Language of stars

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Status: Finished  |  Genre: Poetry  |  House: Booksie Classic

A very simple piece, plainly written, but I like the message...

The stars they have a language,

they speak of life and death,

they whisper softly to me,

abate my icy breath.

They send me words of comfort,

you're not alone they say,

winking brightly at me,

chasing my fears away.

I often lay in grass at night,

I stare up at the sky,

I ask them questions of my life,

await their calm reply.

Your life is just beginning,

you analyse too much,

Love and Laugh as best you can,

and relax just a touch.

I lay with friends, gaze at the stars,

they twinkle down at me,

no more asking questions,

I'm happy to just be.


Submitted: November 19, 2008

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Alice Oiseau

ohhh this brought back soooo many memories for me... wow. ok. ha.
anyways.
honestly nothing jaw dropping, but whos to say all poetry needs to be jaw dropping?
what i really loved was that this is sweetly written -- does that make sense? sweet, like sugar ^^ it has a sugar taste to it. [i often describe writing to having tastes and colors, along with the emotions of course]

it was a pleasure to read!
keep up the writing ^^

Thu, November 20th, 2008 12:40am

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I didn't expect anyone to find it jaw dropping to be honest, I wrote it in about 5 minutes and there wasn't a ton of feeling behind it. But it's weird you should say that about it being sugary sweet because as I was writing it, all I kept thinking was how candy coated it seemed! Thank you for taking the time to read and comment xx

Wed, November 19th, 2008 4:45pm

telly

woah! i like it?

Thu, November 20th, 2008 10:14am

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thank you! xx

Thu, November 20th, 2008 8:28am

nid

Your Imagination has soar up to the stars.. Your creativity is unique. Good rhyming.
You are invited to read my poem "Hope at the end of the tunnel" and comment on it. Enjoy reading...

Fri, November 21st, 2008 10:10am

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I've never received such an eloquent comment! I look forward to reading your work. xx

Fri, November 21st, 2008 4:07am

Gentlespirit

Sweetly written yes, but in there too, there is wisdom, wisdom perhaps held within your soul, knowledge of life's gifts and opportunities. The poem is nicely paced and rather succinct. I really liked it for its wisdom and honesty.

Mon, December 8th, 2008 11:06am

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I'm flattered! Thank you for your kind words xx

Mon, December 8th, 2008 8:13am

Gift Of Noni

Soriah,

This is a lovely poem. In the modern world, we spend far too little time gazing at the stars. Even when we do look up at night, light polution obscures their true magnificance. You have obviously seen them =)

Kind regards,

Tim

Wed, December 10th, 2008 2:35am

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To be honest I seem to see them more when I close my eyes these days! I've become obsessed with stars over the past few years so I just had to write about them!

Tue, March 17th, 2009 7:04am

Sophie McNamara

I want to print this poem and put it on my wall to keep reading. Personally this is a poem that really really touched me...reminded me in parts of someone quoting shakespear.
I will show this to everyone I know as it needs to be read! Love, love, love it!
I am now definately a fan...

Tue, March 17th, 2009 8:27pm

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Thank you so much, I'm very flattered! I do read a lot of shakespeare, maybe some of it shows in my writing...

Tue, March 17th, 2009 2:32pm

Islandjam2990

I like this one! Very cool, the subject matter is interesting in the sense that you almost get the impression the character is alone, but then they talk about being happy and just trying to live their life. Awesome, keep up the good work.

Mon, March 23rd, 2009 2:07pm

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Thank you, Glad you liked it! :)

Mon, March 23rd, 2009 7:14am

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