Another try

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is part 2 of "You missed" please read it first and after this one the final installment is called "You wished me gone".

I kneel here bleeding.
my will to live, your pretense keeps feeding.
Looking into your eyes, I see the pain of destroyed love.
You raise your blade high up into the heavens above.

You hold it tight as my torn body bleeds its life away.
I stay there kneeling in front of you as I see tears telling me more than you would ever say.
You send the blade down at me with burning furry.
I asked myself why should I die if I can stay with you? I'm in no hurry.

The blade strikes me with precision and power.
It strikes my heart and shatters, but the pain of shrapnel did make my every feeling of happiness turn sour.
I shiver in pain as blood is running out of me with every beat.
You look on at me as I pull myself to my feet.

Almost all at once I unsheathe my own blade and fall back from being to weak.
Tears of rage rest upon your cheek.
I will not fall on the first strike alone,
For through my life I have developed a heart of stone.

I still love you and wish us together was fate
Yet I know you loath me and my very existence you hate.
I know you want me gone. to go to hell and fry,
But I am still here handing you my blade for another try.


Submitted: June 28, 2007

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Sewage

F********CK. Dammit, where did that come from?! F*ck man, this poem is awesome. 5 F*ckuing stars. And another 50 if i could, damn...

Thu, June 28th, 2007 8:12pm

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Thanks it was a tough one to write.

Thu, June 28th, 2007 1:27pm

amateur01

IM TOTALLY WITH HIM!!! I LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOVE LOOOOOOOVVVVVVVVVVVVEEEEEEEEEEEE YOU MISSED AND PART 2 ALSO!!!!! 5000000000 STARS!! f*ck you can have the sky!!

ok, i always tell you i love 'you missed' but i never said WHY -it's because the emotion, and the language, the whole THEME in general of how you still persist even though 'this girl' (oo-er) is just doing something so horrible as stabbing you... and its just.. wow... i love it! it's really beautiful, stunning, wonderful and the whole thesaurus of words!!

Thu, June 28th, 2007 8:21pm

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Thanks a lot. I am happy you guys found it so good. I can agree to say that they are my best pieces and 3 is soon to come.

Thu, June 28th, 2007 1:29pm

fallenangel13

woah...this is amazing...im very impressed...

Sat, July 28th, 2007 7:49pm

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Thanks I rarely get commented so all coments are very much appreciated.

Fri, August 3rd, 2007 3:44am

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