How Little Jane dies

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How would you deal with this situation? Not for the faint of heart. A heartwrenching story about the cruelties of abuse. Every reader should read this and try and think how they could change the outcome! What could you have done?

Imagine you are the neighbor to a family with two small children.One Saturday morning you hear the mom yelling at her 5-year old daughter Jane.She screams obscenities at her and tells her she is worthless, stupid, and disrespectful.You hear the little girl crying and pleading, the sound of glass breaking, a thud and then silence.You’re unsure what to do.Should you call the police?What if you’re wrong, or what if your neighbor finds out who called?You think to yourself “Maybe it wasn’t as bad as it sounded.”So you do nothing.

Meanwhile at Little Jane’s House……

Mommy is sleeping late Saturday morning like she often does after drinking that smelly stuff called alcohol.Jane doesn’t like it when mommy drinks cause it makes her act funny and sometimes she gets mean.Jane is hungry but, she waits a while hoping mommy will wake up and fix her something to eat.Much later she decides to go ahead and get a bowl of cereal, as mommy shows no signs of waking up anytime soon.She tries to be real quiet, but the cereal box is up too high in the cabinet, and Jane can’t reach it.She drags a kitchen chair over to the counter and uses it to climb on so she can grab the cereal.She still can’t quite reach the box so she stands on her tip toes and stretches her little arms as far as she can.Just as her fingers close around the box, she loses her balance and along with the box of cereal tumbles to the floor.Trying hard not to cry from hitting her elbow on the counter, she hurriedly starts to clean up the mess, wiping the few tears, that manage to sneak out, onto the sleeve of her dress.With a sick feeling of dread in the pit of her tummy she realizes it’s too late.Mommy storms into the kitchen and Jane can tell by the look on her face that she is really mad.She starts yelling angry words at Jane telling her she is “worthless,” “stupid” and “disobedient.”Then she grabs Jane by the hair and smacks her in the mouth.

Jane tries to tell mommy she was sorry, that she didn’t mean to be stupid, that she was only trying to get something to eat cause she was really hungry.She had went to bed the night before without supper, because mommy was punishing her for being disobedient.(Jane had forgotten that she wasn’t allowed to answer the phone and she had gotten excited thinking it might be daddy and answered it.) Mommy stops her apology by slapping her in the mouth again, causing Jane to stumble against the table and knock a glass of water to the floor, shattering it in a million pieces.Mommy screams at her, calling her “a clumsy and disrespectful brat.”Jane isn’t sure what being disrespectful means but it must be something really bad because mommy locks her in the closet for a long time.She tells her to sit in there and think about how she can be a better little girl.She tries, she really does, but it is dark and scary in the closet and she misses her daddy so much.Why doesn’t he come home and save her?Or take her out for ice cream like he sometimes does?

Her daddy is her hero.When he is home he protects her and her baby brother from mommy when she gets in one of her moods.Jane is proud to go out with daddy; he is a lot of fun and looks nice in his military uniform.He is also big and strong; always smells so good and makes Jane feel safe.

She promises mommy when she finally comes to let her out of the closet that she won’t be disrespectful anymore.But just to be sure, mommy tells her to go straight to bed without supper.This makes Jane feel like crying but she knows that if she cries mommy might think she is being disrespectful again and that could mean more time in the closet, so she puts her head down and walks slowly to bed.It isn’t until mommy locks the bedroom door and her tummy starts to rumble real loud that the tears come.

Little Jane is happy to be going back to Kindergarten Monday morning, because it means she will be able to get something to eat.It has been a long weekend with daddy gone for military training.Jane spent most of it locked in her bedroom, with only a bowl of macaroni and cheese to eat the entire time.

Jane comes home from school excited to see her daddy, but he isn’t home from the military yet and mommy is passed out on the couch.Quietly, so as not to wake mommy up, she tiptoes upstairs to check on her baby brother, who she can hear whimpering in his crib.Jane knows by the smell that his diaper is yucky.Baby John is lying in is crib, his little body shaking.He has been crying so long his voice is now hoarse and his tiny face is all red, puffy and tear stained.As Jane reaches in the crib to get John’s spoiled milk bottle, he spies her and his cries become louder.He reaches his tiny arms out for her to pick him up.As she is trying to get the side of the crib down, mommy comes into the room, bleary eyed, her hair in disarray and the smell of alcohol surrounding her.“Jane!”“What on earth is all this racket?”“If I have told you once I have told you a hundred times, I do not like to be woken up when I am taking a nap!”“Is that too hard for you to understand, you little idiot?”“Why don’t you ever listen?”“You make me regret ever having you in the first place!”I swear Jane sometimes you are incredibly stupid!”“You can’t even keep the baby quiet for a few minutes while I rest!”“I guess it’s too much to ask that you help out a little bit around here, dammit!”

