Acting Tough

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: True Confessions  |  House: Booksie Classic

The most common lie among people is the answer "I'm OK".
100% true.

Acting Tough

 

I can handle this, I’m strong.

I know what to do, nothing’s wrong.

 

Well, thanks but I don’t need a help.

I’ll be the one to save myself.

 

Behind those expressions are hidden words.

Like a shattered note of a broken chords.

 

No need to find those missing pieces.

I’m only missing your bitter kisses.

 

I can say that I had enough.

Now, I’m nothing but ‘acting tough.’


Submitted: January 22, 2012

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blackstar07

:DD ganda ate !! rarara

Tue, January 24th, 2012 9:35am

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hahaha! ako pa XD

Tue, January 24th, 2012 1:38am

Paulsleen

I agree with you! It's all an act. But lovely poem. I like how the entire time you were lying to yourself saying you could do this and do that but at the end you admitting it was only acting. Good write :)

Tue, January 24th, 2012 1:48pm

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oh, thanks a lot friend! :) ^^

Wed, January 25th, 2012 3:31am

ccostello09

Nice poem. short and did not lose my attention - kept a good constant concept throughout and you eneded it well.

well done, not bad

Tue, January 24th, 2012 7:29pm

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thanks so much friend! :)

Wed, January 25th, 2012 3:57am

Craig Davison

This is pretty good. I am responding to your reading request, but unfortunately I don't seem to be able to relate to the horror genre, as I find it slightly artificial and escapist. Besides which, there appears to be enough horror in the real world without creating it in fiction. But that's just me, and I am old and boring. I do, however, like broken hearted love poems about emotional suffering, betrayal, loneliness, despair etc. which are life's real horrors as far as I can see. I know I will never meet a vampire or werewolf, but I have had my heart torn out of my chest (metaphorically) a number of times.
Alright, I'll be honest: there is a slight error in the sixth line. Take out the 'a'. 'Note of broken chords', but that may just be a typo. Your English does seem pretty good to me, but as a writer and a poet I would personally avoid the couplet structure, but that is only my opinion. I love rhyme as much as the next poet, but I find that rhyming couplets can get a bit repetitive and somewhat predictable. But, as I have said, that is only my opinion. Sometimes blank verse works so much better, because you can use the most specific words in a situation without being hampered by the need to rhyme. I personally like ABCB rhyme schemes, because they are the natural pop song structure, the second line rhyming with the fourth.
Example: from my poem My Swedish Bride.

I ordered a flat-pack woman
Received her in the mail
Put her together straight away
Without the use of screws and nails.

The instructions were quite simple:
"Don't be so rough. Be more gentle."
It took all my strength and patience
I swear I near went mental.

etc. etc.

Again, this is just my preferred personal style, and I am in no way the greatest living writer on the face of the earth. But hopefully not the worst either.
I really hope this has been helpful to you in a small way. Check out some of my poems if you like and you can tell me your honest opinion, because I am really Tough without Acting, as a result of the years spent suffering unnecessarily from emotional pain and trauma. That would toughen anyone up I hope.
Cheers,
Craig.

Wed, January 25th, 2012 12:27am

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hey sir! i love your comment :)
oh.. your story seems to be sad..(i can say) well, my personal reason why i wrote a horror novel like that is because i want to forget something about romance..i want to avoid thinking romantically..that only makes me soft..(dont have to tell my long, personal story)
thanks so much for responding to my reading request, my friend. i can't say that i know everything about you but believe me, i understand what you mean..
to be honest, i always suck in poetry..i never attempted to make a poem before because all was bad at all..but one day, i tried to make a poem called 'heart of bitterness'..some people who read and comment to it inspired me a lot that brings me here^^
yeah i now.. too, much pain will always toughen someone..i understand how it feels..even now, i cant say that i already overcome all the emotional pain i felt before, but i look at myself as a 'strong' person although i know im not..i always smile and continue to smile everyday b'coz i dont want to look older than my age :) and besides, i cant live a day without smile, so, that's the perfect mask that i could ever use to make me appear like what i am now..all this time, im still acting tough outside, but inside, im really crying..
another one, i think i agree with you..what you mentioned is the 'real horror'..betrayal, heartaches, etc..a worst nightmare indeed..
and thanks so much for a wonderful advice and help.. i promise to visit your page when i had an opportunity..
thanks again for sharing some details.. take care always
--michelle

Wed, January 25th, 2012 3:56am

bobthebuilder

I can relate to this, life doesn't always work out the way you want it to.

Sun, January 29th, 2012 5:21pm

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very true.. thanks for the comment and read! :))

Sun, January 29th, 2012 5:57pm

Imagine Words

This reminds me of an Evenescence song, i love Evenescence :D great work, between the lines there was a lot of emotion and effort put into writing this poem. Once more great work :)

Mon, January 30th, 2012 11:22am

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really? lol xD what particular song of Evanescence?
oh.. Evanescence, i love that band so much! :)
and thanks friend for taking time to read :))

Mon, January 30th, 2012 4:22am

yue thao

I do that alot cuz none of my friends dont give a crap bout it. Except for one who understands my situation the most!

Great poem and I can relate to this! Ur English is great ! ;)

Fri, February 10th, 2012 9:16pm

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yep..there are some types of friends who never care for the feelings of another friend..
lol..thanks so much :)

Fri, February 10th, 2012 10:46pm

RazorBlade

This is a nice poem Michelle. So many times I think masculinity causes many men to say "I'm ok". But even women do to. Good job and I enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing and keep writing....

Mon, February 13th, 2012 9:31am

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thanks so much friend!
yeah..probably men do this often, but also us, women do^^

Tue, February 14th, 2012 4:22am

runewolf

:( AWESOME peom but hey for what its worth if ur ever in pain again you can talk to me, and i wont judge or tell anyone (not that it matters we live waaaaaaaaayy far away)
but again AMAZING poem with a ton of meaning and emotion behind it. great job^^

Sat, February 25th, 2012 3:24am

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thanks so much friend :))
(yep..distance doesnt matter :))
im really thankful bcoz of you :))

Fri, February 24th, 2012 10:02pm

Basilia

Aaah!so fine portrayal of self dual emotions actually trying to make self a strong person.great!i can even relate to this..i guess this happens with everyone may not all the time but at some instance. anyways great job dear :) keep writing

Thu, March 1st, 2012 3:59pm

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thank you so much my friend! :)
love your comment :)

Fri, March 2nd, 2012 2:50am

Ice Winifr3d

Who doesn't act like this every now and then anyway? I know i do, but for different reasons. :) *claps her hands* you have a gift for writing poetry!

Tue, March 6th, 2012 6:44pm

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yeah, me, too^^
aww.. thanks so much friend! :) actually, i always suck in poetry before.. XD

Wed, March 7th, 2012 3:24pm

infiniteloveforyou

pag nasasaktan ka na ipakita mo na hindi ung itinatago mo pa the more you kept your tears the more it showed up diba . kasi pag ipinapakita mong strong ka nobody might care to you ... so don't be sad enjoy your life and always thanks god

Thu, March 8th, 2012 1:39am

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yep.. that's really my mistake.. that's why nobody cared to ask me if i was hurt..
thanks so much! :) you brighten up my day :))

Wed, March 7th, 2012 7:32pm

Semoyia

I love it, it's a really good poem and really shows the face behind the mask.

Sun, April 1st, 2012 7:14pm

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thanks so much my friend~! :))

Mon, April 2nd, 2012 3:01am

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