ASTRAY (Poem from 'The Other Side of a Reflection')

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

This poem is called 'Astray'. It's about loneliness and sometimes how we lose our path and fall into wrong things. Life brings many changes, many surprises and some are misguiding. Even within poetry, I sometimes feel that I'm lost.

 

And even though the pen is mightier than the sword,

I seem to have lost my presence in a grieving combat,

Valuing the occupancy of idle prayers contoured,

Less the guilt of maturing through a horde of dirty facts;

The world finds me sundry rationales to scream this pain,

Diversifying my wisdom with that of teary remains,

Bickering the thought of justified emancipation

While agonizing seems my choice of venom, though hardly sustained;

But just when I approach the closest line of victory,

Memories of inane sorrow, these lanes of tomorrow find me astray;

 

More than a bloody design, I’m the obligation of teary flow

Scripting this narration across walls of empty vocation,

Patronizing my guilt through aisles of surrendered shadows,

And still not found within the satisfaction of dreary locations;

My worst nightmare seems to be this occupation I pursue,

Crying paths towards freedom, and still no escape…

If patience is a nourishment of tears, the Lord must identify truths

That retaliate intentions hallucinating the pretence of faith,

For where a tale of occult visions begin,

Words of poetic exercise, a world composed of lies find me astray;


Submitted: January 10, 2012

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Christian Taylor

Beautifully written! I loved it!

Wed, January 11th, 2012 2:00am

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Thank you. Please feel free to stop by my facebook page for more poetry and a lot more stuff. Stay Blessed.

Tue, January 10th, 2012 6:07pm

browneyedsoul511

This is just beautiful! You're a gifted writer, became an instant FAN now :D

Wed, January 11th, 2012 2:18am

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Thank you so much. Feel free to stop by my official fan page.

Tue, January 10th, 2012 6:23pm

AHHA

Beautiful use of vocabulary! Very well written! Keep up the good work!

Wed, January 11th, 2012 2:21am

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Thank you very much. If you get time please take a second to stop by official fan page. Much Love.

Tue, January 10th, 2012 6:24pm

loverofsadness

Hi....ummm ur poem was very sentimental and it touched my heart(because im going through same situation now)....
Though I could not understand few words (im only 17 yo) and i had to look for the words on google, but still i read it because i cant afford to leave such a nice piece of writing ...
I wish i will be able to write like you one day :)

Wed, January 11th, 2012 7:39am

loverofsadness

and yes if you can review my maiden poem THE DAY BEFORE VALENTINE....and please dont give fake nice reviews...kindly point out the flaws and give tips to write better....i want to improve not to be flattered...

Wed, January 11th, 2012 7:46am

John Xu

That's dramatic. So beautiful the poem. This is gotta be one of the best poems I 've ever read. Good job

Wed, January 11th, 2012 9:45am

Shweta

What it depicts is a restless soul who is not enjoying what he/she is doing. If I'm right? If it's that, you explained it well...at certain time one has to think for the possible meaning. At times it was hard to comprehend...but it's nicely done!

Wed, January 11th, 2012 10:03am

sydeeee

WOW!
What a choice of words!!Amazing!
Well, you have Such a vocabulary!Impressive!
The thing is,I rarely login to FB...so can't read there.
But I'll surely read here!!Thanks!

Wed, January 11th, 2012 11:44am

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Thank you so much. I just posted an exclusive poem from my upcoming book 'Memories Become Stale'. If you can please check it out. Much Love.

Wed, January 11th, 2012 6:43pm

GigattGirl

OH my goodness! That's so beautiful i don't even know what word to use to describe the diction to it! I clicked liked but i actually wish there was a "love it" button to click! Keep up the great work! :)

Thu, January 12th, 2012 12:48am

Author
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Aww thank you so so much. Really means a lot to get positive feedback. Got a new one 'Memories Become Stale' up. Stay Blessed.

Wed, January 11th, 2012 6:45pm

Adriiannaborrego

This was such a great poem i had a fun time reading it to bad there isnt like an amazing button

Thu, January 12th, 2012 4:40am

Keeper of Hope

Lovely and simply breath-taking. I felt as if I were clinging to each syllable; unable to separate from the elegance of it. Please keep writing; you're beyond extraordinary.

Fri, January 13th, 2012 1:22am

Wu Lang

Sorry Sir for not reading right away this awesome masterpiece!i am busy with my work here in the nursing home...and just read request one after the other...i can see it...your an intelligent man and a brilliant writer..i love the rhyming and the deep words in the poem.i learn and gain more knowledge from you.Take care.God Bless you always.i wanna be your fan.

Fri, January 13th, 2012 8:17am

Gepikwhereis

A great poem!

Fri, January 13th, 2012 10:41am

Neika

Hi! I'm so glad I got the reading request! This poem is beautiful!

Fri, January 13th, 2012 11:54pm

GuardianAngel85

This is a really amazing poem! KMU! Glad you told me to read it!

Sat, January 14th, 2012 8:56pm

sillydreamcatcher

wow, this really well written. very well expressed i truely loved it. FAN!

Sun, January 15th, 2012 7:21pm

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