Little Jane remains very still with her head and eyes glued to the floor.She is terrified and really needs to pee, but she knows from experience that to say anything could cause mommy to become even angrier and she might end up back in the closet or worse.The last time mommy was this angry and Jane tried to tell her she was sorry for being so stupid, she was beaten with a wooden spoon for back talking (another word Jane doesn’t really understand), until her legs were bleeding and herbackside was swollen black and blue.

“Helloooo, Jaaaneee!”“I am talking to you!”“What the hell is the matter with you young lady?”“Think you’re too good to answer me?”Well by God, I’m your mother and when I ask you a question I expect you to answer me!”She grabs Jane by the arms and shakes her.“Do you hear me?”

“Yes mommy, I’m sorry I thought you wanted me to be quie-“

“Shut up!”“Just shut the fuck up!” “I’m sick of your attitude!”

Jane saw mommy’s eyes go a deeper shade of blue and her mouth forming spittle at the corners. Jane knows she is in big trouble.She manages to whimper “Daddy," before mommy grabs her by the hair and starts slapping her in the face over and over.Jane once again becomes very still and goes limp letting her small body slump to the floor.She immediately curls into a tight ball with her hands and arms covering her face for protection against the onslaught of slaps, punches, and kicks that are being delivered continuously……

Little Jane closes her eyes tightly and thinks of her daddy and the delicious pink bubble gum ice cream that he had bought her last weekend at the Post Exchange store….

“Daddy will be home soon,” she tells herself as the onslaught of blows continues without mercy….“Why?" She thinks sadly as the pain overwhelms her and her world turns black, "am I such a bad little girl?" “Why doesn’t someone come and save me?”.......

Meanwhile you the neighbor come home from work that evening and see police cars and an ambulance at Little Jane’s house. As you get out of the car, you notice a lone figure in military uniform, standing on the front lawn holding an ice cream cone in one of his large hands.The pink gooey bubble gum pieces have started to melt and slide off the cone, but he doesn’t seem to notice as he stands there, silently with tears streaming down his face, watching the paramedics load the small lifeless body, covered in a white sheet, into the back of the ambulance.

More than 3 million (Child Help 2006), children die each year due to child abuse and neglect.That is approximately 4 every day……………………..

Natalie McCart

Submitted: February 13, 2010

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I cried and cried and cried! So Sad! Wow!!!

Sat, February 13th, 2010 11:14pm


Thank you.

Sat, February 13th, 2010 8:04pm


AHHH! It's too sad for me to finish!!! {I read like 4 paragraphs} Poor poor Jane!!!!! Why is her mother soo cruel????? Stupid mother :( I hate stories with this kind of plot! It's way too sad for me!!!!!!!! But it was good {expect for the plot}...:) your fan Dove ^_^

Sun, February 14th, 2010 1:51am


I understand, it is a difficult read,, but important message for people to understand. Thanks for trying. I realize not everyone will be able to read this story!

Sat, February 13th, 2010 8:06pm


Practically Enchanted:

Amazingly effective. In conveying the deathly torment of a defenseless child. Also amazing is how some people will deny, to themselves and others, the existence of such abuse. Even when state and local governments operate 24 hour a day, 7 day a week "Child-Abuse" telephone hot-lines.

I have attended some Christian "fundamentalist" gatherings where 1 or more speakers advocate for the use of severe physical punishment in raising and disciplining a child. "Sins in the name of Almighty God!". To be committed against one's own children. Sometimes the children of others. Their justification: "The child will not die!".

What a world!

Good writing job. Had me in tears at times.

Happy St. Valentine's Day,

Ed Bradley.

Sun, February 14th, 2010 7:06pm


Thanks Ed for your well thought out comments. I hate when religion is used to committ morally and illegal acts in the name of God or Allah, or Budda, or the Goddess, etc.
Severe punishment only serves to emotionally damage or frighten a child. Do we really want to prove our point so much that we would hurt our children to do so. Most physical punishment happens in the name of for their own good. Which I say is rubbish.

Sun, February 14th, 2010 10:12pm


Practically Enchanted:

After giving this important issue more thought, I've decided to share some additional comments.

1. Girls do need to be raised differently than boys. Most of the time. For example: Boys need much more in the ways of structure and discipline. Society places a more severe set of expectaions on boys. When they become men. Strangely enough somehow! Excluding physical abuse.

