Camp Dragon I: The Tree of Dragons

Nicely written, good work so far, and hope to see more of your story in the future. Please look at my works

Greatly written like the part of the Latin saying in there and the definition

Nicely written, suspense from the beginning to the next chapter of wondering what will happen next.

A wonderful chapter, reminds me of when I used to play capture the flag. I enjoyed the part about the rankings.

Nice chapter, good work and wonderfully written. Mysterious voice at the end, makes me wish I knew who it was and other readers will wonder as well. Marvelous work so far

Good job so far, moving forward

Nice chapter beginning

This is a very captivating piece!! It should be turned into a movie!!! (are the Hollywood directors seeing this??)

okay so i did enjoy the way this story played out but it could use a serious proofread, some of the grammar made it hard to read at some point. try reading it to your self aloud and see of you stumble through any sentences.

now with that being said, this story has alot of potential, i like the concept of a camp for people with the gift of turning into dragons. this can go many ways and have many fun adventures, id like to see where this will go.

Good job but be sure to proofread this for grammar mostly, i dont think i noticed many if any spelling errors. keep it up :) ill be looking forward to the next chapter

good information, im sure this will be useful i read on. on to chapter 1 i go :)

Lovely description of how the moon drake blasted fire, very nice. No offense, but the plot is sounding a lot like the Percy Jackson series.

He turned into a dragon, which is cool. Adam is cool. The camp is cool. Your description is cool. I rate this... cool/cool. Congrats!

Sounds veeery interesting. My favourite sounds like the Water Drake.

you should try using gemstones for the amulets like for the sun drake the amulet should be a sun stone and for the moon drake the amulet should be moon stone. It would make it sound really interesting.

Now this is going to be an interesting story. I absolutely love dragons, so I'm going to love this :) can hardly wait to read the first chapter.

Awsome book so far! For some reason it reminds me of the Wings of Fire series.

Another excellent chapter. The excitement builds. I appreciate we had time to see them relaxed and celebrating. Your skill with interaction between characters is really nice. Some minor nits:
'The war games is a competition ...'
--- 'is' should be 'are', or 'games' should be 'game' - personally, I'd change 'is'...
'An intestine slushed by my front talon and a threw up'
--- 'a threw up' I think should be 'I threw up' ?
'I then started to run, beat me wings, jumped and took inro the air. '
--- 'me' should be 'my' and 'inro' should be 'into'
I really like your story. I love your writing style. You definitely have me hooked; I'll be back to read more when I get time.
Thank you for sharing your talent!

Yeah, Leo. Goooood fight. Unsettling having that voice but only when it wishes to speak. Nice that assistance was offered to the opposing team's captain. Very nice touch.
A couple of comments:
'I decided to take the voices advice'
--- 'voices' is missing the apostrophe == voice's
Other is just an observation. Twice the opposing captain "bounds" toward Leo. I would recommend changing one of them, probably the second, to something other than "bounding" so it doesn't read repetitive. "leapt" "sprung" "jumped" all would work, for example

And the story moves forward well. Turning into a dragon but not knowing how to turn back would be rather scary, I think. I have a couple nits:
'And an powerful one at that'
--- 'an' should be 'a'
'...top of a hill were a black banner...'
--- 'were' should be 'where'
Good movement, excitement in this chapter. I love the moon drake's fire blasting. Very nice. Your story still flows, good dialog throughout. Nice write.

I like how you listed the type of dragons. Now I know what I'm in for, haha. :)