Cold Kiss

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Thrillers  |  House: Booksie Classic

There's love, then there's deep love, then there's Remi's love for Angel.

"Angel, it's getting cold. Help me out." 

I make my way to the bathroom with a large towel hanging on my right arm as soon as I hear her command. I step through the doorway with a slight creak as the door opens. I see a wide smiling Remi looking at me. She's so happy to see me that she almost jumps right out of the tub but I rush and hold her down by her shoulders. 

"Remi, stay sitting." I demand as I slowly take my hands off her shoulders. Madame Carter would see to it that I'd be severely punished if I caught sight of her beloved daughter's naked body. Although Madame Carter has great trust in me, that doesn't change the fact that all necessary punishments will be carried out if I even dream of harming Remi in any way. 

My name is Angel, an odd name for a male, but it's what I was given. My late mother was never suppose to give birth, so when she did they were sure I was a gift from God, an Angel. My mother was a slave to the Carters, along with my Father who I've been told is also deceased. Now you may find it strange to be informed that my masters are black. They are one of the few black slave owners in Albany, Kentucky. 

They own a big enough plantation with a massive mansion as their home. Now, I won't bore you with details of every single thing about this plantation, mainly because I don't really know much. I know that since birth I've always been kept inside serving Madame Carter, Mr. Carter, being her brother, and Remi, Madame Carter's Daughter. Like mine, Remi's father has also passed leaving Madame Carter alone to sale cotton, and other merchandise which the field and other slaves produce. It was in her loneliest times that she called her brother for help, so he's been here for a good five years now.

As I mentioned earlier, I've always been an inside slave, because going by an old custom, the lighter slaves work inside. In my child years I bonded tightly with Remi whose two and a half years younger than me. It was this bond that moved me from house cleaner to Remi's guardian. My job was and still is the make sure no harm comes to Remi. Over time Madame Carter begin to trust me, and maybe see me as her own son. With this trust I became a full time watcher, protector, or how ever you'd like to put it, of Remi. I am to be with her at all times and assist her when ever she sees fit, but in these times I am not allowed to do anything harmful. 

Now that I've become twenty years of age, and Remi eighteen, Madame Carter has now informed me that any sexual act towards Remi will result in a punishment, maybe even death. 

"Remi, you know you have female servants to help you with this." I say as I grab the left corner of the towel and open it. I have to almost fully expand my arms for the towel to be completely open. 

"Yes, but I only trust you Angel." Remi replies still smiling wide. I nod my head signaling I understand. 

"Well, arms up." I say and Remi does as I tell her. I carefully start to wrap the towel around what is exposed, being the very top of her chest and armpits. When the towel it secured with a tight grip Remi slowly begins to stand up. As always the towel successfully covers her whole exposed body without slipping off. I hold the right side of the towel with a firm grip as Remi steps out of the tub. In mist of doing so, her feet lose grip on the floor because of water that spilled out of the tub. She quickly falls forward and smashes into my chest, but with a loud and sharp scream. I'm quick to wrap my arms around her in a tight embrace to keep her from falling any further. 

Remi's reflexes cause her arms to also wrap around me with a strong hold. I look down her back only to notice the towel has begin to open. Quickly I try to catch the two sides splitting apart but I'm too late and my open hand, in the the motion to close on the towel, misses causing my fingernails to scratch her lower back. She lets out a small wince and looks up at me. 

"Remi, I-I apologize greatly. I meant to," I begin to plead but she speaks over me. 

"No, Angel it's okay. I'm not mad at you. I could never be mad at my Angel." Remi replies and giggles a little as she buries her face in my chest. I smile a little. I thought I was dead for sure.

"Madame Remi!" an elderly female servant named Maria yells in panic as she quickly comes into the door way. I look back as soon as I hear her voice. I feel Remi's fingernails dig into my upper right arm as she peaks over my right shoulder, embarrassed that she caused Maria to become so frightened. "M-Madame Remi, I heard you scream and I came as soon as I could. Are you harmed?" Maria asks looking me up and down like I've done something. 

"I'm fine Maria. I just almost fell, but Angel caught me." Remi replies lowering her left hand to my elbow, which makes this seem very, very suspicious. With a stutter step Maria nods and begins to exit Remi's bathroom, but not before looking back at me with eyes that think I've committed a crime. 


Today is a big dinner party, an event that's taken seriously in this house. Only the finest food is prepared, only the finest clothes are worn by both servants and Masters. This event is why Remi had to take a bath so early in the day. 

