Old, New, Borrowed, Blue

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic
Old affections- New conflict- Borrowed smile- Blue day. A poem.

Submitted: February 02, 2011

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February 2, 2011
 
Old, New, Borrowed, Blue
Old affections-
Faithfully harbored,
Flawlessly anchored,
Held at bay but still
 sunk.
New conflict-
Inevitably obstructing,
Maddeningly adapting,
A ring leads to a
knot.
Borrowed smile-
Expectedly enthusiastic,
Uncomfortably elastic,
Lend support and earn
ache.
Blue day-
Ironically cloudless,
Internally desolate,
Two made one and left
parts.
 
A/N: The title alone should be enough to let you know what this is about. The first verse is about a secret love. The love becomes unrequited, and the person in love watches the object of their affection get married and is left behind. This is not anything I’ve ever been through, and I certainly hope to never have to experience this pain. The poem was intentionally gender-neutral; that is, it is up to the reader to choose whether it is about a boy who loves a girl, a girl who loves a boy, a boy loves a boy, a girl who loves a girl, whatever. I did this to make the poem more relatable to anyone who’s ever harbored feelings for anyone, I know that’s something most people go through and poetry is a wonderful way to relate your feelings. I really liked the ship symbolism in the first stanza. The second stanza, especially the third line, gave me hell. I really wanted to convey a sense of constant and shape-shifting ‘conflict’ and ‘obstruction’ to show that this person has always known they could never have the person they love for whatever reasons the reader wishes. I also wanted to show that the new conflict was final and permanent- the person’s object of affection loves somebody else and is marrying that person. I knew I wanted to incorporate ‘elastic smile’ somewhere in the third stanza, but I decided not to go any farther with mask imagery due to other emotions in need of conveying in said stanza. The final stanza went back to being difficult. Blue? I knew there was the obvious- ‘blue skies’ or ‘blue eyes.’ It was a convenient rhyme, and I did describe the weather (Alanis Morisot’s ‘Isn’t It Ironic’ was in my head the whole time afterward) but I didn’t want to give either the person ‘telling the poem’ or that person’s object of affection a definite eye color or appearance. And that’s the whole thing! I’ve been writing a lot of poems lately because I’m entering a contest at school. I can- and intend to- submit up to three poems, and I want to have plenty of options so the ones I do submit will truly be my best. I think I’ll be choosing ‘Polyhymnia’s Lament’, ‘Little Black Voice’, and this one. Feedback is greatly appreciated! And have no fear, faithful readers (are there any out there?). I’ll still update both The Legend of LaLaLand and Weighing Apples at least once this week, and every week from now on with minimal exceptions. Whew, that was a long A/N for such a short piece. I sure said ‘object of affection’ a lot…


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