2. A late friend of mine, who was the Director of the N.Y.S. Child-Abuse Registry, told me, in 1978 of his own misgivings and observations with respect to this.

His main observations:

1. Legalized abortion was supposed to curb "child-abuse" because every child was supposed to "wanted" as opposed to "unwanted" children, who were the "abuse" victims. Or so the argument goes.

2. In the aftermath of legalized abortion (1973), the incidents of "child-abuse" sky-rocketed with major increases every year thereafter. Most ironic!

Happier trails,

Ed Bradley.

Sun, February 14th, 2010 7:24pm


I didn't know that child abuse increased in relation to legalized abortion. Do you think the increase was due to the abortion law? Interesting thought. I myself don't agree with physically punishing a child when ther are so many better ways out there to teach children right from wrong and consequences.

Sun, February 14th, 2010 10:09pm


AAAAHH! I just finished reading it and umm...what happened to John? He did make it alright, right?:) What did that father do? Please, please tell me that that stupid excuse for a mother gets what she deserves:) Poor little girl! S And to think she thinks that she was just being a bad little girl. I have to admit that at times I want to jump in and slap the mother a few times. Man, this one piece, this one little piece of writing, is full of the horrors of what happens to children. I know I've commented to how I couldn't read the first few paragraphs, but now I'm happy I've finished it.:) It motivated me as a person to try to help people not only when it's convenient to me. ^_^ ....poor little Jane:(

Sun, February 14th, 2010 11:12pm


Do you want what probably really happened or the happily ever after? I will give you both since you were so gracious to come back and finish reading. I really appreciated that as I know it was difficult. Ok here goes:

The realistic ending is that mom spends a few years in jail or gets off on some technicality or insanity plea.
Dad gets charged with failure to protect if he had any prior knowledge of abuse in past and John goes to family or Foster care.
Happily ever after ending: Mom gets life in prison. Dad eventually remarries a wonderful woman who is gentle and kind and baby John lives happily ever after.
Take your pick!

Sun, February 14th, 2010 10:06pm

Donna Cavanagh

Oh my! So sad and so well written. I cried throughout the whole read.

Sun, February 14th, 2010 11:17pm


Sorry to make you cry, but thank you for crying. It is a tough read and I appreciate your reading it. I feel it is an important topic and something worth writing about.

Sun, February 14th, 2010 10:02pm


I attempted to read it all the way through. Though... I can't say that I did. I'm glad you posted this story though, because it's an issue that needs to be addressed, and heard. From what I read though, I cried for little Jane. It hits closer to home also cause even though I'm only a teen, I volunteer at my church over the summer to take care of kids at Vacation Bible School (sort of a program some churches do). I've met kids still in elementary school that have just gotten out of situations like that. It breaks my heart when either I hear, or one or two kids trust me enough to tell me what happened. Seeing the aftermath is horrible... it's astounding how some people can act. I don't understand it at all.... Oops, haha, sorry for the little mini-rant. Still, kudos to you for posting this. :)

Mon, February 15th, 2010 1:01am


Sorry you couldn't read it all the way through. So glad to hear that there are kids out there like you helping other kids. Thanks for crying for Little Jane.

Sun, February 14th, 2010 9:58pm


I managed to get through it though I have to admit I did find it hard. As a mother of three I can't believe that there are people out there that can treat their own children like that. I thought that you wrote the story really well, and like some others said, I'm glad that you posted it. It's small things like that that can hopefully make a difference somewhere else in the world :)

Mon, February 15th, 2010 4:21am


Thank you for reading it. This story is a hard read but stuff like this happens everyday and I just want to do my part to help prevent it. If one person who reads this gets involved in prevention or thinks aobut making a hotline call when they are undecided sometime then it was worth it. I really appreciate your reading it even though it was hard for you, that says a lot for who you are!

Sun, February 14th, 2010 9:17pm


oh my goodness, i dont even know what to say.. for one that was an amazing piece.. just amazing and sad. That is so ridiculous that happens to innocent children they dont ever deserve that ever! all in all thought excellent work it was emotional

Mon, February 15th, 2010 5:22am


Thank you for reading. I know it was a tough read for most and I appreciate the time.

Sun, February 14th, 2010 9:56pm


Good story...Some minor editing might be in order in some parts but that takes nothing away from the story's effect(hence all the comments above).
i have witnessed abuse in the family and in the neighborhood as a kid. it sucks but it's real. it should be noted,too, for anyone who wonders if these stories are true stories; even if they are fictional they are true...every last detail.

