"Disconnected"

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to end a relationship, like conquering an addiction.....

Feel the warmth of the denial settling on your skin,

When the numbness of defiance is creeping within,

If ever, you let go of me, with those shaking hands,

It will lead to the depths of courage in distant lands.

Forgetting the bleached love of my once wilted roses,

They have waved goodbye to all the begotten doses,

Cuz the drugs won't work anymore on the cells in my brain,

And I just gravely adore the way you've turned into my bane.

When I try to inject you, only chrome teardrops fill my veins,

You just pour outward, and away from me, down into the drains,

And as you travel like a vagabond in exile, throughout toxic zones,

You think about my kingdom, and how you've since been overthrown.

The psychedelia sets in and begins the rapture of my mental neurons,

Yet, in surpless, you have received a harsh blow to your electrons,

That have been flowing aimlessly, through the blood of the invisibles,

Within the inter-cranial confessions, I still become succeptible.

But to attack these addicting vessels of yours once more,

Is such a beautiful release, for my once euphoric spores,

So it would be wise to regain strength while you are still able,

Until you pick yourself up off the floor, you won't be stable.

Connect your intelligent software to your bent hard-drive,

Wake up now, I've done my part, and it's your turn to thrive,

Your weakness has unleashed a deadly, flesh-eating virus,

But I will no longer support your habit, so you can forget about "us".


Submitted: July 01, 2008

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Pratibha

OH MY GOD....Such a pwerful poem....really amazing

Tue, July 1st, 2008 6:21am

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u really think so? I'm so happy u understood the message...thank u

Mon, June 30th, 2008 11:25pm

Laurel

I agree with Pratibha comepletly =]
I also loved the way the rhyme flowed without sounding forced

Tue, July 1st, 2008 2:04pm

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thanks-I knew it was awesome!:D

Tue, July 1st, 2008 10:59pm

mystory

Wow, this poem was absolutly beautiful! I loved it! So sad and full of power and emotion. Great job. ^^

Tue, July 1st, 2008 6:34pm

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Thanks-I'm so joyed that you liked it :D

Tue, July 1st, 2008 11:03pm

AngelaSteele

This was also a very powerful poem.
Very descriptive and once again
I have to say I loved the rhymes.
The last few lines were admirable,
the beginning drew me in.
You word choice was impeccable;
And as for the message,
Where do I begin?
...Amazing!! :)

Tue, July 1st, 2008 6:45pm

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It feels so great to be back "in the zone" thank u for your encouraging comments....:D

Tue, July 1st, 2008 11:05pm

Nixie

You know, this is very fitting right now. I think relationships are very much drugs - the buzz you get, the lows, the obsession, the need and desire, the tears, it all fits. You use some strong examples, and I love this line -"You think about my kingdom, and how you were since overthrown" because there is always someone threatening to take your place. Another drug, better than the one you have? Ok, I'm done, it was great. :) Oh and I love the music, spot on. ~ Nixie

Wed, July 2nd, 2008 9:50pm

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thank u, thank u so so much....I love your comment, and it's a cool song, huh?...It's one by The Cure...

Wed, July 2nd, 2008 3:10pm

thebrokenhearteddontsleep


Wow. This was really powerful.
I loved it. xD
Great job!

~!~Megan~!~

Wed, July 2nd, 2008 11:58pm

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Hey, thanks there Megan;) I'm glad you liked it...it's my favourite haha;D

Wed, July 2nd, 2008 7:33pm

findingmyway

Wow this is so powerful..kind of sad, but in a way, it makes me feel happy for the speaker - that she found the strength and courage to let him know. Very, very good job on this one. :)

~ Susan

Thu, July 3rd, 2008 12:29am

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Great to hear that-yes, I hope everyone can learn something from this, that relationships can be dangerous, being addicted to the wrong person is really a hard toll to pay....thank u for the comment...glad to hear from u too...:D

Wed, July 2nd, 2008 7:36pm

Pratibha

i honestly liked it...

Thu, July 3rd, 2008 4:27pm

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thank u:D

Thu, July 3rd, 2008 9:51am

nuttyz

i really liked this one!!! so very powerful!!

^_^

Sat, August 2nd, 2008 10:26am

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thank you :D

Sat, August 2nd, 2008 12:09pm

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