My tainted wings
Black as night,
Dulled by heavens
Holy light,
Burning flame
Patient fire,
Dwindling dusk
Blazing dawn,
Booming voice
Soft sweet tune,
All beating in my heart to make
My tainted wings as
Black as night,
Dulled by heavens
Holy light.
Submitted: August 13, 2007
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I like the poem style. A lot.
The contrast between each line is awesome too.
Like where you said "dwindling dusk" "breaking dawn".
Sheer melody! 5/5!
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Thanx!!
I am so glad ppl actually like my poetry, I am trying the novel thing but I am not sure if it is good enough to continue...
Wow! Your poem had a great rhythm, I was nodding my head to it! The imagery is great, and it ran really smoothly. I loved it!
Thu, November 1st, 2007 5:08am
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Thank You,
Most ppl thought it sounded like a chant and didnt like it much!
FIFTH, FIFTH! THIS IS AN OUTRAGE SOMEONE DESERVES TO BE SHOT!
Sun, November 4th, 2007 12:38pm
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What?
So do you like it?
Hahahah!
Kinda hard to tell with your comments... ^_^!
OUTRAGE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Sun, November 4th, 2007 12:39pm
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Hahahahah!!
Thank You I think... :)
yes i like ti, it means i think this should have one and its an outrage that it didn't also the judge needs to be shot :)
Mon, November 5th, 2007 8:47am
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Hahahah!
Thank You!
The judge does need to be shot!!!!
Strong voice and Strong words... a beautiful read!
Thu, February 14th, 2008 6:14am
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Thank you! :D
Thu, February 14th, 2008 5:09pm
april this has always been one of my favorite poems of yours and yes the judge should be shot
Tue, December 2nd, 2008 3:38am
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lol. Ok, Now I am going to have to go back and reread all those comments to find where that came from. lol.
I'm not sure I like this one that much, i is kind of strange. lol
Not one of my best works.
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Great image at the end. I could see a dark angel being illuminated. Thanks for the image. It was cool as hell. Very symbolic.
Mon, August 13th, 2007 2:25amAuthor
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Thanx!!
Sun, August 12th, 2007 8:14pmI think that was why it got Fifth out of like 37....
GLAD someone liked it!!
^_^! *Peace!*