Holy Intervention Needed

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

Its been a while since I been away fro church. Now that I see the evils the country is becoming to be veiled in, I'm now seeing I need God more than ever

Holy Intervention Needed

I got this herb in me

When I should have the word in me

I unfriended you, when you kept on friending me

Now that im at my worst

I hope you willing to work with me

Trapped on soil full of negative vibes

Faith in you turned to faith in nines

Faith in nines turned to faith in hatred

Faith in hatred made us all turn our backs

On the man that we all hailed sacred

I'm on track to becoming one of them,

So I'm seeking early forgiveness

A sinner... You feel the sin in this?

As them demons come for me,

Disregard those blessings stamped return to sender

Forget an approach thats more gentler

Tough love is sometimes what a person need

If they hope to snatch the chains of their environment

Just to be freed


Submitted: December 09, 2014

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unmasked delusions

There are a few grammar mistakes but the poem holds a lot of power and I really like the message. The world is becoming more corrupt everyday and I hope people will turn to God. I have asked God for forgiveness recently and this poem has given me faith. Thanks for sharing and I hope everything works out.

Sun, January 4th, 2015 9:33pm

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Thanks! I'm glad my poem could empower you and give you hope

Sun, January 4th, 2015 2:24pm

jctolliver

Yes, there are a few grammar mistakes but there are also some in my own writings. I just tell people to please not overlook the message within. Love the poem, it is a lot like some of mine, especially "Into The Light." Please check it out if you can. Keep the faith and most of all hope because hope is the only and last thing we can hold onto. Good work, good job.

Mon, January 5th, 2015 1:45am

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Thanks!

Tue, January 6th, 2015 1:03pm

DJcyan

This is pretty good. I like the way you composed your words. Great poem! I think you should totally make this into a song :P

Tue, January 6th, 2015 4:44am

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I wrote it as if it was one at first but I'm thinking about it. Thanks :)

Tue, January 6th, 2015 1:04pm

Nikki Xayachack

I love this poem. so much emotions.Although there are grammar issues, yes. but I think its just your style of speaking which is certainly exuding from your poem. Check out some of my poems.

Thu, January 8th, 2015 6:54pm

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Thanks and will do!

Fri, January 23rd, 2015 9:48am

80sbaby

I honesty liked it. As with anyone, you feel what you can relate to. And if you can see, not just a world you envision, regardless of whatever reason, but a world that presents a picture more so due to the fact that it reminds you of home, and depending on your definition of home, it’ll make you smirk, to say the least… then you can feel it. Outside of that, it was good because… it was good. I can see that piece being used as spoken word, because each line can be elaborated even through freestyle, and off the top of your head and tip of your tongue. As far as the previous mentioned grammar errors, there are some words that can use an apostrophe, or a comma… But I think what most or speaking of is more so a manner of your presentation. To that. I say “do you”. Write as you speak and target an audience that doesn’t see errors, but sees home.

Thank you for reaching out and opening my eyes to this. I will definitely check out more.

Fri, January 9th, 2015 4:39am

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I liked the way you related to poetry as seeing a sense of home and that is true cause most of my poetry is inspired by what is around me. Thank you for understanding and I feel that the message is more important. If people get the message I am trying to convey, then I feel I have done my job as a poet.

Fri, January 23rd, 2015 9:47am

mmodi201

A very powerful poetry with lots of energy. There are indeed few grammatical issues but theme and your energy covers those mistakes.
Keep it up. Good job.:)

Thu, January 22nd, 2015 7:10am

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Thanks! The message matters tome the most!

Fri, January 23rd, 2015 9:45am

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