As I walked back and forth collecting clothes form the wash room Maria kept giving me strange glances till I became too annoyed, and slightly threaten that I had to speak to her. "Maria, why do you keep looking at me with such an expression?" I question as I stop in the hallway in front of her with a fresh clean gown draped over my arms. 

"Angel, you've always done right by that girl, and you've never done nothing to me, but I know what I saw." Maria replies. My eyes widen, not by guilt but by complete shock. 

"What you saw was not what you think. Your eyes are playing tricks on you." I reply hoping she'll second guess what she thought happened. "I did nothing more then catch her." I add. 

"Now I made a promise just like you did. I promised to tell Madame Carter of any wrong doings in this house." Maria replies 

"There is nothing to tell! I did nothing to Remi besides keep her from falling." I reply getting a bit angry, and scared of what Madame Carter will do if Maria tells her these lies. 

"I may not have young eyes, but these eyes don't miss a thing. I saw the girl's towel half way off. I'm sorry child, but this can't be untold." Maria replies and tries to walk past me. Panic takes me over. Madame and her guests will be here in an hour. I can't let Maria tell her lies. Just as I turn around ready to yell back at Maria, a sweet, tiny voice calls my name from the stairs just above my head. 

"Angel, come on. I need to be ready before mother returns." Remi calls from above. I let out a deep sigh and hide my panic before replying back.

"Yes, my apologizes Remi. I'm coming." 


I sit on Remi's bed waiting for the her to return from the woman putting on her dress. All this time I'm thinking of how I'll convince Maria that nothing happened between Remi and I. "Angel, is it pretty?" Remi asks coming into the room. I slightly jump at her sudden entrance. I look up at her as she walks over to me. 

"Elegant, flawless, beautiful, and every thing above." I reply and we smile at each other. I can only smile so long before the fear of my soon to come punishment arrives. 

"Awe, what's wrong my Angel?" Remi asks as she quickly takes a seat on my lap. She places her right hand on my left shoulder for comfort. Here we are again, another questioning position. I know Remi loves me, but like a brother and sister thing, or at least I hope, cause that's how I love her. I tense up some at this small act of affection when there should be zero. 

"You know earlier, with Maria?" I ask looking at her face that's in close range. Remi nods before once again buring her face in my chest. She sighs and begins to play with the collar of my shirt, folding it up then down. 

"I know. I heard you two earlier. I'm scared too Angel. Mother won't believe me over her. She'll think you forced me to lie for you." Remi replies and looks up at me. I stare back. 

"S-so, it's hopeless." I say back and I feel a sad expression form on my face. I don't want to die, especially for nothing. 

"I'm not letting anyone take my Angel away." Remi replies as she lifts her head up and smiles, but not a normal sweet one. My eyebrows narrow. "Don't worry Angel, it's gonna be okay." Remi replies and stands up. 


Twenty minutes until Madame Carter returns, and I can't find Remi. I've asked everyone but they've all said they didn't see her. I've looked out back, upstairs, downstairs, and oh no, how could I forget the basement where the washroom is? I quickly make my way to it even though I see no reason why Remi would be there. I open the door, and the light is already on, letting me know someone is down here. I begin to walk down the steps listening to soft tiny ripples of water from the big silver tubs used to wash clothes. 

"Remi." I call out hoping for an answer. I don't get one. I reach the bottom of the stairs and look left and right. All I see is a pile of unwashed clothes and some dried, untouched ones. I start to think it's time to go when something or someone crashes into my back. The impact is strong enough to make me fall forward and smash into the wall in front of me. My head starts to spin and my ears ring a little, then I hear, 

"Angel, Angel I'm so sorry. I was only trying to surprise you." Remi says frantically. 

"R-Remi, what are you doing down here?" I ask as I turn around. My eyes get wide and I back up into the wall I previously hit. A feeling of shock that I've never felt before comes into me. 

"A-Angel, don't be scared. I won't hurt you. I'd never hurt my Angel." Remi replies as she steps closer to me. I feel her cold bloody hands cup my face. "I did it so she wouldn't make mother take you away." Remi adds looking into my stunned eyes. Remi is covered in blood from chest to toe. 

"You, you killed her." I manage to say. 

"For you. Angel I did it for you. To keep you safe like you've always kept me, because I love you" Remi replies. I can't even move right now. I'm stuck still. I never imagined Remi was capable of doing something like this. "I'll say she attacked me when I complained about the dress. Everyone knows Maria had a bad temper." Remi adds with that same ole sweet smile.

