Friendship or romance....... The defining choice
Poem by: Shazza
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You pull a funny face, and i try to hidemysmile,
then we burst into laughter, this moods there for a while,
just then i realsise something, a sign from above?
somewhere between all our laughs and jokes i fell in love.
I try very hardnot to look at you in a different way,
because in truth I am scared incase you push me away.
My friends they say that you don't seem to feel the same,
and that if i am playing then i will need patience in this game.
I hope they're wrong about you wanting to be my friend,
I want us to have a begining not an end!!
Submitted: July 08, 2011
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Wow you blow me away every time! You are a very talented writer and I really liked this one :) keep writing! ?
Fri, July 8th, 2011 2:52pm
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Thanks for saying i blow you away? ;) thankyouu sarah :D..... i am reallllyyy glad you liked it.. i will keep writing sarah...... Lots of love from your bestust fan Shazza!???????
Fri, July 8th, 2011 7:57am
How do you even put so much emotion, deepness and thought in so little words?! Simply amazing; it's wonderful. My god, this is just brilliant. and I can't even find the right words to describe how much this amazed me. x
whenever you post something new,please LMK, i'd love to read more of your writings! x
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Thankyou for such an amazing comment :D ahhhh this is sch a luxuary to know that you enjoy my writing.. i will let you know!! :)??
Sat, July 9th, 2011 12:53am
This is really good hun!!
I am liking it hehe
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Thankyou so much lovely.. i'm liking this comment ;)?
Sun, July 10th, 2011 12:15pm
This poem was enjoyable but I feel you could space this out a bit for a greater effect on the reader but good job. :)
Mon, July 11th, 2011 5:03am
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Okays, much apperiated, thanks for your opinion:) love..Shazza!?
Sun, July 10th, 2011 11:10pm
A very intereting poem with great emotions. The first and the last lines are remarkable with a powerful message in the game. Besides the spelling error, there are a few spacing errors. I like the poem.
Mon, July 11th, 2011 7:40pm
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thankyou:) means a lot that you took the time to read my poem:)?
Mon, July 11th, 2011 1:18pm
Wow... WOw... WOW... you are sooo good... much better than me... My poems like never rhyme... i'm soo ashamed now...hehehe... I really liked the emothion... YOu're soo good at expreasing your thought in a poem..
WOnderful work... I LOVED IT....Hehehe.. Write more and tell me when you will...
:):):):):):):):)
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AWWWW.... thankyouu soooooooo much, i'll read your poems soon if you like :D... this comment is lovely.. loads of my poems dont rhyme hehe ;) some do but some dont so :D dont give up keep trying! thankyouu i do try and put emotion into my poems. Thanks you sincerely for this comment!!! I will keep ypu updated :D!!!?
Fri, July 15th, 2011 12:43pm
Loved it!
I'd say it was extremely CUTE!
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Haha! thankyou :D :D :D :D :D xxxxx
Sun, September 4th, 2011 11:54am
Amazing poem; short and sweet. Loved it. The title is perfect! :D
A few notes that I took:
1. In the first line you have to space out "hidemysmile" to "hide my smile"
2. In your 3rd 4th and 8th line "i" should be capitalized
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haha, thankyou, and i was actually just about to fix that but hought i'd check out my comment first, haha! thanks for the comment anywaysss :) xxxxxx
Sun, September 4th, 2011 11:59am
U R AMAZING ...U KNOWI WROTE A POEM NAMED ( KINDS OF LOVE ) IT ALKS ABOUT FRIENDSHIP OR ROMANCE FROM THE OTHER SIDE ..BUT URS IS AMAZING
Sun, September 11th, 2011 4:23pm
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Awwwww,, thankyou,,, graciously soo soo soo much, i am so happy now :D this was a real confidence boost:)! xxxxxxxxxx
Sun, September 11th, 2011 9:31am
I love your choice of words, specially the last lines. Good writing. G-man
Fri, October 28th, 2011 8:17pm
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Thankyou:) means alot that you have taken some of your time to read and comment on my works :D ?
Wed, November 2nd, 2011 1:33pm
I like the message! Your a really powerful writer and it jusst blows me away. Im probably going to comment on all of your poems, I cant stop reading them! KMU on any new poems!
Sun, November 27th, 2011 4:38pm
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Hahaha thankyouu soo much... addict on my poem huh;')? haha lol just kidding........I will keep you updated though:) THANKYOU!?
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You knock me off my feet babe! How great your poems are! I feel proud that I'm your fan/friend/follower...
Fri, July 8th, 2011 9:14amOnly one spelling mistake - realize is misspelt to realsise...
The ending is fantastic. Crescendo! You're a Smooth criminal!
Ha ha Kmu... Your friend, Arun...:)
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haha smooooothh criminal ;) I will keep you updated thanks Arun my fan/friend/follower ;) Lol thankyou for the comment:D much love shazza!?
Fri, July 8th, 2011 7:12am