See this Surface full of scars..? 1

unmasked delusions

I really like the title of it it I feel it was unique and made it so the reader could connect to it in their own way and it went nicely with the last sentence of course. I like the message of this it seemed well thought through. I liked the line "Wheres the safest path, the road well-traveled?" because I feel like it really spoke to me- saying that it would just be easier to go the way everyone else has went because they all turned out safe but then I liked how the end was the road "unamrked" which I thought was a clever way to put it and unique twist- so overall very well done I'd say.

ooh and I just wanted to say I know you didn't enjoy my work, I think it was mostly because you didn't read the summary- but I thank you for being honest and saying how you felt, and I know everyone interprets things in a different way. I always read people who have given up their time for my work regardless, So I went ahead and read this I'm not going to lie- I enjoyed

quetzala

Thank you! and I actually went back and reread your poem and the summary ;) and a few of your other poems as well and I like how you can write from other view points and not about yourself. It's something I need to work on. when I write most the time it's to release my insides so all my poems are pretty self centered and when I read poems a lot of the time I'll like a poem that I can relate too. Your poem actually hit a nerve and reminded me of this guy I know and sounded like it was pouring from him which really hit a nerve. but overall you hit the nerve exactly like if I had been reading his mind would have so you did an excellent job capturing the prospective that you were trying to great job!

hullabaloo22

I can so relate to this one, quetzala, especially the reaching out of hands for help only to meet with rejection. Fantastic poem.