Lightning

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

An attempt at poetry...

The day was humid, it was sticky and hot

We needed relief, the skies opened up

Sweet smell of rain, the wind started blowing

The sky gave some warning

Air was charge you could feel it

Then it struck

It flashes, it cracked, it rumble

Copyright 2008Ted Quinn
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Submitted: July 01, 2008

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Nixie

Ted, I see poetry has got a hold you! This was a great poem, nice words (loved the last line) and some imagery too. Wait for it, soon you will have the analysts commenting, and I think that's the best part about poetry, and that's when you will want to write more and more. ;) Great job! ~ Nixie

Tue, July 1st, 2008 10:16pm

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Yes, it has and thank you very much. That was my first, with no rhyming. I tried another called F.L.A.G-it is acrostic, I think that's what they call it. Well, thanks again. Ted

Wed, July 2nd, 2008 4:06pm

Charlotte Emma Gledson

A visual poem!

Sat, July 5th, 2008 9:13am

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Thank you very much, Ted.

Sat, July 5th, 2008 5:28pm

Kred35

A BEAUTIFUL poem!! Like Charlotte.....very visual!
Very creative, and felt it was beautiful. I like that word "BEAUTIFUL".....BUT IT is beautiful. Enjoyed reading!

Sun, July 13th, 2008 3:33am

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Thank you so much. I truly appreciate your time and, as always, your kind words. I have to catch up on my responses. I took a break over the weekend. "My Birthday Weekend." (I tried to stretch it out for all it was worth. July 12 was the actually day, but I stretched it out from the 11th to the 14th, not bad, huh? Take Care, Ted

Mon, July 14th, 2008 8:08am

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