Frosted Glass

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is another of my attempts at free verse. It is set in a hospital where a patient is regaining consciousness. I have tried to uses senses and make it as vivid as possible.

Hear the gushing sound of a sea shell.

The sea rising and falling as

You precariously float,

In and out of consciousness,

Gradually gaining clarity.

Hear the urgent muttering of voices,

Anxious but not wanting to be heard.

The sounds slowly separate

Into individual distinguishable personalities.

They are disturbingly familiar,

Yet unfamiliar too.

Your nerves are tingling and

You feel achy all over.

With effort you flex your fingers and

Register the soft and silky texture of the

Bed sheets beneath your fingertips.

Now breathe deeply.

Try and release the tension.

Inhale the sickly sweet scent of bleach

Accompanied by the lingering alcoholic aroma

Clinging to and stinging your nostrils.

You slowly lift your heavy eyelids and

Gasp. Your vision is foggy and fuzzy shapes are

Merging together, causing claustrophobia.

It's as if you're looking through frosted glass.


Submitted: April 24, 2012

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moonphish

that was an eerie blurring of the senses coming slowly into focus as something best left blurry...nicely presented

Tue, April 24th, 2012 10:40pm

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Thankyou :)

Thu, April 26th, 2012 4:53am

SGBanks

Everyone goeas through this at some point in life... very well written

Thu, April 26th, 2012 11:51pm

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Thankyou :)

Fri, April 27th, 2012 3:50am

SmileValentine

clearly written in right timing.. nicely done! :)

Sat, April 28th, 2012 9:20am

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Thankyou :)

Sat, April 28th, 2012 3:37am

Yume chan

Amazingly written! The faniliar yet unfamiliar voices are so true, you know its doctors speaking yet you have never met them before. The senses you touch with your words are fantastic. Breathing life into it, as I read I could smell what you describe. Another brilliant poem. Don't like hospitals and rather stay out of em hehe

Sat, April 28th, 2012 9:22am

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Thankyou :) I have the exact same opinion of hospitals hehe, they're so eerie!

Sat, April 28th, 2012 3:36am

glitter snow426

wow, a genuine super glowing hit, truly special, you are sooooooo good, keep up the fabulous work!! JUST AMAZING!

Sun, April 29th, 2012 1:31pm

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Aww,thankyou :)

Sun, April 29th, 2012 10:51am

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