In One Night

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Romance  |  House: Booksie Classic

when you really love some one.and you having fantasy thoughts about them.then that dream finally come real.

In one night, my fantasy dream come true.

Between me and you.

In one night, you gave me romance.

In one night, I can feel the fire immense.

In one night, you express your emotion

With such a deep passion.

In one night, I can’t deny how I feel.

In one night, you show me your love is real.

In one night, you made me feel complete.

In one night, intensity builds up inside of me.

In one night, I lost my senses.

In one night, I can hardly breathe.

In one night, I went to heaven.

In one night, my dreams come true between me and you.


Submitted: September 27, 2008

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an0nym0us

i like it.. lol

hahhaha

deep.. but i dont really get, cause i never had that night yet..
hahahha

my fav lines there are..

In one night, I can’t denied how I feel.
In one night, you show me your love is real.

...

i'll be back to read some more..

.x peace

Tue, September 30th, 2008 12:12pm

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thank you so much for reading it.and yeas my first name is love

Tue, September 30th, 2008 5:16am

SteelSniper

Hey nice one, I know what its like to have fantasy thought about someone lol. Just a tip, Try keep it in once tense. IE
In one night, I can’t denied how I feel. Should be In one night, I can’t deny how I feel. and In one night, I lose my senses. Theirs more, It'll just make it flow better.

Tue, September 30th, 2008 12:12pm

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thank you for enjoyed reading it and for the tip.
and yes my first name is love

Tue, September 30th, 2008 5:15am

Pratibha

the theme and the imagination is too good....but do correct the speeling mistakes and grammer to make it flawless...

Wed, October 1st, 2008 4:56am

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alrite

Wed, October 1st, 2008 3:02am

Bottled up inside

very sweet. i like it.

Thu, October 2nd, 2008 4:49pm

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thanks

Fri, October 3rd, 2008 3:13am

Marathongman

nice

Fri, October 3rd, 2008 10:45am

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thank you

Fri, October 3rd, 2008 11:02am

SaraS

This is a BEAUTIFUL poem
it just brings up emotions I loved it
especially
In one night, my dreams come true between me and you.
GREAT WORK!

Mon, October 6th, 2008 12:40am

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thank you for your support

Mon, October 6th, 2008 3:13am

amira

i love it cause it happens in that 'one night'. very romantic and dramatic too...is this poem meant for someone?

Sun, October 12th, 2008 1:37am

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thanks

Mon, October 13th, 2008 3:07am

abby parish

How romantic, I loved it.
Abby

Sat, October 25th, 2008 1:27am

shaina

wow how romantic u amaze me are u sure u are just 16yr old? you did a very good job love the way u put it all

Fri, December 5th, 2008 12:32pm

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I'm positive.but thank you.and the way I write it.
I just use my imagination.

Sat, December 6th, 2008 4:13am

shattered

love's sister

wow i love that poem it make me smile can't wait till i also have that speciall night. Girl you are talennted when it comes to poems, which i had that talent. Do your thing
GOD BLESS YOU

Fri, February 27th, 2009 10:59pm

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