"Waves" contest

Writing Contest by: Siked

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She was driving fast, her head fogged with the stress of life. Grades and work, relationships and the future, life choices. She needed an escape from it all. Out of impulse, she pulled off the road. A secluded beach. She sat in the car, admired the lull of the waves and tried to remember the last time she had taken the time to look out and appreciate the beauty of the world. The childish urge to splash in the water and forget about responsibility gripped her. She climbed out of the car, pulled off her shoes, laughed at the feeling of the sand between her toes. She pushed all her worries aside and ran into the water. She smiled up at the sun and the cool breeze rushed through her hair. She was struck by how insignificant her problems are. Blessed with living and worried about something as small as a grade on a piece of paper. She splashed in the water and none of it mattered anymore. All the studying, the late nights, job interviews ceased to mean a thing. She dunked her head under the water and wished she hadn’t wasted her life. She never came back up.

Submitted: March 24, 2017

Flash Fiction water waves contest

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I enjoyed your story. I liked how this person was able to put away the stress and worries and enjoy the beach like a child again. I admit though I thought the end seemed a little out of place. I enjoyed this story because it had that beauty of returning to innocence and fun and it made me smile, and it seemed like a very happy, motivating story. So when the end came it was a bit abrupt and different to what I expected. Sometimes abrupt can be a good shock but I think I had really enjoyed the idea of having fun, that I expected it to end on that same happy note. Of course that's just my opinion, you've definitely put more thought into this story than me. I still enjoyed this and I liked the idea of splashing around in the water, not having to worry about all the stresses of life. It was really nice to think about escaping it all for awhile.

Mon, March 27th, 2017 11:21am