See this Surface full of scars..? 1

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

we all have scars

See this surface full of scars

Soul trapped in surrounded by steel bars

Reaching out into blindness

Crawling around inside, searching for kindness

Feeling around the cold gravel

Where’s the safest path, the road well-traveled?

Seeking sunlight in a cave of darkness

Keeping hope in this time, when hope is the furthest

See this surface full of scars

It’s because I’ve been trapped behind many bars

Reached out my hands for help before

Just to have my heart and soul tore

I’ve searched the world for kindness

To know that I must concur loneliness

I know now that the safest path is not the road most Traveled

But the road unmarked, the meadow well flowered

This cave now my home, holes dug out for the sun and stars

See this surface full of scars…


Submitted: July 23, 2014

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unmasked delusions

I really like the title of it it I feel it was unique and made it so the reader could connect to it in their own way and it went nicely with the last sentence of course. I like the message of this it seemed well thought through. I liked the line "Wheres the safest path, the road well-traveled?" because I feel like it really spoke to me- saying that it would just be easier to go the way everyone else has went because they all turned out safe but then I liked how the end was the road "unamrked" which I thought was a clever way to put it and unique twist- so overall very well done I'd say.

ooh and I just wanted to say I know you didn't enjoy my work, I think it was mostly because you didn't read the summary- but I thank you for being honest and saying how you felt, and I know everyone interprets things in a different way. I always read people who have given up their time for my work regardless, So I went ahead and read this I'm not going to lie- I enjoyed

Thu, July 31st, 2014 1:03am

quetzala

Thank you! and I actually went back and reread your poem and the summary ;) and a few of your other poems as well and I like how you can write from other view points and not about yourself. It's something I need to work on. when I write most the time it's to release my insides so all my poems are pretty self centered and when I read poems a lot of the time I'll like a poem that I can relate too. Your poem actually hit a nerve and reminded me of this guy I know and sounded like it was pouring from him which really hit a nerve. but overall you hit the nerve exactly like if I had been reading his mind would have so you did an excellent job capturing the prospective that you were trying to great job!

Mon, August 4th, 2014 3:01pm

hullabaloo22

I can so relate to this one, quetzala, especially the reaching out of hands for help only to meet with rejection. Fantastic poem.

Fri, June 10th, 2016 8:20pm

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thank you so much for your comments I appreciate it :)

Mon, June 13th, 2016 12:52pm

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