"Enter the Dream"

Poem by: RaisinGirl

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I just wrote this for anyone who feels alone, yet inspired to dream....

I sit alone by the fireplace, and my simple mind despairs

It's all caught up in a tangled web, contemplating thoughts of you

Someone appears in front of me with an open hand

But I notice that it is not empty, yet holds a room with a view

I step into the room, and it leads me into another realm

I pass through the corridors of your thoughts this time

As you whisper to me softly and you caress my face

Until I realize in this dream I have dulled it's shine

For you have now disappeared into the darkness

And left not a trace of your soul, not even a candle

To burn a flame for a guiding light for me to see

And I must face the fact that you've gone off to handle

Another place in time for you have so many dreams

To fuel in other minds and you must press on

For I am nothing but a dying flame in this barren place

So I drift along blindly for I cannot see what's gone

But I cross paths with another fading light, but I grasp onto it

I won't let go of it for I need the fuel for my sunken eyes

My misfortune has caused us both pain and I know

I need to return to the surface quickly in my disguise

For I wish to be out of this dream and into reality

I return to the surface now and I have survived this bliss

I am awake as I should have been before I took the dive

Before I took your hand, and before I fell into this.......

Submitted: June 21, 2008

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air

WOW! 'gasp' I totaly love this poem, there is so much hidden meanings in it. :D

Sat, June 21st, 2008 5:42pm

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thanks-now I have to go back and find those meanings..haha...for some reason, I come up with this stuff when I should be asleep...

Sat, June 21st, 2008 11:34am

mystory

So cool! Very beautiful, and has such strong emotion. Very good visual, too. Great poem. ^^

Sat, June 21st, 2008 11:58pm

Author
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I am glad u got to read it...I thought u might like it..so thank u ;)

Sat, June 21st, 2008 11:22pm

AngelaSteele

I agree, so much hidden meaning. It could've had many meanings for all I know. Everyone iterprets things differently. Very good. :) Strong emotion, and the visual was breathtaking. I have to say I'm giving this an " I liked it" vote :)

Tue, June 24th, 2008 8:26pm

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thank u, thank u, thank u YAY!!!! :D

Tue, June 24th, 2008 1:31pm

Pratibha

needless to say i am voting for it....made me sit straight and read....

Thu, July 3rd, 2008 5:07pm

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yeah-thank you-I really personally love this one best...;D

Thu, July 3rd, 2008 10:11am

UncommonCold

I am completely stunned by the beauty of this poem. honestly, I am very impressed. Impressed with the symbolism, the imagery, the rhyme scheme, the structure, and the meter. It's wonderful.

Sun, July 6th, 2008 6:52am

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thanks so much, and for becoming a fan(Enter the Dream seems to be my favourite of my own too)...I will defintely stop by soon to have look;D

Sun, July 6th, 2008 1:18pm

Jawa

Woaw. This is just simply, deeply awesome. I really liked it. It gives out such poweful emotions. Yay this is so awesome i'm beginning to repeat myself. A definite 'I liked it'!

Sun, July 20th, 2008 9:15pm

Author
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thank u so much, and for becoming a fan ;D

Sun, July 20th, 2008 4:21pm

Agnesa Belegu

Beautiful. I simply adore the description, it took me there. =D seriously, i love it when poems have that kind of power. +1 Liked it. =] good job.

Tue, September 23rd, 2008 9:57pm

Author
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I thank u deeply for allowing me to share it with you-I am glad u were able to enter the dream=)

Tue, September 23rd, 2008 8:22pm

shaina

thats lovely piece
of work

Tue, December 16th, 2008 11:23am

Author
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glad you entered the dream as well...thank you ;D

Tue, December 16th, 2008 10:49am

Alicia Djeri

That poem was so awesome!!! wow I really love your work it reminds me of one of my poems I wrote ages ago but I have not published it yet! I think you must dream a lot I also dream a lot too great work really!:)

Thu, January 1st, 2009 7:50am

Author
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oh, thank you dear alice, so much, for entering the dream....one must dream, to live life better....please do let me know when you get yours posted, cuz I would definitely luv to read it....*meg*=D

Wed, December 31st, 2008 11:57pm

kitty98

WOW, you surprise me everytime I read something from you, this envokes so much sadness, yet at the same time you can't help but feel a little bit of hope go through your soul.
FANATISTIC JOB. =^_^=

Thu, May 21st, 2009 8:38pm

Author
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thanx, this is one of my personal faves, just like my recent Sacrificed Hearts...this one is a bit melancholy, but thank u for entering the dream, and taking the journey *m*

Thu, May 21st, 2009 9:32pm

Jessica George

had good imagery,and good meaning, great job!

.:XxJessxX:.

Sun, June 14th, 2009 1:59pm

Author
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thank you for reading it, I'm glad you liked it :D

Sun, June 14th, 2009 9:56pm

Mistress of Word Play

A delightful read. It almost sounded like a near death experience. Drowning perhaps and getting to that first or second level of death. Very neatly done. It sets the mind to work.

Wed, September 23rd, 2009 1:37am

Author
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well, to each their own interpretation. my writing is creative art and if that's how you imagine it, then I guess my job is done well, so thank u for leaving your opinion on this piece *m*

Wed, September 23rd, 2009 4:02pm