one side is warm

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

the winter sun

sitting half in the shade

and the other half in the sun

one side is warm

the other side is numb

is my life half over

or has it just begun

life is just a line

i've known about all the time

two sides to everything

two sides to my mind

one side for failing

and the other side for trying

half of my life in the dark

while the other half is blind

one half for living

the other is for dieing

sitting in the shade

my life looks dim and dark

to many obstacles

making my life hard

yet sitting in the sun

my life is full of hope

i am as tall as a mountain

surrounded by a glow

the sun begins to move

pushing away the shade

one half is getting stronger

the other is begining to fade

one half is getting it together

as the other becomes less

now one half

becomes three quarters

of a life

that doesn't make much sense.

By briAnRcosTer.


Submitted: May 27, 2009

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angelmona

wow, im utterly speechless! this was so good that i almost heard ur heart call the poem^_^ i totally relate to ur poem, some times i feel like there are 2 sides of me a happy and a sad soul i get realy confused and i feel like my life doesn't make sence at all, but keep reminding ur self that there is always hope, and life is jus a test

Thu, May 28th, 2009 12:07am

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thankyou very much mona :)

Wed, May 27th, 2009 10:16pm

angelmona

for some reason the last of my comment was cut off so anyways, keep writing, ur a great poet XD Mona

Thu, May 28th, 2009 12:09am

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thankyou mona i will :)

Wed, May 27th, 2009 10:16pm

JenDamsel

i'm with Mona here' speechless. this is a fantastic poem rusty. really good job.
i too can relate to this, well maybe everybody has two sides to they real self.
amazing poem
~Jenn :D

Thu, May 28th, 2009 12:15am

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thankyou very much ~jenn :)

Wed, May 27th, 2009 10:18pm

Escaping minds

That was really well done, i love how almost anyone can relate to it. it u fell closer.

Thu, May 28th, 2009 12:04pm

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thankyou very much :)

Thu, May 28th, 2009 6:51am

Baz

Very nice, yet again.

Thu, May 28th, 2009 3:04pm

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thankyou very much baz :)

Thu, May 28th, 2009 1:39pm

Snow412

This is a wonderful work of paradox!

The way you phrase it didn't make it sound as if you were trying TOO hard to rhyme! It flowed evenly with so much in the context.

I feel sad when poetry looses it's meaning for rhymes...but this one didn't!

great piece

Thu, May 28th, 2009 10:06pm

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thankyou very much

Fri, May 29th, 2009 2:32am

BlackTear

Cool poem! I enjoyed it, it was very intresting.
~Alexa

Fri, May 29th, 2009 10:53pm

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thankyou ~alexa :)

Fri, May 29th, 2009 4:58pm

Vamplit

What great poem. I felt connected the whole way through. Simple style with a really inspiring message.

Tue, June 2nd, 2009 1:32pm

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thankyou very much :)

Tue, June 2nd, 2009 2:04pm

angellynn

Very good my friend! Your getting really good at this poetry thing! Did i say really good? I mean really great!

Angellynn :D

Wed, June 3rd, 2009 7:21pm

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thankyou very much my friend :)

Wed, June 3rd, 2009 9:24pm

Katiedid

I feel I can relate to this and I agree that there are always two sides to every story (and often two sides to a person) For me, this poem portrays inner conflict and the difficulties of choosing one path or another.

Good job! I likes!

Mon, June 8th, 2009 2:28pm

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thankyou very much katiedid :)

Mon, June 8th, 2009 2:15pm

Manyfacets

What a great Poem Rusty. You always manage to
come up with something profound, and spectacular.

Sorry to be slow at responding to fan email alerts,
but Booksie is giving us all a hard time.
Thanks for the read. It is really great.
Kind regards M.

Tue, June 30th, 2009 3:07pm

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No i be thanking you,very very much..i love to write,i don't like criticism of any form,i try to write possitive,but sometimes it is hard when one can't seem to pick themselfs up,however poetry to me as i am sure to you all is a fantastic cure for depression,my goal in this life is to spread happiness and joy to as many who want to be happy,life has a very crule twist to it and if we truely sit back and think about life and its meaning there is none except for two eternal places/heaven or hell..and to be honest i believe that our bodies are just like the family car,our soul is the driver when our car gives up our soul then looks for a brand new car to drive sometimes we end up in a body back in the same family and sometimes we don't hence the expression dejavue.that is what i believe,i also believe our souls are eternal,and we are pure and simply survivours that spend our time devouring planets until there is nothing left that is why we spend so much time money and resources looking for other planets to live on,how do we know that aliens are not jusst ourselfs coming back to check up on our progress,just in another dimension,this is what i belieeve i am not screwed in the head,but as a child i was abussed for nearly 15years and as a child life was meant to be the part we want to live for because we don't have any true understanding,yet for me i wanted to die.but now as an adult i have a better understanding an appreaciation for life and people,we need to be honest but we also need to be possitive with each other,like the weapons we have in this world are not to protect our plannet but to hurt each other,then i write a simple yet different poems that gives people a different view and some think i am twisted?:)bla bla bla

Tue, June 30th, 2009 3:02pm

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