I sleep; Dreams; I dream of terrible things; I fall in darkness as I awake; I hear bellows everywhere; I cant see; I'm trembling;
Suddenly, I fall back in my deep,dark sleep; I watch myself sleep for the last time and fly away; I fly away where I not know of;
I am gone; Find me.
Submitted: June 28, 2013
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its a really interesting take on showing that dark emotion. The last part isnt depressing, it makes you want to know more! keep writing!
Sat, June 29th, 2013 8:25pmnot depressing its enlightening its your want to move on to a better place, now find me. I like the suspense you built. well done
Mon, July 1st, 2013 11:27pmI thought this was really really good!! I love that movie, too! One of the scariest movies I've ever seen! Great work with this one!!
Sun, July 14th, 2013 3:18pmThis poem was actually really good. I love the format of it. IT makes it seem even more unique and cool. Great Job!!
Wed, July 17th, 2013 11:12pmI love the film and this poem is awesome. You describe the other world really well in such a few words. Good poem :)
Thu, July 18th, 2013 1:04pmI haven't seen that movie, but I've been wanting to for a while now. I like the ending "I am gone; find me" Slightly creepy and I could imagine a child's voice saying it, then eerie music playing.. gone job, the dark emotions are well expressed through such a small amount of words. :)
Fri, July 19th, 2013 5:07pmSo ambiguous, so simple... So perfectly insidious! Good job mate!
Tue, July 23rd, 2013 11:09amI think this poem has a lot of emotion to it, and he ready for an exciting journey! The whole poem describe insidious well, I think. Good job and thanks for sharing:)
Wed, July 31st, 2013 2:32amIt was very nice. I enjoyed it. You did a good job. I hope to read more of your poems. :)
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Lona333
Wow, great job. This poem really expresses dark emotion. I love the last part, "I am gone; Find me." It was my favorite part. Gets a like from me!
Fri, June 28th, 2013 12:11amAuthor
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Thanks a bunch! A lot of people thought the last part was really depressing..
Thu, June 27th, 2013 6:43pm