"You killed her." is all I can say. Remi is silent, still not knowing how surprised I am at her actions. 

"Come on Angel. I need another bath." Remi finally says as she grabs my left hand with her bloody one. I look down at her with eyes that say 'what's wrong with you?' She did do it for me, and what she did, did just save my life. She did it cause she loves me, and she's proven it's a deep love. Before she starts to walk away with my hand in hers she lifts herself up on her tippy toes and puts her small puffy lips against mine. It's one of the coldest kisses to ever be felt. 


A/N: Just something that came to mind, sorry if it's too rushed :(. Also, if you really liked this story, my novel "When an Angel Sins." Is based off of this. It has the same characters, it's just an alternate version of this story. Thanks for reading. 


Submitted: October 20, 2014

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good short story:)

Mon, October 20th, 2014 3:53pm


Thanks. ~Poetic

Mon, October 20th, 2014 9:10am


Omg she killed her! This was awesome! Loved it! :D

Mon, October 20th, 2014 4:31pm


:), thanks for reading and leaving this nice comment :). ~Poetic

Mon, October 20th, 2014 9:55am


Maria got what she deserved. Remi is a anti hero, and i love those. Well written drama with a deserved twist. Descriptions were well done to describe the scenary and the actions and consequences. Good job with this, and you can always edit it if you think it feels rushed.

Mon, October 20th, 2014 5:27pm


Thanks for reading, and thanks for this reassuring comment. ~Poetic

Mon, October 20th, 2014 10:46am

Talique Metz

I like it

Mon, October 20th, 2014 5:41pm


Thanks :). ~Poetic

Mon, October 20th, 2014 10:47am


:O One of the biggest plot twists I have ever read. This comes close to friggen Snape and Lily! Remi seemed so sweet, always calling Angel HER Angel, and being so nice to everyone...The end sent shivers down my spine. Wow, Poetic you've really outdone yourself on this one! I love it! *Clapping*

Mon, October 20th, 2014 6:01pm


*bows* well thank you BLB, happy you enjoyed it. Yay!!! I successfully created a plot twist XD!!! *does happy dance*. Happy you enjoyed Skyrim :). ~Poetic

Mon, October 20th, 2014 11:33am

Vance Currie

For something that just came to mind, this is great. It has an imaginative plot and the story is very well told. I really enjoyed reading this. I don't think it needs any editing (except for a minor typo) but that's up to you. I like the way you twisted convention around by having black slave owners and a man called Angel serving the daughter of the house as a personal maid. I think I want to be your fan now.

Mon, October 20th, 2014 8:55pm


:D, Thanks so much, this comment really made me smile! Auh, yes I thought I got all the typos, but I will once again proof read this. Thanks for reading and leaving this awesome comment :). ~Poetic

Mon, October 20th, 2014 1:58pm


Maria should have minded her own business. Tsk Tsk she paid the ultimate price. I like angel he seems innocent and sweet but Remi is crazy, wouldn't get on her bad side!

Tue, October 21st, 2014 1:04am


Yes, Remi is indeed crazy for Angel.Thank you for reading and leaving this awesome comment :). ~Poetic

Mon, October 20th, 2014 8:14pm


Oh my, at the end got me all excited! I loved it :)

Tue, October 21st, 2014 1:30pm


Thanks :). ~Poetic

Tue, October 21st, 2014 10:27am

Ink Stain

I LOVED the ending "it's one of the coldest kisses to ever be felt" beautiful! And for something that just came to mind, it is nicely put together. I kind of expected Angle to bed the culprit (that's how such things usually go no?) so I really enjoyed that it's the other way around.
Good work! :)

Tue, October 21st, 2014 2:11pm


Awe, thank you! Happy and read and enjoyed! ~Poetic

Tue, October 21st, 2014 10:28am


yyyuuuuuuuuuussss Plot twists!!!! Honestly BBFAT you should be the plot twist queen all the way from Michael being an animal boy to this :P You have some of the best plot twists XD ANyways, she killled for him!!! Griffindor dies for you, but slytterin kills for you. I guess we know whos in the snake house XD All jokes aside, VERY GOOD JOB BBFAT!!! I could have sworn Remi was very hormon-ed when she was talking to Angel throught out pasts of the story :P I lovvvveeeeed the name Angel by the way!!!! :3 awe sweet cruel love.

