Love That is Untold Until It Happens

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

I am in love with this guy he will never know it though. Until the big break comes.

"Why can't he know?" is all my best friend says and wants to know. "Because if I tell him he will hate me."

"No he won't. He likes you and you know it."

"No he doesn't. You are crazy!"

" No im not! Drop it ok? "

Is our converstion everyday I see him every morning we sit next to each other all the time we are best friends. Until he decided on his one to tell me that he hates me and never whats to talk to me again. I start crying and don't know what to do besides hang up and never talk to him again. All the teachers think we are so good friends and put us next to each other all the time. We argue all the time. One night he calls me and said

"I never wanted any of this to happen forgive me please."

 I go "why would I you have made me suffer so much and I have cryed so much and I never know what to say."

He goes "Listen and I will never speak of it again."

I go "Ok sound fine go."

He says as soft as you could ever speak. " I love you with my whole heart I nevr want to loes you again. But something tells me I just did so sorry for everything I have ever put you though." And he hangs up. Once again I am in tears I want to call him back and say I love you too! I will never leave you! But something tells me he won't answer. I dont know what to do besides call my best friend tell her what happened she was so happy and said what did you say after he said it. Did you tell him I said no. I really wanted to I lived in a life where I am afraid of what people think of me. Until it happened. One night I work up the courage to tell him in the morning. I got to school asked his friends where he was (they hate me). They said sick. I said ok I will call him thanks! I called no answer. I said ok i'll go to his house after school. So i was destracted all day. I had a right for what I am about to find out. Its been about 5 weeks after that call. I knock on the door, no answer. I still have a key, so I unlock the door and go in. Afraid. I walk up the steps to his room and I start crying. I see a note a gun and blood and a body. I grab the note 



I am sorry the love of my life doesnt love me back and isnt talking to me and I dont have a purpose of living anymore. So i am sorry goodbye!


I am sitting in his room crying I grab my phone and call 9-1-1 and they answer and say "what is your emergency "

"I say my friend comited sucide." And I hung up. I hear sirrens coming, people coming up the steps. I space out I don't care anymore I am frozen. My heart is dead. I dont have a reason to live either. I cant take this anymore I love him more then life. I get taken out of the room I dont care though I am frozen. They take me to the hospital right after him, because I am not responding. Both of our parents are there they get me to start responding.  I don't belive he is dead when I get up. they ask if I want to see him I say "yes." I see his dead body and scream as load as I can I love you more then the world so forgive me I want to be with you and I will be soon. I am under house watch but I dont care I am writing a note that says my goodbyes. My mom rins upstairs to cheak on me and sees it and calls the police again and make me sit at the hospital for a week. I get to go home and I am on medication. I read it if I overdoes I will die. I go to the bathroom and write my goodbyes one more time and shove it in my pocket. I go to the kitchen and get a cup of water and grab the bottle of pills and run upstairs. When I get to my room set my note up put the pills in my hand 10 of them and take them 2 by 2. And lay down and close my eyes. WIth in 20 minutes I am dead and with him. <3!

Submitted: December 08, 2014

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Really interesting. You really grabbed my attention. Could you probably check some of my work out?

Mon, December 8th, 2014 1:31am


Yes, I totally can, I am sure you are amazing! And thank you I will try to write more like this.

Mon, December 8th, 2014 7:57am

Emma Brooks

Wow. Just incredible. So touching and sad, but still so good! And you are in 6th grade? Like wow! Amazing! The diction was awesome. Your detail was great as well. But if I might provide some constructive criticism to your work, I hope that is okay! There are a few misspellings here and there and there were a few periods missing. Also, when addressing yourself, "i" should be capitalized. Also, when you write dialogues, it is helpful to separate them into their own lines so it is easier for the reader to read it. Separating them makes your work a bit cleaner. But overall, the content was great. I'm a HUGE romance fan (like that is all I write most of the time) so I really enjoyed this piece! So sad at the end but yet, satisfying. It reminded me of Romeo and Juliet almost!
Keep up the amazing work Rachel! You have a lot of potential!
~Hyuna :D

Wed, December 10th, 2014 4:15am


Why thank you I love how you gave feedback, thank you. I know I need to work on spelling and punctuation, sorry about that. I love your storys.

Wed, December 10th, 2014 8:27am

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