Poem by: poewhit
Submitted: November 11, 2008
copyright 2008 POEWHIT
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If this is in appreciation to all the soldiers who fell in war , ( and I am assuming that you too were a soldier in Vietnam - as I was one in Lebanon)- this falls well short of the mark of respect.
It is more like something you would see on a shattered head stone - if the pieces were scattered all over the grave yard - and you knew you were missing some - like a jigsaw puzzle you can never complete.
But at the risk of sounding disrespectful to you this is not a poem . It is a meaningless and lazy scattering of words.The fact that you may have been a soldier yourself behooves you to write something more meaningful or desist entirely.
How on earth for Christ's sake could this sum up all ones emotions right now - see above; who is kidding who.
Would this perchance float your boat miss mary ?
not sure anyone should say whether or not it's appropriate to deem something of this significance worthless. every soldier is going to have his/her own experience and the very fact that you've thought of them enough to write about it is respectful. sorry the above person donkylemore doesn't realize that veterans would appreciate you for at least acknowledging them enough to write about them at all even if it's off the mark in his opinion. whatever, i think poetry is what it is and it's short/long/deep/shallow etc. whatever you want it to be. that's why it poetry. write on!
I'm a Viet Nam vet - thank you
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