Tue, October 21st, 2014 7:33pm


Yes I actually really like the name Angel when it's used for a boy, when it's used for a girl I'm just like....okay, yeah cute. But when it's a boy I'm just like fangirl :P! I didn't really want to make it straight forward in the story (I kind of did at the end) but yeah Remi had a thing for Angel, more then loving him as a brother, sooo yeah she was literally crazy about him :P. Thanks for reading and leaving an always humorous comment, plus awwweee the flattery XD! ~Poetic

Tue, October 21st, 2014 4:23pm

Otono Trujillo

I really like your story! It is really unique and I love the plot twist at the end! What was you inspiration? Your name choices fit the characters really well! Fantastic job! Keep it up!
-Otono Trujillo

If you have the time I would really appreciate it if you read my new novel "The Sky's Daughter". Thanks!

Tue, October 21st, 2014 8:34pm


Strangely, what inspired me was the movie "Interview with a Vampire" I don't really know how (my mind is weird), but one thought led to another and this is what I ended up with. Thanks for reading :). ~Poetic

Tue, October 21st, 2014 4:15pm

Stormbird Throneshaker

This would make a nice play for the spooky halloween season.
It gets an I LIKE IT from me!!!

Tue, October 21st, 2014 8:55pm


Yay thanks!! ~Poetic

Tue, October 21st, 2014 4:16pm


Wow, that was an awesome short story, it took me a while to get around to reading this but I really enjoyed the read. Remi appeared kind of innocent in my mind, like Angel did, but then she goes off and kills someone! I'm watching something on TV at the moment that has a boy vampire called Angel in it, I thought that was kind of funny. But anyway, I loved this, good job.

Tue, October 21st, 2014 9:26pm


Lol, what a coincidence XD!! As always thanks for reading, and leaving a fabulous comment :). ~Poetic

Tue, October 21st, 2014 4:18pm


I liked how the term "crazy in love" came out in this story. CX Like Remi was crazy for Angel (amazing name for a guy) and she even killed for him. It wasn't really rushed, and I did enjoy it a lot. I love the very ending line, too. Great job! ^u^

Wed, October 22nd, 2014 12:37am


Yay success, thanks for taking time to read, and comment :). Yeah Remi has it bad for him, and I'm happy you like Angel used as a guy name (cause I REALLY do XD). ~Poetic

Tue, October 21st, 2014 11:36pm


Nice story. remi killed maria to save angel's life, well it was wrong to do. I think remi is crazy for angel. That's the true power of love.

Wed, October 22nd, 2014 4:42am


Yup, Remi is indeed crazy for Angel. Thanks for reading :). ~Poetic

Tue, October 21st, 2014 11:34pm

Kenisha Liyanage

Nice story but I thought that it had more than the second bath though.

Wed, October 22nd, 2014 7:29am


Thanks for reading :). ~Poetic

Wed, October 22nd, 2014 11:54am


Definetely did not see that coming, you've got quite the imagination! I enjoyed the story, it gave a different perspective on a commen theme, well done.

Wed, October 22nd, 2014 12:28pm


Thanks for reading and leaving this nice comment :). ~Poetic

Wed, October 22nd, 2014 11:55am

Lydia Jackson Reid

I thought this was very pleasant to read, descriptions were very well written and easily understandable. I liked the twist, very interesting style. I think you might see me around your stories :)

Wed, October 22nd, 2014 5:56pm


Awe, thanks this comment is the best :). Thanks for reading! ~Poetic

Wed, October 22nd, 2014 11:56am

SE Howie

Great story, I loved how Rami has a very psychological twist to her. It also interesting how Angel acts like a girl but around this time Angel, ignoring the face he's a slave, would've had more power.

Thu, October 23rd, 2014 12:24pm


Yeah, being male he would be in a more powerful position, but also like you mentioned he is a slave so that takes away the power. Thanks for reading :). ~Poetic

Thu, October 23rd, 2014 10:44am


First of all, Angel is the smexiest, cutest name EVER for a guy!!! And, That is one the WORLD'S GREATEST, MOST AMAZING-EST, COOLEST, AWESOME-EST twist EVER!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I died reading that!! Literally, I'm a ghost now ......

Thu, October 23rd, 2014 6:06pm


Haha, thanks Stream , and once again I'm smiling like crazy at your comment!! Thanks for reading. ~Poetic

Thu, October 23rd, 2014 5:16pm

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