Birth of a Spirit

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Other  |  House: Booksie Classic

This was written after a dream. This woman, whom I was watching in this scene changed so drastically from being human to something so entirely ethereal... it seems only fitting to write about this.

Her palms are sweaty.
She sees the velvety waves before her sight.
Her heart is a jackhammer
Begging to explode in her chest.
She smells the air—
It is filled with shadows and cold molecules.
Her mind is racing
As the temptation to look behind grows more vehement.
Looking behind would leave her
As a pillar of salt—
Worse than dead…
Dead and useless.
She must dive into the unknown.
Her lungs endure pressure beyond
What any human can imagine.
She endures the loneliness and the dark.
Her eyes are bleeding and sliding down her face due to
The corrosion of the sea.
Her youth is peeled away by the tides
Layer by layer.
Then, the tide offers her to a distant shore—
One free of strife
And accepting of any intentions.
Once on this shore,
She breathes.
The trees stir.
She props herself up.
Birds spread their wings to fly readily.
She sighs.
A cool breeze lifts the tiger’s frown.
She, the lady born from necessity and trial,
The soul that is kind
And breathtakingly cruel,
Is the spirit of the wind.


Submitted: May 07, 2010

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Jamie Rambo

Lovely piece.

"She sighs.
A cool breeze lifts the tiger’s frown."

Love it.

Thanks for the wonderful read. Come check out some of my work if you have the time.

J. R.

Fri, May 7th, 2010 2:44pm

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Thank you for commenting and complimenting! :D

Wed, May 12th, 2010 1:08am

jwb

...
... Very good poem. I like it and you get my vote.
...

Fri, May 7th, 2010 6:49pm

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Thank you for commenting and complimenting! :D

Wed, May 12th, 2010 1:07am

Graeme Montrose

Good poem well done

Sat, May 8th, 2010 5:55am

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Thank you! :D

Appreciate the comment.

Wed, May 12th, 2010 1:07am

palewriter

After reading it through the second time it all made sense. An excellent poem with so much involved yet it all ties together so seamlessly. The metaphors are great. Good job Snow.

Mon, May 10th, 2010 4:53pm

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Glad it made some sense. ...It was a dream, and if you could make sense of it, you're better off than me. :P

Thank you for commenting and complimenting!

Wed, May 12th, 2010 1:06am

Tree Star

Amazingly vivid! This reminds me of my aunt who battled cancer. You conveyed a lot of strength in this poem (something we all need when facing the unknown). I hope you have more dreams that inspire more brilliant writing Snow!

\m/ (>_

Mon, May 17th, 2010 3:21pm

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:) I am glad you enjoyed this, Tree!

We all need strength when facing the unknown. :D

Wed, May 19th, 2010 1:16pm

Robert Wright

Dear Snow,

It reads like a dream. Our wonderful but feeble brains try, while we sleep, to compile the things we have lately experienced. The results are often bizarre, with disconnected elements; tomorrow's task for the waking mind.

No one puts it into words, and keeping the dreamlike integrity, better than you. Here's to the ethereal things, and to the writers who bring it down to us Earthlings.

Ever yours,
....rob

Sat, May 22nd, 2010 11:34pm

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:) This made me smile.

If I can write and not make much sense...then I guess the text is alright. :D hahaha

Thank you for being so kind, as usual.

Cheers.

Mon, May 31st, 2010 9:44pm

LupusSteppe

As so often, your words are beautifully crafted.

To me the panic that overwhelms, possibly even kills, has led to a beautiful rebirth.

I would love to experience such a dream.

Keep sharing

Wed, May 26th, 2010 2:21am

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:) My dreams have been eerie lately, so the urge to write them has dimmed a bit. :\

Thank you for commenting and complimenting!

Mon, May 31st, 2010 9:43pm

daze

Really cool poem, it was interesting how it sort of turned into a short narrative or like a song, almost like watching a scene from a dream or something. Really liked it (though the ending confused me!)

Wed, May 26th, 2010 2:35pm

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hahahahaha!

Thank you for commenting. :D

Mon, May 31st, 2010 9:41pm

Johnny Redd

The depth of meaning paints with a broad brush across millenia from which we all came. The sea breeze flows freely through her spirit and from the expanse of the ocean space, she rises to take her place in the brave new world of modern life. I always love to read your work, your poems especially.

Fri, May 28th, 2010 5:19pm

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You always say the most insightful things.

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Mon, May 31st, 2010 9:41pm

jafri

Unbelievably good! that was fantastic piece of work. very thoughtful...
I loved it

can u check my stuff too! and leave a comment!

Mon, June 7th, 2010 7:11am

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Glad you enjoyed this.

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Wed, June 16th, 2010 4:41am

zainub ajmal

the ending was simply breathtaking....

Fri, June 25th, 2010 3:27pm

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:) I am certainly glad you liked it.

Thank you for commenting. :D

Tue, June 29th, 2010 2:15am

Capman

Love it. I wish my mind worked like this, to come up with such great ideas for poems.

Thu, July 1st, 2010 10:27pm

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haha, This was just a dream. Perhaps you could attempt to remember dreams and write them down the next day? ^.^

Your mind works in a way many other's cannot. Be proud of that. :D

Thank you for commenting and complimenting!

Sat, July 3rd, 2010 5:47am

Frank237

I didnt want to stop reading, i hope you can get a chance to chech me out would be a pleasure. you have a graet mind.

Fri, July 16th, 2010 9:54am

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haha! Sure, I'll check out some of your stuff. :P

I am glad you enjoyed this.

Thank you for commenting and complimenting. :D

Fri, July 16th, 2010 3:23am

jeffhzlprk

Good work!

Wed, July 21st, 2010 4:05pm

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Thank you for commenting and complimenting. :D

Wed, August 4th, 2010 1:23am

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