Why did you do it?

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Other  |  House: Booksie Classic

warning really sad. but you will love it.

He just came back from hell on earth. He had been at war for three long brutal years. Constantly on his toes waiting for someone to try and steel his life. I saw my Tall, thin,buff, brother standing in formation until everyone got off the plane. I whispered to my mom " Are you sure thats Danny?" My mom did't answere because she was to busy crying. Her only son was standing ten feet in front of her. Why was she crying? She missed him. I have watched her pase back and fort in the livingroom for three years. There is even a line in the carpet that she had worn out from walking back and forth. Danny was now headed toward us. What was i going to do? He stops and strares into my mother's eyes. "Mom." he said. My mom reahed up and wrapped her arms around my buff brother. After they are done he reached down and messes up my blonde, shaggy hair. Who is this man and what did he do with my big brother? He wasn't the same skinny,tall, and nerdy kid that he was before he went to war. I had lots of questions to ask him, but i was afraid to know the answers. I didn't even dare to ask him if he shot anyone. Later that night he slept in my room with me in my king size bed. I'm not sure why my mom got me that bed because i'm only seven years old. My brother fell asleep and i soon began to close my eyes and was startled by something. My brother jumped up and screamed stop shooting at me. He didn't go back to sleep because he was too scared. My mom says he suffers from Post Tramatic Stress Disored. Its a disorder you get after a tramatic even in life, like war. Every night my brother would scream the same thing over and over again. Mom finally convinced him to go to the doctor to see what was wrong. The doc said it was just his nerves because he wasn't used to living in US anymore. He sent him home and told him to get to rest. Now two years later my brother's disorder got even worse. He took the matter in his own hands and ended it with one bullet when my and dad were at work. The shot was so loud that i believe the people in China could hear it. I went to his room to find a note that said " Dear family i can't take it anymore. i'm going crazy. I feel like a burden to everyone. i love you all Danny." By that note there was a big pool of blood and by the pool of blood was the body of my dead brother. Today i am sitting here at his funeral writing this story to tell people that they have the power to write their own story. Just like my brother did. Little by little everyone kept loosing faith in him and look where he is now. In a casket with crying women around him. Why did you do it Danny? Why? Then they closed the casket.

Submitted: February 02, 2012

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I'm sorry about your brother. It's a good piece of writing even if it is sad. But getting it out helps with the process.

Thu, February 2nd, 2012 1:59am


thanks and yes it sure does!

Thu, February 2nd, 2012 2:20am

Shadows of Memories

That was just superb Shawna. Its one of the gems you have written so far. It has a deeper meaning leaves the readers with a room full of thoughts and silence. i just loved this so much. And the format is so matured and even the word selection.just keep it up shawna. u will go high. BUT AGAIN...you know me i love correcting for betterment :
#1-spelling mistakes,missed words, few grammatical errors.
#2-u must not directly start writing it here over Booksie . You must first write it in MS WORD and then copy-paste. That will let you do revising your piece and make it corrected and fine.

Ok. I am clicking on the I LIKE IT button. just love it :)

Thu, February 2nd, 2012 5:41am


thank you guys sooo much!!!! it means the world to me!!!!!!!

Thu, February 2nd, 2012 7:29pm

glitter snow426

wow, such a sad empty, heartbreaking one, GREAT WORK, VERY SAD, SPECIAL SO HEARTFELT!!

Thu, February 2nd, 2012 10:31pm


thanks guys i love to write from my heart! i have always been pretty good at it.

Thu, February 2nd, 2012 11:36pm

Ian Dawn

Its sad that people lack the undersatnding to realise someone is hurting inside and it so often ends in tragedy. Its difficult to cope but writing helps heal

Thu, February 9th, 2012 9:37pm


thank very much writing is my healing! i thank you for the comments.

Thu, February 9th, 2012 3:01pm

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