Mon, February 15th, 2010 7:08am


Thanks for your comments. Iam terrible at grammer and punctuation. I have comma trauma and put them everywhere and as for independent and dependent clauses, or coordinating conjunctions forget it. Yes you are right parts of this story is based on truth of a couple child deaths I dealt with.

Mon, February 15th, 2010 2:25pm

Sara Blake

This was a very well written piece that made me want to come into the story and...I don't think words are able to express what I'll have done to that poor excuse of a mother! I really liked this, the message of the story as it brings attention upon a very painful truth-child abuse! I think the fault lies in all the people that, although know about what's going on, decide that it's not their business and decide to ignore the situation. I despise those kind of people! Anyway, I really think you did a great job with this one ^-^

Mon, February 15th, 2010 12:48pm


Thank you. You definately understood the message I was trying to portray.

Mon, February 15th, 2010 2:17pm


This was good but if i was the neighbor then F the mother im calling the cops (but then they would probaly arrest me) but still

Mon, February 15th, 2010 5:15pm


I like your attitude! Thanks for reading.

Mon, February 15th, 2010 2:16pm


This was such a tragic and sad story. If I was the neighbor I would be calling the police no matter what. I agree child abuse is out of control and needs to be stopped. This was so heartbreaking to read. Very well written and kudos for you writing this. Jessica :)

Mon, February 15th, 2010 7:06pm


Thank you Jessica.

Mon, February 15th, 2010 2:15pm

Vincey Delaney

So hard to believe but it's terribly true and sickening!! I feel so upset to think that it happens so often, so shameful. You surely created a scary, black disgusting picture. Excellent work, hope you get many important comments too!!Take care, be in touch!

Tue, February 16th, 2010 12:08am


I have gotten some excellent comments already. People feel passionately on this topic and that is good because this means people are willing to do something. Thank you for reading.

Mon, February 15th, 2010 6:43pm


I'm used on seeing and hearing these kind of stories in my own job - and I'm working in this "child's home"(don't know the word in english..) and there are couple cases like these where the child had been abused. So, this is reality and some people unfortunately tries to ignore it completely.

This story was touching and tragic one, made me shed a tear or two. If I would have been the neighbour, I would have called the police, get some help for the Little Jane before it was too late.

And, I'm thankful that I've never had to see anything this worse in my job. All the kids have been saved before things got this worse.

Thanks for sharing this story, I think this makes lot of people think about our children state in this world.


Tue, February 16th, 2010 2:32am


Thank you. I am glad what you saw never got this bad. Thanks for reading. I promise to check out some of your work.

I hope others have you opinion also about what they would do.

Mon, February 15th, 2010 6:41pm


a great story that has a message to all adults.

Tue, February 16th, 2010 11:32am


Thank you.

Tue, February 16th, 2010 8:33pm

Skarlet Sky

Oh my gosh, that was so sad. After I read it I felt numb and speechless that this really does happen. It's not just in books, its in reality too.

Tue, February 16th, 2010 2:56pm


Yes unfortunately it really does happy. Thank you for reading.

Tue, February 16th, 2010 8:32pm


Oh my lord... what to say? It was amazing, obiously not the actual story, but how you brought it across. I was in tears the whole time and at the very end I got goosebumps. Its horrible to think this stuff actually goes on out there.

Tue, February 16th, 2010 4:19pm


NOt the actual story but some basis in fact. Thank you for reading my story. Sometimes I jsut have to write about what I deal with everyday.

Tue, February 16th, 2010 8:29pm


OUCH!!!! Yet she still called her mommy... how cruel and ...URGHHHHHHH!!!! poor little thing she was forced to live her short life with adrunk mother.. i really don't know what to say more D: D: DX

Tue, February 16th, 2010 4:56pm


Thank you for reading and yes children still love their parents when they are abused, they just want the abuse to stop.

Tue, February 16th, 2010 8:27pm


yes, very sad indeed, I cannot bear to watch such things on the news or read about them in the papers, but I did read your story to the end and you made me feel cold inside, think it was the lifeless little body and the daddy part. (We got a guy here in UK who drove his car into the river with his kids inside just last week, one has survived though, he should have his eyes cut out with blunt knives.) Radical I know, but as a father of two grown girls, one now a nurse the other a teacher and a grandchild, I am very protective of children. Well written, very sad story.

Tue, February 16th, 2010 7:51pm


I agree sad, but necessary. How awful about the guy who drove his car into the river. I have a knife you can borrow.

Tue, February 16th, 2010 8:26pm

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