LEAVES OF AUTUMN

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: War and Military  |  House: Booksie Classic

This is not about a specific war, but war in general.

LEAVES OF AUTUMN

The falling leaves of Autumn,

Ten thousand, maybe more,

Are gathered up together,

Just like the year before,

And in the game of soldiers,

They forgot to keep the score,

Another year,another bloody war.

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Once they shone with life,

Their faces to the sky,

Joyful in their colours,

Beneath the Summer's eye,

But Autumn came too quickly,

Now they're scattered on the floor,

Another year, another bloody war.


Submitted: November 22, 2008

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air

ahhhhhhhh Ricky this is so touching
very, very nicely written indeed!

Sat, November 22nd, 2008 5:36pm

Author
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My ambition is to write poetry that makes people cry...always a challenge. Thank you.

Sat, November 22nd, 2008 1:37pm

angellynn

Very good Ricky, as usual your poem was wonderful.
I really enjoyed it. Keep up the good writing.
Your fan, angellynn.

Sat, November 22nd, 2008 11:25pm

Author
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Many thanks angellynn. I'm grateful for your feedback.

Tue, November 25th, 2008 1:47pm

gerabel

Touching and memorable.

"But Autumn came too quickly"... yes, such is life.

Well done, my friend.....Jerry

Sun, November 23rd, 2008 12:46pm

Author
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That's the mood-changer from the previous lines, hopefully to
add some gravitas to the message. Appreciate the comments.
Your friend, Ricky.

Tue, November 25th, 2008 1:59pm

Gift Of Noni

Ricky,

Nice analogy 'falling leaves and falling soldiers'

I also enjoyed the implied thought that we are somewhat like leaves enjoying our coloful moment in the sun.

Great Job,

Tim

Sun, November 23rd, 2008 12:52pm

Author
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Tim. I'm aware that you may have an added dimension of experience on this topic, from your days in the navy.
I hope that I did the subject justice, and thanks for commenting. Ricky.

Tue, November 25th, 2008 2:02pm

Philip H20s

That is strange, just posted a poem about same subject. Have to say prefer yours, great job.

Mon, November 24th, 2008 9:01am

Author
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Wow! Indeed strange...I suppose the time of year does inspire us, as we see the changing colours of Autumn. I love to photograph the scenery at this time, more than any other season. Thank you for your kind comments and I'll have a read of your poem too! Ricky.

Tue, November 25th, 2008 2:06pm

Brown Skin

"But Autumn came too quickly..."

Just like life...very good piece. Liked it a lot.

Wed, November 26th, 2008 3:30pm

Author
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Hi Jamale. I thought that line summed up the melancholy.
Take care. Ricky.

Sun, November 30th, 2008 1:36pm

christy osborn

Great way to capture the growth of beautiful green leaves in spring to the brown, dried out leaves of winter that become a "bloody war" in ours and everyone elses' lives. Great poem! Gave it a like.

Wed, November 26th, 2008 7:13pm

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Hi Christy. Many thanks for the well expressed comment. Ricky.

Sun, November 30th, 2008 1:37pm

Nixie

I love autumn, favourite time of the year! Enjoyed this poem very much, especially the line "Once they shone with life, Their faces to the sky, Joyful in their colours, Beneath the Summer's eye..." lovely work, as always! ~ Nixie

Thu, November 27th, 2008 2:23am

Author
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It's a season that inspires ideas. Glad you liked it Nixie, and thanks for the kind comments. Ricky.

Sun, November 30th, 2008 1:39pm

punne4e


^^Hello Ricky,One that is wonderful,The words like,Autumn,leaves,year they make a story or song itself.Really i enjoyed it very much and thanks to intimate to me.Congrats once again for this outstanding piece.

Have a great and good week to you and May God bless to you.
Your friend-Vicky.punne4e

Thu, November 27th, 2008 3:47am

Author
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Vicky. I appreciate your words. Keep in touch.

Sun, November 30th, 2008 1:40pm

Marathongman

Excellent - short to the point I love it

Thu, November 27th, 2008 10:33pm

Author
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Hi Marathongman. Will visit your page soon for sure!

Sun, November 30th, 2008 1:41pm

Sameera

Well done..I've enjoyed it.

Mon, December 8th, 2008 5:28pm

Author
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Thankyou Sameera.

Mon, December 15th, 2008 1:05pm

Baz

Great stuff yet again, Ricky. Its a fine art to be able to write both the profound and the nonsensical, and you do both really well. "Like It" from me.

Mon, June 8th, 2009 1:31pm

Author
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Hello Baz. I've written a few rubbish ones over time, but this seems to have hit the mark. Nature is a powerful tool for analogy.I heard that someone cried when reading this, which made every word worth the effort.Thanks for your kind words, and I'll be sure to read more of yours soon. Happy writing! Ricky.

Tue, June 9th, 2009 5:32am

palewriter

Very true and sad with frustrations obvious underlining tone. I like the comparison between the leaves and soldiers. They're natures are so similar. I have a poem that is about old age and it also uses leaves as a comparison. (it's not as good though, ha ha)

Fri, August 28th, 2009 3:19am

Author
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I dug deep for this one. It's among a few that I am especially pleased with. Take care and thanks for the critique. Ricky.

Mon, September 21st, 2009 4:51am

Vincey Delaney

What a soft, beautiful piece. I loved it!!! I adore the season of Autumn, it's so bright and colourful.You're very desdcriptive!

Thu, October 1st, 2009 1:01pm

Author
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Hi Vincey. Thanks for feeding the thoughts back to me. I wanted to describe the beauty of Autumn, but link it with the melanchololy of war.

Tue, October 6th, 2009 4:42am

Mistress of Word Play

Another beautiful write. You did this one just right.
Susan

Sat, October 24th, 2009 8:05pm

Author
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Many thanks Susan. I wanted to express the melancholy associated with war and fallen leaves after summer seemed to make a suitable analogy. Ricky.

Fri, October 30th, 2009 2:24pm

LindsayB

Short but sweet! Good luck with your poetry book. :)

Sun, October 25th, 2009 10:00pm

Author
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Hi Baz. Well, I am determined to get the book published this year. Take care. Ricky.

Fri, October 30th, 2009 2:25pm

NazireC

I have to say, concise, short and direct. This was a wonderful read and really touching. your voice was strong and your poetry was not choppy.
Excellent work.

Thu, November 12th, 2009 6:55am

Author
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Thankyou Nazire for your considered critique.

Mon, November 16th, 2009 2:01pm

the scribbler


War, it seems,
Wakes everyone's dreams,
Except for those very few,
I enjoyed your war,
It shows there's more,
To a poet, than his simple view!

Mon, January 4th, 2010 10:23am

Author
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Thanks for your well thought out comment!

Tue, January 5th, 2010 12:18pm

NoS482

I love it Ricky right to the point. Chess pieces falling another to take it's place all it is a larger chess board. Who wins in the end of a battle who really wins at the end of a war?? What do we fight for?? 1234.:) nos

Sat, January 9th, 2010 2:19pm

Author
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Yes you are right, the chess analogy works too. This one seems to have struck a chord with people. I'm glad I wrote it. Cheers from across the big pond!

Sat, January 9th, 2010 4:39pm

hollydar

This is such a beautiful poem. You succeeded - it made me cry!! War is such a waste of lives - I loved the way you likened the fallen leaves to the casulties of war. Giving this my vote. Pat.

Mon, January 11th, 2010 7:12am

Author
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Wow! I am really honoured that it moved you that way. You're the second person to say this. Thankyou Pat, for your kind encouragement. Ricky.

Tue, January 12th, 2010 4:56am

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