2009 6:55pm

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thanks yeah i know bout thoes
I tend to rush throgh my work when i ppost them at school so ill be getting around to editing most of my work as soomn as i can.Thanks for reading .........MPB

Tue, February 17th, 2009 1:35pm

FancyJumper

Great poem, very heartfelt.

Sun, March 1st, 2009 5:43am

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thanks....MPB

Sun, March 1st, 2009 4:32pm

AMarlee

This describes how I feel right now. . . It's nice to find poems and songs that you can relate to :) I like it ^^

Tue, March 3rd, 2009 9:19pm

Author
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Thanks for the comment.Yeah it was kind of hard writing something heart felt when i just broke up with my6 boyfriend at the time i wrote this but no worries i found another. lol. thanks for reading.....MPB

Tue, March 3rd, 2009 3:06pm

SpacexWolfxSJ

YES! I like this so much! It's amazing! I love it, I love it and I love it! It's amazing and short and sweet and simple, and you are talented! Write more and keep me posted to read your stuff. Thanks for sharing...btw please read some of my stuff too!

Tue, March 3rd, 2009 11:28pm

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Haha im glad you like it. Its deffinitly different from my usual Gothic Emo self but its what i feel toward my signifigant other. I will read. Thanks.....MPB

Tue, March 3rd, 2009 4:38pm

EdwardJBradleySr

Pirate Bug:

Well written. Read this before this comment and gave it an "I Like It" vote at that time.

Have read and given "I Like It" votes to all of your other postings as well. At that earlier time. I do not comment always.

Because I do not write fiction, I do not comment on it. When I comment, most of the time, it is on poetry, essays and expository writing(that is, editorials and articles). Writings about which I have some knowledge, experience and expertise.

Appreciate your interest and comments on my postings as well. Of course and like you, I am grateful for anyone who reads, comments and gives "I Like It" votes to my postings. However, no one is obligated to do so. This must be accepted by all writers who may post something on Booksie. Or anywhere else, for that matter.

If you were trying to sell your work, how could you get people to pay to read your writings? Beyond making your work available, there is little any of us can do. We are all at the mercy of the reader and customer.

To me your writing seems OK. This poem needs some proofreading and editing. Inasmuch as some words are not separated by a space. One misspelled word.

Example:

My heart will forever (belingto) belong to you

Read the works of others and keep writing yourself.

Hope this helps.

Happy trails,

Ed Bradley.

Wed, March 4th, 2009 2:05am

Midnight Rose

very touching, and full of love and longing. :)

Wed, March 4th, 2009 11:48am

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Thanks....MPB

Wed, March 4th, 2009 1:00pm

BaileyThompson

This is very beautiful. Very heartfelt and touching. Great job! Keep writing! ;)

Fri, March 6th, 2009 12:42am

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Thanks....MPB

Mon, March 9th, 2009 12:58pm

Tigerchill

this is a wonderful poem. it's a great read. well done, it's got my vote. take care, Tiger.

Fri, March 6th, 2009 2:21pm

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Thanks very much....MPB

Mon, March 9th, 2009 12:58pm

tastetheblood

A very nice and loving poem.Great!

Tue, May 5th, 2009 5:20am

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Thanks....MPB

Tue, May 5th, 2009 12:55pm

killertabby

Aw, mushy! lol jk
Good poem!

Tue, October 6th, 2009 11:06pm

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lol. Thanks....MPB

Wed, October 7th, 2009 5:51am

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