Waves of havoc

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Literary Fiction  |  House: Booksie Classic

sad grief eccentric

My mind in an erratic mode,
my thoughts end up in dilemma.
Time reminds me of reality,
yet I seek dreams while I'm awake.

Dubious about my present,
blank about my future.
Woe is my broken destiny,
who has the power to heal?

As I look back at my path,
it was surely a journey.
Love and pain, 
tears and laughter,
emotions so transient.

My passion still so vague,
my happiness hidden in a fog.
I wish it rains and the sky clears,
let the rain drops cool my eyes.

 


Submitted: October 20, 2013

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Moonbeam18

I found this poem a little all over the place. I'm not sure I really understand what you're going for. The first two stanzas I identify with and feel like they really get at the feeling of being young and lost among so many choices for the future. Than the third seems to switch into the narrators future, looking back and the fourth is almost like the narrator regrets the choices made and wants to "wash them away."

Am I close?
Either way, definitely a good start and an interesting idea.

Mon, October 21st, 2013 8:22pm

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You have understood it perfectly. Yes, the poem travels through time, it looks at the present, future and then goes to the past. By "wash them away" I meant, for things to get better. I have my own way of writing.


I hope you liked it :)

Tue, October 22nd, 2013 8:22am

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